~ Teardrops from the Universe

~ Some metaphors can be deeper than you think.

~ Teardrops from the Universe

 

 

Shadows dancing on clear water

From above is every cloud

As a deeper thought

Reflected into the deep azure,

White bottoms of sand

Everything is fluid,

The smell of Ozone

Reflection of the sky

But thoughts drown

As the crying sky,

Opens her heart

And can't be healed

Where tears from the universe

Deepening the mass

As there is no ending

Nor a beginning

It shall just be left right there

To be...

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

"Reflected", "Reflection" of things seen, of things... unseen. The reflection seems to be more internal in this piece. Aftet all, can't the universe be defined from the infinite large to the infinite small? Funny how visual stimulation can trigger such deep emotions, questions. "The smell of Ozone", as a strange electricity connecting us with the rest of the world... Are we all one, or alone? I too reach the conclusion of your words and wonder: "It shall just be left right there/ To be..." Very powerful writing Elisa, you express so much, just beautiful.. Thank you for sharing with us.

What a nice review, again :) happy to read this... thank you very much !!! :)

[Leigh]

Beautifully crafted piece

[Stacey Watts]

Beautifully crafted here. The words flow smoothly and create a euphoria of calming images. Very well expressed here.

[Suditi]

As there is no ending
Nor a beginning
It shall just be left right there
To be...

Such a lovely thought.
A beautifully written poem.
Amazing message.

[0AudreyClaire0]

This was very pretty. Fantastic job. :)
-Aud

[0AudreyClaire0]

That was very pretty. Fantastic job. :)
-Aus

[?]

Lovely piece...evoked emotions...touching

[WhiteWillow]

So lovely, poignant, and soulful. Things in life happen, and they have to "be left right there." No point in analyzing, or harping on the past. It is what it is.

[Richard Lane]

I will repeat the sentiments below, as I was moved by the emotions evoked through the lines you've written. In other words, what you've given us is an excellent poem that also tells a story. Beautifully done Elisa. :-)

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Intriguing, beautifully written write. A heartfelt piece to nature and the universe. Nicely done.

[Monica]

Your poem is full of deep emotion....of which you expressed beautifully. I can feel sadness while reading. The video and music are a nice compliment to your words, they add great feeling.
It s well penned and a great read!