~ Paradise

~ Paradise? E.L. Elisa Laura, FreeStyle, Thoughts, Fantasy, Fiction, Love, Romance, Over? Hope? Still? Rebirth

~ Paradise

 

 

I air kissed you, from afar,

     My hand upon my mouth,

  My love, I did reach out; 

 

And well dear, to your land,

 

I lived in a dream for way too long,

      In darkened visions, of you and me;

 

      Now the day is here;

  I arrived in our Paradise,

 

The fields of hope, and trust

 

Nothing is more intense,

     To smell your skin, to touch your hair;

   And to burn with you to dust

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

Author's Note

Feel free, Enjoy! xx
Music: "Artesia - Y Ladi Wen"

Reviews

[Thaddius]

Timeless, ethereal feel. Maybe its the music but you remind me of Arwen from Lord of the Rings in your expression of that passion.

'my love, I did reach out; and well dear, to your land' captures your way of speaking so nicely, your soft maternal instinct for this lover. It makes you feel close. the 'to burn with you to dust' line, I can picture tears streaming down Arwen's face as she looks at the relic of Striders bust, condemned to immortality. This is the most powerful montage in the Award Winning Trilogy that I was raised on, so don't take that complement lightly!

Thank you so much Thaddius, for a most nice review, I feel flattered you see Arwen in this. I know the Trilogy very well, read the book more than twice :) thank you for your effort and time.

[Nisreen]

I can feel this pure love
in a kiss

i must say i am a fan of your work

[Shaun]

You are quite talented, new friend. I love the immolation at the end. Entrancing...

Oooh, I can't thank you enough... :) I'm so glad you felt the ending..... that was the most important part of it... ;) thank you so much.

[Shaun]

Never a problem. At a point I'm my life I became slightly obsessed with Anne Rice and through the immolation I gained a darker romantic feeling.

I know exactly what you mean.... it has a haunting ability, and brings you further, beyond, and near what we need to achieve. ;)

[Shaun]

Couldn't agree more :)

................ :) there is well, so much more.... if we let in.

[Eric Pudalov]

In this Paradise,
you need not fear
the shadowlike demons
with eyes so blind.

My arms embrace you
Gracefully, with élan
A mesmeric affection
That completes our bond,

Surely living eternally.

Sigh, buddy! now that's what I call a poem to a poem... lovely job!
Intense and well heartfelt... I appreciate it muchly! :) Thank you!!!

[Eric Pudalov]

You're always welcome Elisa! I was inspired by Faceless Being's poetic review below. And perhaps I've been vacationing in Elysion on occasion...

He's such a good and intelligent friend.... one of the most "seeing" persons, here... :) You are always welcome in here! :D

[Simone]

this is amazing. your writing is beautiful.

Thank you so much Simone, your thoughts are valued here!! -x- :)

[Faceless Poet]

I sleep my way into the paradise of dreams
viewing, reliving the beauty of love and its realms.

night becomes colorful days,
fantasies shines in so many ways.

in a world, were love is within me
dreaming of what's beyond fantasy.

- Faceless being...

Ssssssh, and stay forever incognito! :) love your mysterious you.... why there is need? to show yourself, when others on here are only judging, pouting, (like they do on me). For not may having a break.... (selfish) it is. I love your freedom, please be ever yourself with me.

[Eric Pudalov]

I agree, Elisa, what a beautifully poetic review...in some ways, those are the best kind! (Perhaps I can come up with one too...you may like that.)

I did ............. my friend thank you ;-)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

I love the contrasts and associations here...Your soul is in the familiar land, with your love, which is Paradise. But what is actually? Paradise of the heart, of touch of hope, of all closeness. Paradise of your love. And then you could give up all that, even the "paradise" for the burning flames of your beloved touch...No matter the place, some things are eternal. Brilliant piece!

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Yes, it is... great review Nia. :) Indeed no matter the place, for our love is eternal, and forever.... Love to you, thank you so much -x-

[Cryingkate]

Exquisite !

Your presence is missed yet I let not go...

I won't let you go either, never!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHAT WE HAVE IS GOLDEN! EVEN IN SILENCE, thank you so much my friend... xx

[Cryingkate]

Tears of Joy , To hear word from you. I am Blessed.
I will hold these words.. Forever Eternal and I vow them too :-) also even in silence.

I will be back soon.... I just enjoy my life outside the cafe... -x-

[Cryingkate]

It's ok .. Take your time... The cafe is not good for me right now. Too many dark paths.. I need the light. Soar my friend spread your wings and enjoy the flight where you are.
I am only an email away if the clouds should return.........FLY>>>>>>>>>>>>

Thank you love, I do, so do you ok? yes, it's too much harsh, and no light, for we function on light.... I understand you more than anyone. -x- take your time too.

[icelandicblue]

Nothing is more intense,
To smell your skin, to touch your hair;
And to burn with you to dust

That is exquisitely torrid and romantic. You have created such beauty and emotion within the context of your words. Another marvelous poem from your pen.

I thank you greatly Anne, for such a kind review. :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Perfect piece as always! Your words are so enriched with love that it sing out!

Thank you so much my dear friend :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure, my friend!

[PurpleQuartz]

This poem is a kind of paradise. Elegant in it's beautiful show of love. To me this poem says that love can bloom no matter how far away people are from each other.
A perfect write Elisa!!

Good morning love from the Netherlands, loved your review, so so much! thank you! You truly felt it. -x- to Australia happy late afternoon!