~ The Woman behind her Mask (Part 2.)

~ The Woman behind her Mask (Part 2.)

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~ Part Two ;) A Poetic story this night as an incognito devised to save a woman from the vexation of thinking...

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~ The Woman behind her Mask… (Part 2.)

 

 

 

She walked away in the busy crowd, so numbed by every sound,

Petrified and bedazzled by true love, where her heart was leading her,

Her feet just walked profoundly tapping on the Venetian ground,

Where her mind was taking her, and where her eyes translated,

Her upper feeling which her heart couldn’t bring her to, not knowing

Her mission was deadly activated , she had no clue…where she was walking to…

 

He was around, but couldn’t find her yet,  while she started to run,

The violin played harder and sharper, near the same corner he passed before,

And the people danced so dizzy in front of her, she couldn’t  handle it no more

They were laughing and kissing, out loud, this was such a confusing night…

In trance everyone was, or drunk, she felt alone and full of fear, with a fuzzy sight

It was him in any minute, who could be so near… fear, yes! But her mind, just bright.

 

Her intuition was her guiding map, she felt in love so badly before…

She was the same time scared, because only he, could feel her fears,

He sniffed her this time better than he failed, before, oh yes he was focused more...

She was running the wrong direction, in the maze of the Venetian Labyrinth

She turned in circles, as she remembered she was there before…

The same violin playing, scary and haunting air to breath, and he was there to score…

 

He passed just some meters next to her, His eyebrows curled up,

Too much masks she saw, and a smoke of sweat was there,

But, she recognized his, through all of this, with the right passing air,

His odore… his smell, as she started to ran away as fast as she could,

She threw her high heels into the azure blue water, without thinking

To make more speed, and run, faster, but he, saw them sinking,

 

He followed her trough every street,  yelling her name so hard…

She couldn’t stop running, and parades passed beside her way,

So loud, and confusing, for him, to see her clearly moving away,

He was focused and sharps his eyes, while sniffing her perfume…

She found a gondola to hide in, but her dress was as a red flower to bloom

It betrayed her so clearly, as her plan was failed, into darkly doom

 

He was there too, and saw her red dress hang out of the gondola,

As he came closer to find what he needed… his mind so clear

His breath so raw, and that heavy she could hear him thinking…

As it could ever be over any minute, she thought,

As she left the bottom and pulled off the anchor

Too far away into nothing what was left… but rancor

 

And then he jumped into the gondola, to take her hand,

He pushed her to his hot and warm body closely,

Almost out of oxygen and heavy gasping he stared at her

He watched her in the eye, and started to kiss her deeply

His hands formed a circle around her neck…she couldn’t resist

His strong and beautiful male formed wrists…

 

~ Elisa Laura,

  

To be continued…

© 2013


Author's Note



~ Yes, people, this was "PART TWO"

Again nothing more than my own creativity, no film script or theme, just the way I was in Italy and sniffed the Venetian air, and brought my mind filled with some stories... Hope you like them ;)

Thank you xx

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so passionate and hot love in Venice! I like the moving of the woman, it looks like a game in a maze of love, it has the beauty of the ancient times, of hidden emotions and impulses of desire...I love the theme of masques, as they are hiding as much as showing the truth "self"..wonderful poem-story, dear ELi!
{nia}
11.33 am
02.04.13


Posted 11 Years Ago


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11 Years Ago

Thank you so dearly for all, I couldn't thank you enough my sweetest, and I can't wait to read your .. read more



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Oh my! (gasping) So dramatic! I love this Eli! Your writing just exudes class. You are one Class Act, lady! Such admiration for the beauty of your words. This story is so romantic and the ending Superb! Love, Love, Love THIS!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Her intuition was a guiding map" That was my favorite part. Sounded real smooth. I love it when things have a nice flow. "Venetian Labyrinth" too. And "betrayed her so clearly". There are so many bits that are a pleasure to read. Only red flags for me were using the words true and love together so early on and the line "she couldn't handle it no more". Other than that, fun to read. Great job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

**high-fives the screen** ELI!!!! that was an amazing write!!! I loved how you displayed the emotion of it all... AWESOME WRITE!!! **jumps and clapps like a litto kid, then tips my lyrical wand to you**

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love seem to turn into a game with all the tempting and teasing we do to build up the anticipation of consummating the relationship... such vivid imagery made the scene play out in my head like a classic romantic movie.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow...Elisa! What a beautiful poem/story... Got me involved me since the first line... so beautiful descriptions, and so real... When he jumped into the gondola, my heart jumped too! I could feel the emotion...
Wonderful! Just a perfect writing.
((((Hugs))))
*Mary*

Posted 12 Years Ago


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