~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen

~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen, Love, Life, Pain, Hurt, Self-Pity, Psychology, Universes, Death, dead, The Same... Geometry

 ~ The Heat Rays,

          Will Die Frozen

 

 

I shall arise, and go now,

Through the darken night, 

I'm so lost in;

Your selfish pity monster, 

Shining furious fake warmth;

On my night of happiness;

My daylight slumber,

My hypothetical septic matter, 

The trend of your pithiness

I can't handle, the crap of ourselves,

This pathetic playful attention;

My fingers I have so crossed...

Entwined in yours, so lost;

It's you that shall be frozen,

When I'm frozen frost,

And seas of suicide...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Dark New Years....
Enjoy xx

Reviews

[Pax]

How, overwhelming the pain, painted into your words, big sis. More often, the battle within is such epic proportion – “the crap of ourselves”. Sometimes, we do release it upon words of words of painful agony, until it froze in our creative craft. Immortalizing it into poetry, verse by verse, to find the answers, the healing element of the core meaning.

I believed that, when someone read it(our poetic personas, like this piece), then when someone understood what it feels and can relate to it somehow in one way or another, perhaps it brings good effect on us to be stronger than what we believed we are not, atleast that’s what I think so.

I’ve known you big sis, for quite some time now, and I know you write from a very deep perspective. So I believed this piece was taken from a very hard times or decisions or situations in your life or someone else or an experienced what you’ve seen or heard or felt. I think only a very sensitive soul can write such deep psychological perspective.

“My hypothetical septic matter” ~ so very intense, because I do believed that our own thoughts can be very poisonous if not handled very well, and in so many cases we will drown in the “seas of suicide”.

Hugs, big hugs… know that your never alone or this person, that’s what I always tell myself. It’s a big black tunnel we pass through, sometimes we just have one light guiding us and that’s more than enough for us to keep going toward the brighter path. To find that light is just a matter of self-knowing and understanding bright-sides of things hard, I know it will be hard but it’s worth a shot every time you try, so never give up is always an uplifting value.

Intense piece!

Thank you so much my bro for diggin in to this piece, I had to chew on your words first, before I could leave a response. You understood it perfectly. What can I say? you know me inside out... do you know how grateful I am with you? and soon you shall know... your soul is precious, your compassion and heartwarming person even more. Thank you with whole my heart brother.... many hugs to you too.

[Pax]

now I have to fav this, I haven't had a chance to shelve it yesterday, i was on a hurry... :)
I am glad, your precious too, hugs....

Ooooh I didn't even asked for that dear brother, but thank you so much. You brighten the days! always.... know dear one, I'm on a hiatus right now, I'm on here, but slow.... I'm just not feeling well, and will soon. xxxxx hugs brother.

[Pax]

when a piece had/have stirred my thoughts, that goes to my favs, and this piece had... welcome :)read morewhen a piece had/have stirred my thoughts, that goes to my favs, and this piece had... welcome :)
you know i am worried when your not feeling well, so don't stress out yourself too much, okay... :)
be good and rest well... take care of yourself well...

Thank you brother, you're true family to me ♥ Your words got cutt-off, but I read you on the live feed, it means the world to me, not even important it not shows up here, I know your heart. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx till soon!

[Pax]

glitches, again,:), i get worried when your not feeling well, that's what's close family we are here...hugs...and i also said: so don't stress out yourself too much, okay... :) be good and rest well... take care of yourself well...

Muwah! you're the best... I will, listen to you, have to go to the hospital again tomo, but it will be ok... thanks to my friends... love you and all... who are close to me. Catch up soon! promise xx

[David Scott]

Even the warmth of a sunny day will not thaw a frozen field...
Boy Howdy! This poem left my heart cold with the thought of suicidal self pity...
It is real. This frozen potential heartache holds captured in hopeless stasis.

Simply powerful write Eli. Very powerful.

Thank you dear friend, yep, it came right out of the heart... for someone I truly adore.... and never should fade away, because he's unique, and simply too beautiful to let go all of life.... many thanks.

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

Pain can not heal Pain .. and down we go to hell.. and freeze there ..

If one will not reach out.. then one will be lost .. and maybe even two..

Deep .. with emotion, and maybe regret ...

Jazz xoxo ♥

Thank you so much luv.... ♥♥ So much truth in your words........

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

:)............................ ♥♥

[Scott Metro]

Very pretty..how easily you weave.

Scott

Thank you so much my sweet friend, it came right out of the heart... tonight I try to be back, for you and the others :)

[Scott Metro]

No hurry on me...i am here when ever you are ready..just knowing you are there makes me feel good.read moreNo hurry on me...i am here when ever you are ready..just knowing you are there makes me feel good.
S.

[icelandicblue]

The heat is not always warm. It wears different masks. We follow paths and find the chill creep up on us until we are frozen in place. There are those who will suck the life from you, sometimes bit by bit, other times in huge gulps. Perhaps that sea of suicide will also freeze and the frosted one feeling the sun will become limber and walk away across that sea of possibilities.

