My dear friend, although it is in the first person I interpreted this piece as a walk between the personal experiences of two people. The narrator dives into her personal realm, to feel, to imagine, to love, to walk away. But it is a seperate (not necessarily different but seperate) experience from her lover. And in that negative space created by the words, one can't help but think of that lover, what is he thinking? Is he okay with this outcome? To that subjective trap, there is reconciliation in both characters experienceing the same thing, i.e., the rain storm that she is witness to and the music it creates on his widowpane . . . or mutual love, itself. There is a weave in his poem of touch and distance that is absolute magic and requires great skill to achieve. Thank you for posting.
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Thank you dear for such a wonderful intense review. I truly appreciate you, I was kinda busy the who.. read moreThank you dear for such a wonderful intense review. I truly appreciate you, I was kinda busy the whole week, and this weekend. Not had much time to be here... I do love it what you got out of this, and I appreciate your reviews very much, you really read things. Thank you W.
beautifully written Elisa dear, goes from melancholy to hope and dreams and desires wonderful.
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Thank you so much Moon good to see you again, my round will be soon... and will come by for you too,.. read moreThank you so much Moon good to see you again, my round will be soon... and will come by for you too, soentjies en drukkies from here... ;) I'm glad you enjoyed this one... x
a delightful sensual journey...making love to nature, to words to another...regardless of distance....thoughts can make that distance smaller...and there can be peace within...deep contentment.
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Thank you very much my dear friend, Indeed, there can be peace there. My round will be soon, I will.. read moreThank you very much my dear friend, Indeed, there can be peace there. My round will be soon, I will come by for you of course! :) take care.
You have a splendid way of gathering the words close to your heart and rendering them into poetic song. If you like music with your pieces try Lisa Gerrard. If you saw Gladiator she sings when Russell Crowe discovers his family killed. It's called Sorrow.
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Thank you so much Alfred, and yes, I know Lisa Gerrard and all her albums, she's awesome. I have her.. read moreThank you so much Alfred, and yes, I know Lisa Gerrard and all her albums, she's awesome. I have her music already, her voice is from out of this world, beautiful indeed... thank you for being here, and leaving your thoughts my friend. :)
Baroque - A style using exaggerated motion and clear, easily interpreted detail to evoke emotion. That's what is going on here. Exaggerated yet clear.....clear as the emotions captured here.
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Grazie dal cuore, thanks from my heart, friend :) very appreciated.
Making love to words...yes, that is what poets do. We caress them and move them into the empty spaces of our lives. We all hope our words will last long after we are gone. We hope others will remember us through our words. Our legacy to those we love and perhaps to those we never had the pleasure to meet. Constant physical pain is so difficult to deal with. We all need a way to cope. If words provide you with a sweet solitude and serenity, I am pleased you have found them, Eli. So much love in this poem...and a poignant air of romance. Yes, he can feel your presence through your words and perhaps he will hear your melody just as beautifully as you hear it in the back of your mind. Such a velvety soft poem. Zoals altijd, je woorden zijn muziek! Knuffels, Lydi**
Dank je wel lieverd, je woorden brengen mij altijd veel liefde en geluk! Jij begrijpt dingen als gee.. read moreDank je wel lieverd, je woorden brengen mij altijd veel liefde en geluk! Jij begrijpt dingen als geen ander. :) I thank you from out of the bottom of my heart, for being here, and leave your thoughts, upon this little scribble/dream, I wrote out this time... xx and knuffels!
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Your little "scribbles" are worth their weight in gold, Eli! Lydi**
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Awee, you humble me dear. Thanks a bunch, and so are yours Lydi... I'm your biggest fan. xx
This started of very dark and then gradually got lighter, bringing hope. I love the imagery you have created for me and the line " I shall not bother you, With my baroque mind" and the second stanza as a whole, that seems to be a turning point from one mood to another. Beautifully done.
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Thank you so very much Leigh, I appreciate your words :) -x-
As always, you command attention.... it's a performance one would not want to miss!
Love is like the wind, my man,
We are like the stream of essence
It comes and goes, when it feels the need;
It’s as elusive as spring cannot touch winter,
And the birds not sing at night, but I…
Just hummed some silent whispers"~This stanza truly spoke to me...sigh....
Fantastic write!~xoxo~:)
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Thank you dearest for picking those lines out... your words always mean much to me, you know that. I.. read moreThank you dearest for picking those lines out... your words always mean much to me, you know that. I'm happy you find it a read worth reading. ((HUGS)) -xxx-
First off I adore the title, what a sweet concept. You have that knack for taking something intangible and making it come to life before our eyes. Usually I have no words for precisely how your poetry makes me feel, it's like floating in your words, literally being present in your poetic world...and I never want to leave this place...stunningly gorgeous, it's purely magical cara. :) xo
Dancing with raindrops, I'm there....
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Mia cara amica, grazie dal cuore, your words always make me fly too ^.^ It's good to have you by, an.. read moreMia cara amica, grazie dal cuore, your words always make me fly too ^.^ It's good to have you by, and can't thank you enough for your precious words sorella xx much love.
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All we need now is an Italiano feast, vino rosso, and we have it all. ;) Much love to you my sweet .. read moreAll we need now is an Italiano feast, vino rosso, and we have it all. ;) Much love to you my sweet Eli. xo
So so true... I miss it... I need it badly lol... If you are ever here, you need to call me ;) xoxo
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I'm dying to go back, hopefully soon, that would be perfecto. :) xo
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Oh, yes.... that would be so good, for you. Let me know when cara!! :) I don't want to miss it -xoxo.. read moreOh, yes.... that would be so good, for you. Let me know when cara!! :) I don't want to miss it -xoxoxo-
My dear friend, although it is in the first person I interpreted this piece as a walk between the personal experiences of two people. The narrator dives into her personal realm, to feel, to imagine, to love, to walk away. But it is a seperate (not necessarily different but seperate) experience from her lover. And in that negative space created by the words, one can't help but think of that lover, what is he thinking? Is he okay with this outcome? To that subjective trap, there is reconciliation in both characters experienceing the same thing, i.e., the rain storm that she is witness to and the music it creates on his widowpane . . . or mutual love, itself. There is a weave in his poem of touch and distance that is absolute magic and requires great skill to achieve. Thank you for posting.
Posted 10 Years Ago
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you dear for such a wonderful intense review. I truly appreciate you, I was kinda busy the who.. read moreThank you dear for such a wonderful intense review. I truly appreciate you, I was kinda busy the whole week, and this weekend. Not had much time to be here... I do love it what you got out of this, and I appreciate your reviews very much, you really read things. Thank you W.