~ Teardrops from the Universe

~ Some metaphors can be deeper than you think.

~ Teardrops from the Universe

 

 

Shadows dancing on clear water

From above is every cloud

As a deeper thought

Reflected into the deep azure,

White bottoms of sand

Everything is fluid,

The smell of Ozone

Reflection of the sky

But thoughts drown

As the crying sky,

Opens her heart

And can't be healed

Where tears from the universe

Deepening the mass

As there is no ending

Nor a beginning

It shall just be left right there

To be...

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

"Reflected", "Reflection" of things seen, of things... unseen. The reflection seems to be more internal in this piece. Aftet all, can't the universe be defined from the infinite large to the infinite small? Funny how visual stimulation can trigger such deep emotions, questions. "The smell of Ozone", as a strange electricity connecting us with the rest of the world... Are we all one, or alone? I too reach the conclusion of your words and wonder: "It shall just be left right there/ To be..." Very powerful writing Elisa, you express so much, just beautiful.. Thank you for sharing with us.

What a nice review, again :) happy to read this... thank you very much !!! :)

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

A very transparent write! That's part of your unique style me thinks! Like caring innocence and whimsical appreciation.

Thank you Michael, I wrote this write in a very difficult periode. You decide if it's icy, or heartfelt... as a reader... I wrote it out of my body, you know...

[Yasmin]

woow
This is incredible
I loved the end the most
And your final touch with the music
Good job :)

Thank you very much Dear xx :)

[Yasmin]

You are welcomed :)

"-"

[Yasmin]

:)

[Muse]

Coming back for a second read...because well...it's just so pretty. And it has a healing quality...can't explain it. x

Thank you sister x

[Moflo]

I like the concept of "teardrops from the universe," it is deep and mysterious and paints a very scenic image in the reader's mind. Your detail is superb and you use great words to paint your picture. Great job.

Thank you dear one! Eli

[Moflo]

Anytime! Hope all is well over there!

It is, thanks, hope you're great too!

[Tree]

Very moving. But I sensed hope, too. This was well written, a poem to read
out loud. A healing piece... nice work Eli.

Thank you sweet friend

great work! writing/picture/music!

[Sugar Plum ♥]

just no words, this poem can be better felt and red many times, while listening the lovely relaxing piece! your poems have effect of meditation...

Thank you deeply, this one I wrote when I cried, and when I was truely sad. This poem gave me release. I had a difficult time on this moment. And tried to capture it compact as my feelings felt... xo

[penNhand]

I love how you set up the reader by the excellent photo and music to suit your poems perfectly. I shall read another.

[SecretShadow]

true denounces the petals of a flower wilting in time's essense of a forgotten raindrop of hope's everlasting denial of self pronounced freedom.