~ Teardrops from the Universe

~ Some metaphors can be deeper than you think.

~ Teardrops from the Universe

 

 

Shadows dancing on clear water

From above is every cloud

As a deeper thought

Reflected into the deep azure,

White bottoms of sand

Everything is fluid,

The smell of Ozone

Reflection of the sky

But thoughts drown

As the crying sky,

Opens her heart

And can't be healed

Where tears from the universe

Deepening the mass

As there is no ending

Nor a beginning

It shall just be left right there

To be...

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

"Reflected", "Reflection" of things seen, of things... unseen. The reflection seems to be more internal in this piece. Aftet all, can't the universe be defined from the infinite large to the infinite small? Funny how visual stimulation can trigger such deep emotions, questions. "The smell of Ozone", as a strange electricity connecting us with the rest of the world... Are we all one, or alone? I too reach the conclusion of your words and wonder: "It shall just be left right there/ To be..." Very powerful writing Elisa, you express so much, just beautiful.. Thank you for sharing with us.

What a nice review, again :) happy to read this... thank you very much !!! :)

[MOON]

The title striking, .. everything is fluid , the smell of ozone, the universe crying .. left right there to be .. Stunning write.

[patricia]

Amazing. This is a very special poem. It touches on sublime. Just perfect.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww, this touched my heart. I felt like wanting to cry somehow! This poem is deep.
But to me, it's like a heart that has been broken... and with all the pains it has gone through.. it cannot be healed.. =( Awww... this saddens me but I loved it at the same time. Wonderful work Elisa!! =)

[Distant horizons]

Oh............this is just hauntingly beautiful. Just, beautiful. Perfect essence of beauty and the pain we cause it. I'll come back later to say something else other than beautiful, but for now

Beautiful
Beautiful
Beautiful