I felt your words walking into a purgatory realm...
Somewhere between sleep and death lies "tormented starving souls"..
If you can see what I see in my mind's eye
(and I know you can, because you write vividly),
you would get chills too!
Do I make sense??
It's late... and reading this has my mind reeling! OMG! lol
Entrancing write, Sis!~xoxo~
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10 Years Ago
You and me, know the "Reikon" never rests, when it has been tortured... ;) no words needed for that,.. read moreYou and me, know the "Reikon" never rests, when it has been tortured... ;) no words needed for that, this is a write, that I think, could kept you away, but I didn't hasitate to write it still down, for I sometimes, need to spit out my feelings, and they can be dark and vividly as this one. I'm so happy with your keen insight Sis, your words mean the world to me, and I hope it didn't disturbed your "happiness" right now, but it had to be posted lol.... it's when my quill atches.... love you xoxoxox :)
10 Years Ago
*hesitate... ;) xoxoxo
10 Years Ago
Sis, you write what you feel... A true artist does not hold back...
and you are a true artist... read moreSis, you write what you feel... A true artist does not hold back...
and you are a true artist...
So be bold... As you are! ;)
My " happiness" does not limit my sensitivity to your thoughts...
I will always feel it, Sis... ~xoxoxoxoxo~:)
10 Years Ago
Thank you so much love. You know me inside and out ;) So are you sweets, gosh I miss you!!! xoxoxo :.. read moreThank you so much love. You know me inside and out ;) So are you sweets, gosh I miss you!!! xoxoxo :) so happy we have these silent talks xxx :D
10 Years Ago
Ha! We are so loud when we are silent, eh Sis??!
I miss you too... So much!!!
Soon, I wi.. read moreHa! We are so loud when we are silent, eh Sis??!
I miss you too... So much!!!
Soon, I will be fast to catch up... ;)
You'll see!
Love you to the moon!!~xoxoxo~:D
Our soul is connecting, loud in silence lol hahaha... always. We don't need much words, like many ot.. read moreOur soul is connecting, loud in silence lol hahaha... always. We don't need much words, like many others, for understatement. :) Don't worry, think first of YOU lovely one. YOU are important and nobody else. Me, I'm here always, even after life lol ;) you know, when we are Yurei's, we just still look fantastic.... ;) you'll see. Love you to the moon too, and back!!! xoxoxoxo plus our Sun's will be waiting..... sure thing.
10 Years Ago
Yes, so true we don't need many words... :)
I am going to sleep soon.., getting sleepy!.. read moreYes, so true we don't need many words... :)
I am going to sleep soon.., getting sleepy!
Take care, Sis ...
our Sun's will rise soon...
~xoxoxo~good night, love... :)
Love you! ~xoxo~
10 Years Ago
;) they will.... I wish you a good sleep love, dream of the golden rays, and keep on shining like a .. read more;) they will.... I wish you a good sleep love, dream of the golden rays, and keep on shining like a little one, ;) xoxoxox :) sleep well sweetheart. Love you too! chat soon xoxox
This reminds me of 'Who wants to live forever' by Queen. I wrote a short film with this song in mind once. Your poem inspires me to have another go at it. The way you arrange the lines, set it to music... I get this auteur vibe from you. Have you directed?
That's a great nostalgic song, I truly love! thank you for reminding me. I'm so happy I could inspir.. read moreThat's a great nostalgic song, I truly love! thank you for reminding me. I'm so happy I could inspire you to do another one. Truly. Let me know when it's finished, I'll be the first, to review it. Sigh, blush, and again thanks for saying that, I'm a movie druggy, and love story-lines, in all kind of genres. Maybe I missed my calling lol ;-) but I'm so glad I can express all I feel, deeply inside of me through my poetry, thank you my friend. Truly.
Your title for this piece strikes me as reference to something you said before, but it's been a long time, so that might haunt me until I find it again. Yes, Robbie describes this as a walk into Purgatory, and I agree. As well, I see this as a dread state of life these days... and Japan, as it was in Japan... which haunts me too. When all the people are gone only the shadows remain; I recall how the atomic bombs in Japan burned images of people onto the walls. Yet I realize the point to this write is not to retain such morbid records but to release them.
