~ Light in the Sky

~ Light in the Sky

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~ Light in the Sky, Elisa Laura, E.L. Fantasy, Dramatic, Thunderstorms, Headaches, Migraine, Ozon, Weather, connection to nature, Blue, Green, WaterSign.

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 Light in the Sky

 

Stabbing metal pain,

      Burning through each line

Of my so cold body -


      The smell of ozone,  far away,

Misty,  mighty grand dense clouds

      In front of my train of thought

 

And a rail of blindness ;

     Cold chilly Icy wind,

The smell of ozone, yet behind

 

      Thunderstorms are on the way

Within this core of being;

      There is light in the Sky,

 

For those who are

     In deep pain,

And for those who are just feeling


 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2014


Author's Note

Enjoy! xx

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To be in tune with nature and to feel the change of weather before it occurs, a lightening before it strikes.. Being highly sensitive is not to be weak. On the contrary, it lets you perceive more than the ones who are not. It allows for you to more easily make out an entirety rather than a snippet, whilst aware there is more than meets the eye.

You express sympathy, comfort, togetherness.. by the end it is evident. It has its highs and lows to be a feeler, as with everything. Your hurt is my hurt is everyone's hurt, and I am reminded of "Powder", his wisdom and the suffering he had to endure prior to and during every thunderstorm. You describe a powerful sensing here, of what is and what is to come.

Next to fear there is love, a yin and yang for balance. You stand in between duality with a tentacle to each side that lets you sense both planes, similar to a butterfly, receptive as an antenna.. All is accessible to everyone. We're no different and there is beauty in that, in everything, whether it'd be considered negative, it is fuel for the inner artist.

Your writing is always exceedingly deep. It's fantastic, a pleasure to read and examine :)) xx

Posted 10 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Your reviews, are the mere powder itself my sweet friend... you reach in gateways, and further visio.. read more
Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

I'm so, so glad. Thank you as well ^^ I have much love for you, and your incredible art. x

10 Years Ago

And I for you! you're such a good friend to me, through thick and thin! ^^ through all weather, cold.. read more



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Very nice. The metaphor of the train in associated with thinking was quite effective. To me I felt as if the weather was taking place inside with all its natural ups and downs. Then, the reference to light..xx Truly a beautiful poem and very deep which of course I adore. Possano i tuoi cieli essere chiaro e le vostre giornate belle.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Grazie, dal cuore per parlare in Italiano con me, sono felice che fai.... the love for Gaia, here, a.. read more
joshua deathdealer

10 Years Ago

I too am enchanted with the weather. It's mysterious and magical as all natural things are. Oh I wis.. read more

10 Years Ago

Me too!!! that would be just fantastic... too gorgeous to think about, just in the stone age, maybe .. read more
It has come to my attention that somehow and some way, you seem to be improving as a writer. Which is the best of things you can be doing, so well done :) I can't exactly pinpoint it, but I've never been one to need specification on getting a feel for something. A wise writer once wrote that if you get criticism telling how you should have done it otherwise, they're wrong! Because it's your work not theirs. But if someone tells you there is something wrong without specifying, they're write. Here it works in the opposite. You're gaining, and it's good :) Thanks a bunch.

With regards to the poem, what can I say that wasn't suggested - an intenseness of discrepancy suggested at the end hit it home for me. Those who are, and those who are not. Great :) Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you once again, wow... This one actually rolled out as poetry should roll out, and it was an i.. read more
This is a great poem keep up the great work and them coming

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Melissa, thank you so much! I'm happy you enjoyed! :)
melissa

10 Years Ago

Your welcome
Interesting. I'm gathering a foreboding feeling from this piece. I enjoy that. It puts a smile on my face in a darker fashion. I hope my perception of your work isn't too far from your intended portrayal.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

I do like what you see in this... and feel in this. It was a mix of weather, migraine, pain, to feel.. read more
Shaun

10 Years Ago

A beautifully abstract way in portraying such an appalling affliction. Might I add that I too suffer.. read more

10 Years Ago

Of course, and oh no! :( I wished you didn't, for I know how it feels, I wished I could help to soft.. read more
" there is a light in the sky

for those who are in deep pain
and for those who are just feeling"

It requires to feel the wrath, the anguish to recognize the light. This is one of the many life's paradoxes that we sometimes forget to understand because we are too overwhelmed with so much negativity, not realizing that to feel them born the higher forms of virtue.


It so good to read you again, sis...love lots... :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you sweet Sis for this fantastic review.... :) I'm always so happy when you come by! I will be.. read more
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Pax
For those who are
In deep pain,
And for those who are just feeling

These last lines are just hitting many spots on my tiny, and sometimes numb heart... this made me smile, and just look at the skies and find the hope behind each lines of clouds, finding the sun that will warm the cold hearts of today.

oh mental pian
makes our heart drown in the rain
here, here, the life saver of hope
for us to cope
every stabbing
we keep on healing
the lights is all we needed
for the wounds to be sealed in this life's cycled wheel...

@Pax

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

And there, we are winged,
Double linked,
Trust is inked,
As family flies,
P.. read more
Pax

10 Years Ago

i wish i could see the everyday blessing like the way you do, big sis...
more often blind now.. read more
You have placed me in the middle of an April thunderstorm through the electric power of your squiggly ultra-violet beaming poem. Perhaps I’ll write a thunderstorm poem too:

Blue

Thunder, wind, and rain
take away my pain.
Flashing streaks of blue
form the eyes of you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Oh Aethereal, my friend, you are so gifted, in words, and brain. :) Lovely, just lovely! thank you s.. read more
Aethereal

10 Years Ago

You're welcome!
dear Elisa Laura... Our weather has been
exactly as you have described the cold
chilly ice wind with a dark sky. Now there
is hope with sunshine and a bit of warmth.
Your golden pen has painted the end if
winter when March comes in like a Lion...
with a roar that pierces your heart and
soul... but then a lamb will appear
with blossoms and tenderness.
truly... Pat


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely comment Pat, some pictures are about to arrive for you on your page :) To .. read more
Patricia Wedel

10 Years Ago

dear Elisa... how charming of you to
share beautiful scenes from The Netherlands.
You.. read more

10 Years Ago

Awww, you are welcome, dear one, I loved to do so... and to give you a bit of Spring's joy here... (.. read more
Mmm, gorgeous write... Love how you incorporate the senses in this and use them to sink us deep into the storm of a chaotic, and emotional life...

" The smell of ozone, far away,
Misty, mighty grand dense clouds
In front of my train of thought"

Amazing stanza, that I can relate to deeply, wonderfully penned dear!

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Oh dear K. Thank you so much, for this utterly beautiful review... you felt it, I can tell you. :) m.. read more
beautifully written piece, my friend.

there is a light, even in the darkness...and eventually the sky will clear...and we will find the peaceful moments.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much my friend, your words are so valued here. Elisa :)

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Tags: ~ Light in the Sky, Elisa Laura, E.L. Fantasy, Dramatic, Thunderstorms, Headaches, Migraine, Ozon, Weather, connection to nature, Blue, Green, WaterSign.

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