~ Light in the Sky

~ Light in the Sky, Elisa Laura, E.L. Fantasy, Dramatic, Thunderstorms, Headaches, Migraine, Ozon, Weather, connection to nature, Blue, Green, WaterSign.

~  Light in the Sky

 

Stabbing metal pain,

      Burning through each line

Of my so cold body -

      The smell of ozone,  far away,

Misty,  mighty grand dense clouds

      In front of my train of thought

 

And a rail of blindness ;

     Cold chilly Icy wind,

The smell of ozone, yet behind

 

      Thunderstorms are on the way

Within this core of being;

      There is light in the Sky,

 

For those who are

     In deep pain,

And for those who are just feeling

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Enjoy! xx

Reviews

[Michelle N. H.]

To be in tune with nature and to feel the change of weather before it occurs, a lightening before it strikes.. Being highly sensitive is not to be weak. On the contrary, it lets you perceive more than the ones who are not. It allows for you to more easily make out an entirety rather than a snippet, whilst aware there is more than meets the eye.

You express sympathy, comfort, togetherness.. by the end it is evident. It has its highs and lows to be a feeler, as with everything. Your hurt is my hurt is everyone's hurt, and I am reminded of "Powder", his wisdom and the suffering he had to endure prior to and during every thunderstorm. You describe a powerful sensing here, of what is and what is to come.

Next to fear there is love, a yin and yang for balance. You stand in between duality with a tentacle to each side that lets you sense both planes, similar to a butterfly, receptive as an antenna.. All is accessible to everyone. We're no different and there is beauty in that, in everything, whether it'd be considered negative, it is fuel for the inner artist.

Your writing is always exceedingly deep. It's fantastic, a pleasure to read and examine :)) xx

Your reviews, are the mere powder itself my sweet friend... you reach in gateways, and further visions, then the most... I can read this review over and over again, and never get bored, each time I see new perspectives, on what you say, and bring... it's so lovely! I can't thank you enough Shelly... :) There is all spelled out, here what I intended to write, or bring over... I love you and your writings so much too! Thank you dear one. -x- :) for feeling home with what I express, and do write.

[Michelle N. H.]

I'm so, so glad. Thank you as well ^^ I have much love for you, and your incredible art. x

And I for you! you're such a good friend to me, through thick and thin! ^^ through all weather, cold or warm, through all pains and joy! :) many thanks dear. -x- :)

[joshua deathdealer]

Very nice. The metaphor of the train in associated with thinking was quite effective. To me I felt as if the weather was taking place inside with all its natural ups and downs. Then, the reference to light..xx Truly a beautiful poem and very deep which of course I adore. Possano i tuoi cieli essere chiaro e le vostre giornate belle.

Grazie, dal cuore per parlare in Italiano con me, sono felice che fai.... the love for Gaia, here, and all her thunders, and lightnings, I felt, in combination with an over active brain lol... xx
Migraine is soon to come then, mixed with thoughts, ozon, thunders, and finally the light...
Thank you for your wonderful words my bestie... it's always you who understand... xx :D Possano I tuoi anche essere d'amore, ed luminoso come preferisci.... xx

[joshua deathdealer]

I too am enchanted with the weather. It's mysterious and magical as all natural things are. Oh I wish to have lived in a time where we were completely surrounded by nature. What a sight that must have been. Both physically and spiritually. To move with the makings of what Gaia has given. Per respirare l'aria più fresca. Saremmo stati veggenti e guaritori, forse.

Me too!!! that would be just fantastic... too gorgeous to think about, just in the stone age, maybe even before, for not only the energy would be much better, but also everything would be better... Exactly you read my mind lol! xx Si per respirare l'aria, di Gaia, forse, si, chissà??? sarebbe fantastico... grazie, tesoro, dal cuore, e da parte mia... xx

[TheSweet]

It has come to my attention that somehow and some way, you seem to be improving as a writer. Which is the best of things you can be doing, so well done :) I can't exactly pinpoint it, but I've never been one to need specification on getting a feel for something. A wise writer once wrote that if you get criticism telling how you should have done it otherwise, they're wrong! Because it's your work not theirs. But if someone tells you there is something wrong without specifying, they're write. Here it works in the opposite. You're gaining, and it's good :) Thanks a bunch.

With regards to the poem, what can I say that wasn't suggested - an intenseness of discrepancy suggested at the end hit it home for me. Those who are, and those who are not. Great :) Thanks for sharing.

Thank you once again, wow... This one actually rolled out as poetry should roll out, and it was an intense feeling or hurt, (migraine) for it started to thunder after, I've always pain in my head before lol.... but of course, it wouldn't be an Eli write, if it did not have a double meaning lol.... ;) I'm so glad you enjoyed this one... :) You are very welcome, I don't make it tonight, to review, but I already read your story twice... and I will give my best credits, when I am around internet, or wifi.... :) thank you dear friend xx

[melissa]

This is a great poem keep up the great work and them coming

Melissa, thank you so much! I'm happy you enjoyed! :)

[melissa]

Your welcome

[Shaun]

Interesting. I'm gathering a foreboding feeling from this piece. I enjoy that. It puts a smile on my face in a darker fashion. I hope my perception of your work isn't too far from your intended portrayal.

