~ The Woman behind her Mask (Part 2.)

~ The Woman behind her Mask (Part 2.)

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~ Part Two ;) A Poetic story this night as an incognito devised to save a woman from the vexation of thinking...

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~ The Woman behind her Mask… (Part 2.)

 

 

 

She walked away in the busy crowd, so numbed by every sound,

Petrified and bedazzled by true love, where her heart was leading her,

Her feet just walked profoundly tapping on the Venetian ground,

Where her mind was taking her, and where her eyes translated,

Her upper feeling which her heart couldn’t bring her to, not knowing

Her mission was deadly activated , she had no clue…where she was walking to…

 

He was around, but couldn’t find her yet,  while she started to run,

The violin played harder and sharper, near the same corner he passed before,

And the people danced so dizzy in front of her, she couldn’t  handle it no more

They were laughing and kissing, out loud, this was such a confusing night…

In trance everyone was, or drunk, she felt alone and full of fear, with a fuzzy sight

It was him in any minute, who could be so near… fear, yes! But her mind, just bright.

 

Her intuition was her guiding map, she felt in love so badly before…

She was the same time scared, because only he, could feel her fears,

He sniffed her this time better than he failed, before, oh yes he was focused more...

She was running the wrong direction, in the maze of the Venetian Labyrinth

She turned in circles, as she remembered she was there before…

The same violin playing, scary and haunting air to breath, and he was there to score…

 

He passed just some meters next to her, His eyebrows curled up,

Too much masks she saw, and a smoke of sweat was there,

But, she recognized his, through all of this, with the right passing air,

His odore… his smell, as she started to ran away as fast as she could,

She threw her high heels into the azure blue water, without thinking

To make more speed, and run, faster, but he, saw them sinking,

 

He followed her trough every street,  yelling her name so hard…

She couldn’t stop running, and parades passed beside her way,

So loud, and confusing, for him, to see her clearly moving away,

He was focused and sharps his eyes, while sniffing her perfume…

She found a gondola to hide in, but her dress was as a red flower to bloom

It betrayed her so clearly, as her plan was failed, into darkly doom

 

He was there too, and saw her red dress hang out of the gondola,

As he came closer to find what he needed… his mind so clear

His breath so raw, and that heavy she could hear him thinking…

As it could ever be over any minute, she thought,

As she left the bottom and pulled off the anchor

Too far away into nothing what was left… but rancor

 

And then he jumped into the gondola, to take her hand,

He pushed her to his hot and warm body closely,

Almost out of oxygen and heavy gasping he stared at her

He watched her in the eye, and started to kiss her deeply

His hands formed a circle around her neck…she couldn’t resist

His strong and beautiful male formed wrists…

 

~ Elisa Laura,

  

To be continued…

© 2013


Author's Note



~ Yes, people, this was "PART TWO"

Again nothing more than my own creativity, no film script or theme, just the way I was in Italy and sniffed the Venetian air, and brought my mind filled with some stories... Hope you like them ;)

Thank you xx

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so passionate and hot love in Venice! I like the moving of the woman, it looks like a game in a maze of love, it has the beauty of the ancient times, of hidden emotions and impulses of desire...I love the theme of masques, as they are hiding as much as showing the truth "self"..wonderful poem-story, dear ELi!
{nia}
11.33 am
02.04.13


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11 Years Ago

Thank you so dearly for all, I couldn't thank you enough my sweetest, and I can't wait to read your .. read more



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Ohhh so intense! I loved it; a great second part to a great story! It's all well written, and again I love your poetic style of storytelling. The end when he finds her is my favorite part, and when she hears the violin, I don't know why but I could picture it clearly. Well done! In time I will read part three, which I have no doubt will be an exciting conclusion :)

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Alexander Rodgers

11 Years Ago

Drink plenty of water and take aspirin! Get better! It's never good to be feeling under the weather .. read more

11 Years Ago

I will..... thank you so much! :) true, it won't get spring here... the world is lost.... we need to.. read more
Alexander Rodgers

11 Years Ago

You're welcome :P. It won't sprint here either, it's still a grumpy old man winter :(. It feels like.. read more
so passionate and hot love in Venice! I like the moving of the woman, it looks like a game in a maze of love, it has the beauty of the ancient times, of hidden emotions and impulses of desire...I love the theme of masques, as they are hiding as much as showing the truth "self"..wonderful poem-story, dear ELi!
{nia}
11.33 am
02.04.13


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you so dearly for all, I couldn't thank you enough my sweetest, and I can't wait to read your .. read more
go bronách

Posted 12 Years Ago


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12 Years Ago

nach bhfuil gach rud réaltacht cé ;) Agus beidh mé fós ina fhile...
Psychotic as he may be, his desire is only for her, his heart is true in that respect. She is running aimlessly in paranoia, she does not know what she wants, yet destiny seems to know she needs. She is running from that one true heart, that one true love. This poem feels like a dream, but is classic Gothic romance (like Phantom of the Opera, Beauty and the Beast), and it sounds so nice to visit the Carnival in Venice. I really enjoy how this trillogy comes together, the imagery, and the theme. Nice writing Eli :) And now for part 3...

Posted 12 Years Ago


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WOW deep and powerful, Dramatic feel to it,
So nicely written. I loved the imagery.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Italy? Jealous! I always had a fetish for masks...but I never wrote about it. Reading your words was like watching the movie Dangerous Beauty....ever seen it?

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Very well written, I do hope you continue it.
And it does make me think of Italy. Nicely written. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Sounds much akin to a fox hunt....

I imagine Venice to be very much like that, a whirlwind of sights, sounds, emotions and unknown adventure... because what else is Venice for? Amore.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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A powerful unveiling that had my mind racing... the scene is so vivid and it made me truly wonder of our lives as well... how many wear masks.. how many live transparent lives... Looking forward to more!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Beatiful write.love the style of your writes. Felt the suspense in this

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