Beautifully said my sweet friend.... you understand my metaphor always.... much love! as I write this, we have here such a frozen hail storm ;)

[icelandicblue]

I understand cold we just had a two day blizzard. ; )

Oh I hope you're ok... and the people around you... stay warm and safe inside dear one... :)

[icelandicblue]

We are fine, thank you for asking. Same for you my sweet girl.

I'm glad to hear that.... the weather is changing lately, also here in Europe, have to check on some from England... much love, and after my dinner here, I try to review more of yours :D xx

[icelandicblue]

No rush. Enjoy your dinner. We're in the grasp of global warming, a misnomer of grand proportions.

Exactly.... this write was also pointing out to that disaster ;) thank you very much! you your lunch I think ;) **hugs** till soon!

[Frieda P]

You've colored this one dark Elisa and I feel your pain here, hopefully it was cathartic to pen this little bit of your inner demons. A stunning read even in your darkest moments. Be well cara. Baci. xo

It's written for a good friend my love... thank you so much, I want him to know the world is still so beautiful, and that he needs to come back.... much love, darling, I will be back for you too xxxxx

[Frieda P]

Ahh you're so sweet to write this for a dear friend. Just like you cara. Hopefully it works. Glad to see you back again. xoxo

I'm so happy to see you back on here too! you have no idea... :) thank you for your sweet words big Sis. :) xxx

[Jack...]

And so frozen on this path I stand, staring off into the words that crumble on crooked fencelines, casting pain off into the vast white of flurried oblivion, and bid the past a farewell. Elisa, this was beautiful, sad, and touching. We all face obstacles, but the strong overcome these detours and run happily into the dawn of a new day.

Thank you so much Jack... you brighten the days... yes, the strong overcome, I hope my friend will overcome. Much love and hugs and many thank yous. Eli, I will be back... for you.

[Lydia Shutter]

Sometimes it is better to hide the pain and the problems from the world. Too many people saying sweet cliched words can push us into the downward spiral of self-pity. That is never a good thing. Such dark emotions expressed in this intense write, Elisa. Always wonderful to read your words, but I hope you are doing okay. Knuffels, Lydi**

Dank je wel lieverd, dit is geschreven voor een liefste vriend... Ik hoop dat alles goed is met hem, maar onbereikbaar... dank je wel voor je lieve woorden. Knuffels Eli xxxx Ik kom snel terug voor je...

[Lydia Shutter]

I hope you are able to get in touch with him soon and that all is well, Elisa. Knuffels, lydi**

Thank you, I hope so too.... many knuffels!

[MsJewel]

I could feel the emotion in your words Elisa. There is no doubt in my mind this was written from your heart. You write with depth - I admire that. Another fantastic poem my friend.

Hugs, Julie

Thank you love, it was a hard one....
I love your words, you brighten the path, I'm hiking. Much love.... x

[Troy Henson]

A very powerful statement made here. Our words sometimes project our anger however the emotion still remains.

Regards

Thank you so much Sunny Australia :) your thoughts make my heart smile. :) Anger, Love and Hate lay too close sometimes, when we love someone we can't reach, it's frustrating.... have a great day :) Troy xx

[Troy Henson]

I like what u just said my dear "when we love someone we can't reach" I am feeling this frustration today, yesterday and so on. Its painful wanting something u can't have.

It is.... it can ruin a person.... totally. But then next, there is some strength, I like to share with you. :) keep your head up too xx

[Troy Henson]

Ruin...yes it can my dear. I just keep looking to the positive and I always have hope.

I will, shall promise you. :) you already gave me new insights, tonight. Hope is living. Greetings, and Namaste..... x

[emmajoy]

There are times when words comfort hurt.. too often the angriest or more vehement words heal the worst hurt. Can't escape emotions; need to somehow, somehow endure them, let them out into the air, not fester, not scar the spirit. And you, dear Elisa, have a wonderful spirit.. fly it to the moon and lie in its silver light a while. Please. (you)

Thank you my toolip twin

This write is for someone I truly love... and wish well. (He Knows).

I shall keep my own head sane, I promise ;) you know me better than anyone!.... xx thanks my love

[emmajoy]

When you truly love someone, tis time to say so, eyes locked .. softly, calmly.. heart pumping .. ((dear You)) sorry too personal for a public place but ..

No worries.... love, nothing is too taboo for me. I wished he could read, and get himself together, and enjoy life again ;) ((((THANK YOU))) ♥

[emmajoy]

(((My friend)))

***** LOVE LOVE LOVE *****

[emmajoy]

i keep coming back here even though i'm 'type.walking!

Haha! I know that feeling, I'm a zombie, of ages.... ♥ but for real friends I walk by .....

[emmajoy]

am gone as of seconds.. tomorrow ..

With every second, I send you to bed love.... tomo tomo we love again... I'm going too soon England xxxx love ya!