Once again, this is a sweet sentiment from your heart . Well done my friend.
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much my friend, it's so good to see you back on here. :) your reviews are truly missed... read moreThank you so much my friend, it's so good to see you back on here. :) your reviews are truly missed. You are one of the few, who always got my writings, and this time no exception. Thanks for all your effort Jack, and I shall reply in the mail as soon as I can after weekends... very interesting about Indonesia... I'm curious. Elisa.
Help comes to us in our darkest hours...
Maybe we are not rescued by the Calvary or Prince Charming, but we are gifted the strength to survive if we choose to keep up the good fight.
I may not believe in what most people call ghosts, yet I do believe in the realm of the supernatural. Benevolent and not so much, we still control the conduit to this realm we live in... The control valve is our conscious mind and free will.
Thank you so much for your words, my friend, they mean much to me. I know you see beyond cement ;-) .. read moreThank you so much for your words, my friend, they mean much to me. I know you see beyond cement ;-) lol you can find the perfect holes, in teeth as in souls. :D brilliant insight, on many ways here, appreciate it.... my dear friend.
10 Years Ago
Ha, it is because of my loops and LED lights... ;)
I think we all have the ability to see mor.. read moreHa, it is because of my loops and LED lights... ;)
I think we all have the ability to see more of the soul in our fellow human contacts. We are here to help fill the "holes" in the hearts of those we have the privilege to come into contact with.
Thank you for all you do to help my heart be full of love and light dear Eli. I'm glad we are dear to each other.
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He he, I know lol.... ;-) Beautifully worded David, I think you are right. Always, my friend, and I .. read moreHe he, I know lol.... ;-) Beautifully worded David, I think you are right. Always, my friend, and I thank you for being a friend. Through thick and thin. And thanks for your patience (with this slow turtle). ;-) (glad we are too) :) always!
I like the transition steps from "Your Wall Flower" as an observer's point of view, to becoming part of "~ Yūrei" as a character presenting a successful perspective from the other side of the world.
I also like that your poem says between the lines that some have the strength of mind and spirit to interpret with firmness what could be almost invisible to most persons that could perceive circumstance with fear and get stuck in this world.
The artwork you used perfectly describes in visual form spirits that could be stuck between different worlds, and could raise the question if there should be human interference to assist them or leave them there restless as their destiny.
I like your poem and am happy to officially be your Raven Sister, Thank you, now we don't need a rope to go bungee jumping, we have wings.
Hugs and Kisses
Anika
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much my Raven Sis, *You have such a sharp mind* I am so pleased to read your words, and.. read moreThank you so much my Raven Sis, *You have such a sharp mind* I am so pleased to read your words, and the fact that "only you" until now spoke it out, the two are a couple ;) sharp... you have seen it very well. Thank you for your effort, and great review, brilliant one. xxx Hugs!
Hi, this was haunting and beautiful. It reminds me of an anime I used to watch a long while ago called Hell Girl. There was a girl who would take souls back to hell on her ferry boat, to me her innocence and personality felt what it would be like to be stuck between the world of the living and the dead. I think if I had to pick a job it would be that sorrowful one, but also I'd get to comfort souls on their final journey. I really saw that path of life reflected in this piece, excellent work.
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10 Years Ago
Beautiful words by you.... I can't thank you enough. You have felt it well. Thanks for your encourig.. read moreBeautiful words by you.... I can't thank you enough. You have felt it well. Thanks for your encouriging. Elisa
I like the unsettling and off beat feel of this poem. Thrusting the reader into the ghostly realm. Un-breathing lungs and beat-less hearts. I also like the title. Excellent work dear.
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10 Years Ago
Thank you very much for this great review soul buddy. I'm glad you felt it so well... thanks a lot.
And we wait for truth and silence
Beyond the torment of souls
Let us fly to heaven high
Let us finally die..
This is very good.. And You speak of things far beyond your years ..
And I love you.......... Little Dove .... ....
