~ Paradise

~ Paradise

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~ Paradise? E.L. Elisa Laura, FreeStyle, Thoughts, Fantasy, Fiction, Love, Romance, Over? Hope? Still? Rebirth

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~ Paradise

 

 

I air kissed you, from afar,

     My hand upon my mouth,

  My love, I did reach out; 

 

And well dear, to your land,

 

I lived in a dream for way too long,

      In darkened visions, of you and me;

 

      Now the day is here;

  I arrived in our Paradise,

 

The fields of hope, and trust

 

Nothing is more intense,

     To smell your skin, to touch your hair;

   And to burn with you to dust

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

© 2014


Author's Note

Feel free, Enjoy! xx
Music: "Artesia - Y Ladi Wen"



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Timeless, ethereal feel. Maybe its the music but you remind me of Arwen from Lord of the Rings in your expression of that passion.

'my love, I did reach out; and well dear, to your land' captures your way of speaking so nicely, your soft maternal instinct for this lover. It makes you feel close. the 'to burn with you to dust' line, I can picture tears streaming down Arwen's face as she looks at the relic of Striders bust, condemned to immortality. This is the most powerful montage in the Award Winning Trilogy that I was raised on, so don't take that complement lightly!

Posted 10 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Thaddius, for a most nice review, I feel flattered you see Arwen in this. I know t.. read more



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I can feel this pure love
in a kiss

i must say i am a fan of your work

Posted 8 Years Ago


You are quite talented, new friend. I love the immolation at the end. Entrancing...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

I know exactly what you mean.... it has a haunting ability, and brings you further, beyond, and near.. read more
Shaun

10 Years Ago

Couldn't agree more :)

10 Years Ago

................ :) there is well, so much more.... if we let in.
In this Paradise,
you need not fear
the shadowlike demons
with eyes so blind.

My arms embrace you
Gracefully, with élan
A mesmeric affection
That completes our bond,

Surely living eternally.



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Sigh, buddy! now that's what I call a poem to a poem... lovely job!
Intense and well heartfel.. read more
Eric Pudalov

10 Years Ago

You're always welcome Elisa! I was inspired by Faceless Being's poetic review below. And perhaps I'.. read more

10 Years Ago

He's such a good and intelligent friend.... one of the most "seeing" persons, here... :) You are alw.. read more
this is amazing. your writing is beautiful.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Simone, your thoughts are valued here!! -x- :)
I sleep my way into the paradise of dreams
viewing, reliving the beauty of love and its realms.

night becomes colorful days,
fantasies shines in so many ways.

in a world, were love is within me
dreaming of what's beyond fantasy.

- Faceless being...



Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Ssssssh, and stay forever incognito! :) love your mysterious you.... why there is need? to show your.. read more
Eric Pudalov

10 Years Ago

I agree, Elisa, what a beautifully poetic review...in some ways, those are the best kind! (Perhaps .. read more

10 Years Ago

I did ............. my friend thank you ;-)
I love the contrasts and associations here...Your soul is in the familiar land, with your love, which is Paradise. But what is actually? Paradise of the heart, of touch of hope, of all closeness. Paradise of your love. And then you could give up all that, even the "paradise" for the burning flames of your beloved touch...No matter the place, some things are eternal. Brilliant piece!

:: nour ::
:: 03.014::

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Yes, it is... great review Nia. :) Indeed no matter the place, for our love is eternal, and forever... read more
Exquisite !

Your presence is missed yet I let not go...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

I will be back soon.... I just enjoy my life outside the cafe... -x-
Cryingkate

10 Years Ago

It's ok .. Take your time... The cafe is not good for me right now. Too many dark paths.. I need the.. read more

10 Years Ago

Thank you love, I do, so do you ok? yes, it's too much harsh, and no light, for we function on light.. read more
Nothing is more intense,
To smell your skin, to touch your hair;
And to burn with you to dust

That is exquisitely torrid and romantic. You have created such beauty and emotion within the context of your words. Another marvelous poem from your pen.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

I thank you greatly Anne, for such a kind review. :)
Perfect piece as always! Your words are so enriched with love that it sing out!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much my dear friend :)
KATHY SUE SILLS

10 Years Ago

My pleasure, my friend!
This poem is a kind of paradise. Elegant in it's beautiful show of love. To me this poem says that love can bloom no matter how far away people are from each other.
A perfect write Elisa!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Good morning love from the Netherlands, loved your review, so so much! thank you! You truly felt it... read more

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