~ Moonwater

~ Moonwater

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~ Moonwater, Elisa Laura, E.L. Death, Life, Dreams, Connection, White, High, Otherworldly, Surreal, Fantasy, Fictional, Message, Signs

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~ Moonwater

 

 

         Entangled, tied

             We felt before  -  we died

    In thoughts, death we kissed

        You and me

              All in white

 

           Moonwater - gleam,

     Shine so bright,

Upon our  faces with your light

 

         From here up high;

      We dance the sky, of blue and mist

 Of sleepless waltzes , and their twists

 

       We so lived in you, but died in me;

   Just one color now, is all we see

 

         Through the woods of high

    Surreal we become, as we die

          Moonwater shine!  

 

                          

                 “Let us fly”.

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2014


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That was so beautiful, like a whole book written perfectly in just a few words. So much story within this, it really blows my mind. The selection of music was amazing to have along with this piece. What is the name of the song? Your poem really takes me to a different place, I want to read it over and over so I can pretend that I live in that short moment. It was magical, no words can describe what you wrote. This review is pointless because the only way to respond to reading this is by the sign of a gaping mouth.

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2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Michael, thank you so much oooh you humble me hehe... I am so glad, you truly enjoyed this dream (I .. read more



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This is some beautiful otherworldly dream. I enjoyed this out of body experience into
your ethereal world. I felt as if the world was so close, I could touch it, but still I was
immersed in the magic. Joy to read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Wow, thank you my dear friend, for your great words upon my little scribble, (dream) I had. :) I'm s.. read more
I love how you paired music with this, it fit the poem perfectly. You have spectacular rhythm. Everything is as smooth as glass water. Great talent, and write! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so so much Ally! :) your thoughts are greatly appreciated here! -x-
Just amazing. Again, the imagery is outstanding. "We so lived in you, but died in me" - Great and beautiful line. You are very talented! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so very much my friend for your nice reviews!! I'm pleased you enjoyed my work! :)
Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

10 Years Ago

You're very welcome! :)

10 Years Ago

............. :) thanks again!
Mystical and magical.....the whirling swirling images captured me in this one. It is as if the words were floating on fairy dust. Eli, this one is very special. It has an intricate sadness to it. Knuffels, Lydi**

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Yes, dear woman, oh it was a dream, of being on the other side... and it was so beautiful, (again) l.. read more
Lydia Shutter

10 Years Ago

Good! I am happy you are smiling! I have been away too. Just came back about 3 weeks ago. I have .. read more

10 Years Ago

A really, we were both away then... me too, so much to catch up, slowly I will :) just now I have fa.. read more
I just had to stop back and read another of your beautiful poems. I stare enchanted at your soft, sad but floating words. I really enjoy your poetry.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

I'm very grateful for your time, and sweet comments recently, I'm happy you enjoy my poetry. :) And.. read more
Have to confess as the music started to interfere with my poor concentration I looked under the chair thinking something anytime now the gnomes and fairies are coming to get me. Then the repetitive musical phrase started to get more creepy and at last aerial and surely enough got drowned in sound but that's not only where it stops as the poem reminded me of the Zen metaphor for human experience moon - in - the water. It is used to demonstrate how human experience is created not only by external objects, but also, and equally as much, by the nature of the mind and the structure of the senses
This was a sensory experience
Thank you Elisa Laura

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you for listening, feeling and really reading me. Your comment, is really appreciated here. I .. read more
Elisa, the mystery of the moon is one of my favorite topics and this blew me away. It was so beautiful and softly done in a way it just sets you at ease. Beautiful job! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend, it is of mine too lately, and I don't know what it is, but there is cha.. read more
Sumptuous thoughts dripping with grace!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much my dear!! ♥♥
Life is an illusion of differentiation which is lost upon death as we all dissolve into Moonwater’s silver- white (dream) gleam. I enjoyed how you introduced rhyme into each of your verses in a non-forced way.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Oh Aethereal, as always you bring something beautiful up to my writings, your words are really a gle.. read more

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