~ Her Deer

~ Her Deer, Elisa Laura, Nature, Winter, Seasons, Love, Trust, Patience, Transformation, Ambrosia, Orange, Contrasts, Lyrics

 

~ Her Deer

 

Twelve long days, she lived in his sanctuary

          The nights were days full of summer love;

 

Warm evenings they danced by the light of the

          Cooling moon, she was their guide,

 

But when the day came in sight, they burned away;

           And the trip was heavier than ever,

 

Slowly as their bodies repeated to dust and ashes,

            At each step they took, through this winter beauty

 

Where her heart like a lump of ice, has been glued

            To his, when they touched the frozen fields;

 

Free from sorrow, he was in the spring ragweed

             The snow was melting, by his warmth,

                       Observing her fall of heart,

 

The dead brains branched, barren by their loss,

              The leaves where so discolored;

 

But his tender creature, his dear soul,

               Could accept her how she was;

 

And he trusted the stars above him;

             When he saw her, all enlightened, in the sky

He knew time was just a phase,

 

And gave her one last look, and so he left, skittish,

             Leaving his footprints in the snow.

 

 

He was her deer ...

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Enjoy another fantasy write.... xx

Reviews

[TheSweet]

There's a chapter in one of my favourite books that describes the idea of being careful when it comes to getting close to someone - it should be treated like a wild deer. If you make any bold moves or too much risk you'll only startle it off, so you need to be really still and let them get used to you being around and gentle let the trust build. It's based on being comfortable with someone and as someone, like myself, who is difficult to get to know properly - I relate to the concept 'deerly' (see what I did there?)

This poem reminded me of that idea and so it triggered some nice feelings - thanks for that. :) Another awesome write.

Ah you got this one so very well my friend, that was exactly the right (somhow anxious) feeling, I want to bring over in it. Wonderful you speak of this... it's truly an amazing review my friend. Thank you :)

* I wanted and * somehow.... sorry some typo's I got skittish by your beautiful words ;)

[TheSweet]

Not to worry, I suffer greatly from lazy touch-typing - mistakes all over the place. :)
I'm glad I was close to your intention though, I was wondering if I was just rambling about nothing. It was a really nice write though, good job!

You ramble always with deep philosophies my friend, ;) so it could only be "nothing" if it's "everything" the same time ;) Thank you dearly, I try to come by to you as well. :)

[Michelle N. H.]

Love is patient and kind. Sometimes we need to provide each-other space, in order to sustain balance. As you put it, time is just a phase, it will pass, and an honest love will remain despite the length of the pause. The woman shall return to her deer/dear one, in time, and they are both aware. The trust between them and their acceptance of each-other's needs are important factors. What's portrayed here is not a farewell, for winter does not last forever, and summer will come again. Beautiful :)

Just wow, my friend, you really understand me, and the meaning of it. Such a perfect review... Love that you name "the trust" and that you feel the seasons so well in it. Thank you with my heart dear friend. -x-

[Michelle N. H.]

I take so much pleasure in coming here to read and leave my thoughts, so you're welcome x I really loved how you referred to every month of the year as "twelve long days" btw, that was really nice.

Great you caught that!! you are the first hehe! ;-) so happy you like my writings. I do yours too! -xx-

[Michelle N. H.]

I really, really do. Thank you xx

Always welcome good friend -xx- :)

[PurpleQuartz]

Each word so captivating, drew me in from the beginning. My mind which was so tangled with my far away thoughts were suddenly showing me the images that your poem gave. How you ended it was so well done:
''He was her deer ...''
It leaves ones mind thinking.

Thank you for your kind and heartfelt words my friend, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this piece, it was a true heartfelt one, for someone I love...

[A. Amos]

My deer your writing is simply magical and mind blowing, the beauty of your poetry take us in your world of imagination and that is your success. Thank you sharing

Thank you A. Amos, I do find the "us" form you speak of very interesting... it means I did spoke for you and more. :) thank you dear one. Can't wait to have my full energy for your writings. :)

[A. Amos]

have you written any story till now? or any of your work has been published

I'm not a person that's so greedy to be published, more a kind of a true lover of the word, a hobby writer, when my time comes, I shall, ofc... I did have written some stories, although in poetic form, because I'am simply a poet. ;) you shall find them if you look further in my library... there are some series... x

[A. Amos]

see its not about being greedy, see imagine if good artist will not come up front we will be left to listen miley cyrus and justin bieber:) same goes in poetry you write with soul, heart and mind and want people to get connect and find themselves. Now i'm with you and together we will conquer this world of writing:) Mark my words and today date:)

I will, that's the biggest compliment you can give me my friend. Thank you. More I not need... xx

[A. Amos]

i just told you what i feel you are good and you deserve all the happiness in this world

So do you! :) you are a great human being, and a more even precious soul full of pathos. Chapeau.

