~ Her Deer

~ Her Deer, Elisa Laura, Nature, Winter, Seasons, Love, Trust, Patience, Transformation, Ambrosia, Orange, Contrasts, Lyrics

 

~ Her Deer

 

Twelve long days, she lived in his sanctuary

          The nights were days full of summer love;

 

Warm evenings they danced by the light of the

          Cooling moon, she was their guide,

 

But when the day came in sight, they burned away;

           And the trip was heavier than ever,

 

Slowly as their bodies repeated to dust and ashes,

            At each step they took, through this winter beauty

 

Where her heart like a lump of ice, has been glued

            To his, when they touched the frozen fields;

 

Free from sorrow, he was in the spring ragweed

             The snow was melting, by his warmth,

                       Observing her fall of heart,

 

The dead brains branched, barren by their loss,

              The leaves where so discolored;

 

But his tender creature, his dear soul,

               Could accept her how she was;

 

And he trusted the stars above him;

             When he saw her, all enlightened, in the sky

He knew time was just a phase,

 

And gave her one last look, and so he left, skittish,

             Leaving his footprints in the snow.

 

 

He was her deer ...

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Enjoy another fantasy write.... xx

Reviews

[TheSweet]

There's a chapter in one of my favourite books that describes the idea of being careful when it comes to getting close to someone - it should be treated like a wild deer. If you make any bold moves or too much risk you'll only startle it off, so you need to be really still and let them get used to you being around and gentle let the trust build. It's based on being comfortable with someone and as someone, like myself, who is difficult to get to know properly - I relate to the concept 'deerly' (see what I did there?)

This poem reminded me of that idea and so it triggered some nice feelings - thanks for that. :) Another awesome write.

Ah you got this one so very well my friend, that was exactly the right (somhow anxious) feeling, I want to bring over in it. Wonderful you speak of this... it's truly an amazing review my friend. Thank you :)

* I wanted and * somehow.... sorry some typo's I got skittish by your beautiful words ;)

[TheSweet]

Not to worry, I suffer greatly from lazy touch-typing - mistakes all over the place. :)
I'm glad I was close to your intention though, I was wondering if I was just rambling about nothing. It was a really nice write though, good job!

You ramble always with deep philosophies my friend, ;) so it could only be "nothing" if it's "everything" the same time ;) Thank you dearly, I try to come by to you as well. :)

[joshua deathdealer]

"so he left, skittish." such a great line and really the tell tell here. I love this and I love you!! Brilliant write. I love the imagery. xo

I knew you, "YOU" would understand, I love you so much my best buddy!!!!!!! xo be back soon dear. I can't thank you enough.... keep on making music, in the meantime ok? love love.

[joshua deathdealer]

always lol that is all I do..Music is my first love.

Hi 10, uh 5, high 15 even ;) can't wait to hear your new pieces.... my hero! ♫

[joshua deathdealer]

well im working on a nirvana song called sappy and a silverstien song called my heroin...I'll send them to you

Oh, yes please... I'm all ears, and I know I will enjoy!!! xx

[emmajoy]

Your words always fascinate, always touch, but this intrigues, takes thoughts way off and away, 'And he trusted the stars above him; ~ When he saw her, all enlightened, in the sky ~ He knew time was just a phase,' .. and so it is, Elisa, so it is. Enjoy your break, twin spirit.

Thank you my Twin-Love... for the trust, friendship, love, and compassion.... it means the world to me. You know where to reach me ;) love you xx

[Lover Of Words]

What lovely breathtaking piece

Thank you so much my sweet....

[Lover Of Words]

very welcome dear

I'm on a hiatus.... kind off, need to get my head clear first, a lot happened... but I will be back for you! xx

[Lover Of Words]

Same here sweet heart take your time im here if you need

Muwah! to you, thanks for the patience..... chat soon!

[Lover Of Words]

My pleasure dear

[Kimmie]

Your poems are so sophisticated and chic. I love them. The story you tell makes it all the better and interesting. I loved the wording and flow. You have great meter and imagery, too. Well done.

Thank you very much dear one... :) your words make me smile. Back soon for you xx

[Arcus]

I relate to this quite well. I felt the emotion in every line, as I too bear the memories of a moment now lost in time. Well done... Your work has brought tears to my eyes. Hahaha

Thank you so much my dear friend... awww, I cried too while I wrote it..... so we cry together then hahaha.... I will come back soon for you.... xx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

....and those are the most beautiful moments, in those twelve days...
What reverie brought her solace
through his doe eyes, is also her salvation...
with purpose, souls are meant to seek
and to salvage one another...

This is a beautiful message of how souls transform us...
through every walk of life...leaving footprints...




Gorgeous penning, Sis!~xoxo~

Thank you love, I'm not so talketive as you know what happened.... ;) but with the most near persons to my heart I talk on distance and in silence... :) Love to you, thank you for this beautiful review.... till soon xxxx

P.s. I meant talkative... little typo...

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Hey, that's why I love you (typos and all) lol...you are real.
Never change,Eli...xxxx

Awww, and I you! on whatever you are typing on LOL ;) ♥ I go for a while now, need to rest my mind.... xxxx see you on the other side ;)

[Pryde Foltz]

And gave her one last look, and so he left, skittish,
Leaving his footprints in the snow.


He was her deer …

Methinks this is not about a deer … I knew a squirrel like that. Transportive, Elilsa.

Thank you for the nice comment Pryde... you always brighten my days, and lovely new photo of you! :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Thank you, Elisa.

Thanks for all, I appreciate you, you write beautifully, and will be back with an review episode soon :) can't wait....

[Solilokiss]

Oh this is just plain lovely. A beautiful vision shared with us, Elisa. Gratitude!

From of the road, thank you so much my friend....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, this is so sad...he could be her love...but he is skittish like the deer...and runs as if from the sound of a car in the distance, getting to close.

Nicely worded, thank you jacob