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Yes, my love, so so well felt, and said.... sigh. (((YOU))) always get me, original lovely response... read moreYes, my love, so so well felt, and said.... sigh. (((YOU))) always get me, original lovely response. I so appreciate you. I love you much too my sweet. I am catching up soon... p.s have so much to tell you, will mail tomorrow :) (((HUGS)))♥
you reminded me of my visit to cellular jail corridor ten years back. It sounded something very similar !
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I felt your words walking into a purgatory realm...
Somewhere between sleep and death lies "tormented starving souls"..
If you can see what I see in my mind's eye
(and I know you can, because you write vividly),
you would get chills too!
Do I make sense??
It's late... and reading this has my mind reeling! OMG! lol
Entrancing write, Sis!~xoxo~
Posted 10 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
You and me, know the "Reikon" never rests, when it has been tortured... ;) no words needed for that,.. read moreYou and me, know the "Reikon" never rests, when it has been tortured... ;) no words needed for that, this is a write, that I think, could kept you away, but I didn't hasitate to write it still down, for I sometimes, need to spit out my feelings, and they can be dark and vividly as this one. I'm so happy with your keen insight Sis, your words mean the world to me, and I hope it didn't disturbed your "happiness" right now, but it had to be posted lol.... it's when my quill atches.... love you xoxoxox :)
10 Years Ago
*hesitate... ;) xoxoxo
10 Years Ago
Sis, you write what you feel... A true artist does not hold back...
and you are a true artist... read moreSis, you write what you feel... A true artist does not hold back...
and you are a true artist...
So be bold... As you are! ;)
My " happiness" does not limit my sensitivity to your thoughts...
I will always feel it, Sis... ~xoxoxoxoxo~:)
10 Years Ago
Thank you so much love. You know me inside and out ;) So are you sweets, gosh I miss you!!! xoxoxo :.. read moreThank you so much love. You know me inside and out ;) So are you sweets, gosh I miss you!!! xoxoxo :) so happy we have these silent talks xxx :D
10 Years Ago
Ha! We are so loud when we are silent, eh Sis??!
I miss you too... So much!!!
Soon, I wi.. read moreHa! We are so loud when we are silent, eh Sis??!
I miss you too... So much!!!
Soon, I will be fast to catch up... ;)
You'll see!
Love you to the moon!!~xoxoxo~:D
Our soul is connecting, loud in silence lol hahaha... always. We don't need much words, like many ot.. read moreOur soul is connecting, loud in silence lol hahaha... always. We don't need much words, like many others, for understatement. :) Don't worry, think first of YOU lovely one. YOU are important and nobody else. Me, I'm here always, even after life lol ;) you know, when we are Yurei's, we just still look fantastic.... ;) you'll see. Love you to the moon too, and back!!! xoxoxoxo plus our Sun's will be waiting..... sure thing.
10 Years Ago
Yes, so true we don't need many words... :)
I am going to sleep soon.., getting sleepy!.. read moreYes, so true we don't need many words... :)
I am going to sleep soon.., getting sleepy!
Take care, Sis ...
our Sun's will rise soon...
~xoxoxo~good night, love... :)
Love you! ~xoxo~
10 Years Ago
;) they will.... I wish you a good sleep love, dream of the golden rays, and keep on shining like a .. read more;) they will.... I wish you a good sleep love, dream of the golden rays, and keep on shining like a little one, ;) xoxoxox :) sleep well sweetheart. Love you too! chat soon xoxox
There's a certain element of eeriness to this poem that lures the reader in. It was amazing and one of the most original pieces I have read in some time.
Thank you so very much PQ, when you come by, it makes my morning Australian Queen.
10 Years Ago
I always miss reading your writing. I haven't been able to find the time to come on writerscafe for .. read moreI always miss reading your writing. I haven't been able to find the time to come on writerscafe for a while. But whenever I can, your poems are the ones I want to read the very most.
10 Years Ago
Thank you love, you know the feeling is very mutual... you are a good friend, and my favorite always.. read moreThank you love, you know the feeling is very mutual... you are a good friend, and my favorite always.