[A. Amos]

I always been a self made man, from zero made millions enjoyed my life beyond imaginations but with some incidents things change and life took a turn, but it helped me to understand i have some purposes of life. I have a very crazy book finished will share with you promise

Oh that I would love to read, I'm truly interested in you. :) You have a great way of life, and seeing things. I'm a kind of self made woman too, (a loner) I love people, but I function best on my own, sincerely. :) now and then I can be very social. :) But the "real muse" is a muse, I discovered, that's fulfilling the true self, and that muse, must be first the "you" for it can be another... tell me all about your book, soon! I shall support.

[A. Amos]

my book is called Confession of a Married Man and tell me how old are you because that is one crazy book you will ever read

I'm 31 years old, (I'm an older soul) though. Young body. Young mind in some ways. Mixed alien. he he... I love crazy, it can't be crazy enough. Honestly.

[A. Amos]

Then it's cool you are grown up kid and you will sense and understand but one serious warning it's highly sexual explicit. Something you never heard or read before of it's OK with you. I invite you to my world and take you to a trip to London, Paris, Kiev, Moscow, Prague, Dubai, Bangkok where I had some memories.....

I can handle pretty much all ;-) and will show my honest and observing view to it. I am all open-minded. Those places are familiar to me, so.... try me :D no honestly friend, I would love to read a book from your mind.

[A. Amos]

you can give me your email and i will send you some chapters let me know what you think ok?

Yes, I will think of that :) certainly. Thank you so much for the great conversations this morning here.

[A. Amos]

you too my friend

Till the next episode, I shall come by when fully returned here.. :) can't wait.

[A. Amos]

just have a wonderful time and you enjoy every single second of your life, be happy and have fun thanks for all your care and consideration means alot

I thank you my friend for noticing me, truly great, have a great talking budy on highly caliber in my life now. :) thanks to you for all too, you will see me soon by! good early morning from the Netherlands.

[A. Amos]

same here my friend and it's middle of the night in America:)

Yes.... I know :) I live mostly in USA times, during my night shifts LOL :D

[A. Amos]

i can understand

I love my past...., plus my future. I just love the world I think. I rather am in the center lol

[A. Amos]

we all feel the same way and it nice to sense we are still alive

Greatly said my friend.... there is no certain place on the earth nor in the universe, where a soul could seperate, from his/her feelings, we are where we are, and go where we go.

[SomeSteve]

This is amazing, and I promise you I don't just toss out compliments so easily. =x Love it, love it, love it!!!!
You've got a new fan.

Thank you SomeSteve, I appreciate your true visions towards this one.... :) come back for you too :)

[Author Unknown]

You really flows with this one ... If they will do a blind test of every piece without an author's name. I could still know what piece belongs to you ...

:) smiling, I think I would take that as a compliment... I know I have an accent he he, just like you :D

[Author Unknown]

haha you have a good sense of humor ...I have watched you for a little while

Oh I did you too.... ;)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Well written and good choice of words,this has deep meanings which I got almost immediately. Really good wright loved the way you got the image :) and for what its worth his deer is so special but I would want him to care for the deer instead of leaving. But that's what I want,nothing is ever easy life is so unfair. All and all well done Elisa :)

I know your heart. :) thank you for saying that my friend.... thanks for all.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

my pleasure :)

I will come back after weekends for more of your writings :) thanks so much again.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe please don't mention it :)

Try to make some fun this weekend ok? ((YOU))

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe BUT OF COURSE :)

That's what I like to hear.... :)))

[kushtrimthaqi]

You are really something Elise, the way you put down words, it's so catching, beautiful, and it somehow stops you from leaving the poem half-read. You have to read it, read it, and then finally re-read it again :D

Thank you so much... :) it means a lot to me you came to this poem. Your words are treasured from now on in my little heart. :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Usually a poem like this would switch the genders. By turning my perception on its head, you have made a great write even betters.

Thank you dear Kenneth. I feel honored to have you by.

[Raymond Federle]

Beautiful and brilliant. You always have something new and fresh! Excellent. :)

Thank you dear friend, I needed that. You made my night. :) I promised some to keep on writing.... even in hard times. So I will... I think.