I do like what you see in this... and feel in this. It was a mix of weather, migraine, pain, to feel the weather forecast coming, thunder in your head .... high sensitivity... ;) ;) I'm so glad you found it interesting Shaun :)

[Shaun]

A beautifully abstract way in portraying such an appalling affliction. Might I add that I too suffer from migraine headaches.

Of course, and oh no! :( I wished you didn't, for I know how it feels, I wished I could help to soften this pain, for the both of us... (when it comes) it's terrible lol ;)

[Belle]

" there is a light in the sky

for those who are in deep pain
and for those who are just feeling"

It requires to feel the wrath, the anguish to recognize the light. This is one of the many life's paradoxes that we sometimes forget to understand because we are too overwhelmed with so much negativity, not realizing that to feel them born the higher forms of virtue.


It so good to read you again, sis...love lots... :)

Thank you sweet Sis for this fantastic review.... :) I'm always so happy when you come by! I will be back later this night... when I have a bit of time!! have missed your poetry much! :)

[Pax]

For those who are
In deep pain,
And for those who are just feeling

These last lines are just hitting many spots on my tiny, and sometimes numb heart... this made me smile, and just look at the skies and find the hope behind each lines of clouds, finding the sun that will warm the cold hearts of today.

oh mental pian
makes our heart drown in the rain
here, here, the life saver of hope
for us to cope
every stabbing
we keep on healing
the lights is all we needed
for the wounds to be sealed in this life's cycled wheel...

@Pax

And there, we are winged,
Double linked,
Trust is inked,
As family flies,
Pinoy & Indo
Whirling feeling
Grounded trust,
Weather a must,
Of our landing...
Safe, home, hugged!

Lovely verse, you
did inspire me too!
♥♥♥ Brother love!

Thank you so so much for these two utterly beautiful
reviews you gave me, my day is a blessing now~! thank you YOU~x

[Pax]

i wish i could see the everyday blessing like the way you do, big sis...
more often blind now a days... a grayish period...
you are always welcome... :)

[Aethereal]

You have placed me in the middle of an April thunderstorm through the electric power of your squiggly ultra-violet beaming poem. Perhaps I’ll write a thunderstorm poem too:

Blue

Thunder, wind, and rain
take away my pain.
Flashing streaks of blue
form the eyes of you.

Oh Aethereal, my friend, you are so gifted, in words, and brain. :) Lovely, just lovely! thank you so much, I am on my way to you too, so much to catch up on... hold on my sweet friend.. :)

[Aethereal]

You're welcome!

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Elisa Laura... Our weather has been
exactly as you have described the cold
chilly ice wind with a dark sky. Now there
is hope with sunshine and a bit of warmth.
Your golden pen has painted the end if
winter when March comes in like a Lion...
with a roar that pierces your heart and
soul... but then a lamb will appear
with blossoms and tenderness.
truly... Pat

My sweet Pat, thank you for this great heartfelt review, from you... :) So happy to have you by! and I shall come by too. It's so true, I wanted to give my reader the feeling of mixed seasons, wheather, and certain predictions, and the oneness with nature that can be felt... Love to you Pat, Elisa -x- :) Thank you.

[Patricia Wedel]

Your golden pen has painted the end of winter...
when March comes in like a Lion... with a roar that
pierces your heart and soul... but then a lamb will
appear with blossoms and tenderness. truly... Pat

Thank you so much Pat... again, you are a blessing and good friend. Elisa.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Elisa... Now during the night of April 15 it has
been freezing cold... with only the hope of
spring. We do have so many trees in bloom.
Too soon we will have high temperatures.
If only we could have a less dramatic change
of seasons. truly... Pat

Now that's weird sweet Pat, for the same happend here in the Netherlands, and it was still warm and sunny this day... The cherry blossom here is now full in bloom... It's lovely... There is nothing more powerful than nature... Hugs, Elisa :)

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Elisa... It is sweet to know what is
happening in The Netherlands. It would be
Loverly to see the Tulip fields and the windmills.
truly... Pat

Thank you for your lovely comment Pat, some pictures are about to arrive for you on your page :) To see... -x-

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Elisa... how charming of you to
share beautiful scenes from The Netherlands.
You have touched my heart with your kindness.
hugs... Pat x

Awww, you are welcome, dear one, I loved to do so... and to give you a bit of Spring's joy here... ((HUGS)) xx

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Mmm, gorgeous write... Love how you incorporate the senses in this and use them to sink us deep into the storm of a chaotic, and emotional life...

" The smell of ozone, far away,
Misty, mighty grand dense clouds
In front of my train of thought"

Amazing stanza, that I can relate to deeply, wonderfully penned dear!

Oh dear K. Thank you so much, for this utterly beautiful review... you felt it, I can tell you. :) many thanks for being here sweet friend... -x- :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

beautifully written piece, my friend.

there is a light, even in the darkness...and eventually the sky will clear...and we will find the peaceful moments.

Thank you very much my friend, your words are so valued here. Elisa :)