~ Echoes

~ To love is to know distance, to love is to set one free...

~ Echoes

 

 

  The dusk of thoughts, felt aloof

          Where once a spectrum of light

From your presence held home,

             In the darker shimmer, minute by

Minute where the sun settled down, and the trees swayed

                        I silently kept my faith,

                     I loved my sky of

       Emerald hue, where clouds in little light passed by;

  And the sea sang songs, with foam of wisdom

                   Whooshing against the quay -

          Your voice, echoed a thousand times

                  Where a hundred times you’d  say;

       You’re winged my love, follow me and you

             Will see, where I just hide at day.

 

 

       ~ Elisa Laura                                                 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading/reviewing/rating -x- Enjoy!

Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

This speaks in volumes to me...Love echoing across distances was felt instantly while reading this.

I adore how almost every line line is broken. Bringing the love back around, over and over it seems..(I really like this style of formatting.)

The faith being silently kept. ^^ The beautiful night imagery crossing skies and oceans..Then the ending with the truth. Hehe (You are winged dear and so is your poetry.)

Finally the challenge. Follow on. xo

Wow, thank you for this stunning review, I can tell you, you did really feel it and understand it. (no exception, you always do ^^) lol haha... who said it was about me? hah! ;) lol I love your words, thank you dear :) :) xoxo

[David Scott]

Eli, this is magical...
I feel like this was a dream poem as well... a dream I have seen but never with the words and music you gave to me here today. This is like having someone color a black and white dream with Technicolor. Beyond lovely Eli.

Thank you my sweet friend! I do so appreciate this review, I tried to reach within a dream... :)

[David Scott]

Be assured, you have reached beyond you own dreams with this one.

That means a lot, thank you...

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Dearest Eli,

This is so beautifully conveyed... I felt the hope soaring in the sky...
The wings of dreams pausing to give love and light...
These are words from the heart, which echo faith in respite...

I love the whimsical tone in this piece...Eloquent write, Sis!~xoxo~:)

Dearest Sis, So good to have your words by, they mean so much to me! :) You felt is so good, so real, so true... Thank you for being here, thank you for sharing your thoughts -xoxo- :) I'm so glad you enjoyed!

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

Wow. This is a really great piece. I love all of the imagery. The flow was amazing - So smooth. There's many lines here that need to be remembered and echoed! :)

Thank you so so much Michael. :) always a pleasure to have you by! Thanks for loving the piece :)

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

My pleasure :)

[Renée]

umm Lovely Piece E L Echoes are just lovely...

Thank you kindly sweet Renée...... :)

[Renée]

always a pleasure E L ( :

[Thea]

Oh, the imagery was fantastic, Elisa. So breathtaking.
"The dusk of thoughts, felt aloof
Where once a spectrum of light"
I can see the poignant change you portrayed in this line. It seems like a turning point of something from good to bad, a hopeful longing for something that cannot be grasped.
I enjoyed the world play. There was 'that' feeling of wishing but at the same time, losing it at once, in just a blink of an eye. I was drawn by the thought of missing someone who is important to me. A very heartfelt poem. I liked it. ^^

Thank you so much Thrinna dear, I'm so glad with your beautiful reviews, I have the feeling you really read them, and understand them. Exactly, it's the "in between" I tried to convey here, and you got that perfectly. Thank you very much for your time, effort, and friendship girl! -x-

[Thea]

You're welcome, Elisa! Keep these awesome poems coming! ^^

Thank you dear ^^ I try too hehe, :) -x-

[Pax]

"the sea sang songs, with foam of wisdom"

Truly a marvel view, a learned insight to just be free of your throughts, running, hiding just around the corners of your hearts... to silently love the far away and let go another day, just love in a beautiful way of words and wisdom, to blast the loneliness and kept faith live in us to keep on moving on... life and love as beautiful in your words big sis... Great work!

Thank you dear, for making me smile, that line was important to me, you picked it out... you really get my poetry, and I love it. Sometimes we must move on, and we shall always hold a warm place in our hearts for the one we love... thank you with whole my heart! -x- ((HUG))

[Pax]

hugs... take care always... and you are most welcome... :)
love embrace us all as we find ourselves way back to our love ones...

[Edward Lancheister]

amazing words describe the dawn that coming, malam yang indah dalam balutan nuansa.

puisi yang indah :)

good wiring Nona Lisa

Terima kasih, kata-kata indah oleh anda nyong manis Maluku ;) selamat malam, sampai besok! :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Will see, where I just hide at day.
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Will see, where I just hide that day.

I wonder if that is what you meant in the last finale...this is full on imagery ---
also liked how this captures the moment in the ending lines...
the whole piece is resonating...but that's just my bottom line...

Thank you very much Glen, no, I meant it "at" day, for it's night in the poem, it's shimmering, and getting darker, he's hiding, "at" day, she "at" night... that's the clue :) they echoe to eachother, in all their woes... :) thank you very much my friend.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...thanks for the relay...good day...

My pleasure, friend, night here, but good day to you! :) thanks for your review!
I appreciate it.