~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen

~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen, Love, Life, Pain, Hurt, Self-Pity, Psychology, Universes, Death, dead, The Same... Geometry

 ~ The Heat Rays,

          Will Die Frozen

 

 

I shall arise, and go now,

Through the darken night, 

I'm so lost in;

Your selfish pity monster, 

Shining furious fake warmth;

On my night of happiness;

My daylight slumber,

My hypothetical septic matter, 

The trend of your pithiness

I can't handle, the crap of ourselves,

This pathetic playful attention;

My fingers I have so crossed...

Entwined in yours, so lost;

It's you that shall be frozen,

When I'm frozen frost,

And seas of suicide...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Dark New Years....
Enjoy xx

Reviews

[Pax]

How, overwhelming the pain, painted into your words, big sis. More often, the battle within is such epic proportion – “the crap of ourselves”. Sometimes, we do release it upon words of words of painful agony, until it froze in our creative craft. Immortalizing it into poetry, verse by verse, to find the answers, the healing element of the core meaning.

I believed that, when someone read it(our poetic personas, like this piece), then when someone understood what it feels and can relate to it somehow in one way or another, perhaps it brings good effect on us to be stronger than what we believed we are not, atleast that’s what I think so.

I’ve known you big sis, for quite some time now, and I know you write from a very deep perspective. So I believed this piece was taken from a very hard times or decisions or situations in your life or someone else or an experienced what you’ve seen or heard or felt. I think only a very sensitive soul can write such deep psychological perspective.

“My hypothetical septic matter” ~ so very intense, because I do believed that our own thoughts can be very poisonous if not handled very well, and in so many cases we will drown in the “seas of suicide”.

Hugs, big hugs… know that your never alone or this person, that’s what I always tell myself. It’s a big black tunnel we pass through, sometimes we just have one light guiding us and that’s more than enough for us to keep going toward the brighter path. To find that light is just a matter of self-knowing and understanding bright-sides of things hard, I know it will be hard but it’s worth a shot every time you try, so never give up is always an uplifting value.

Intense piece!

Thank you so much my bro for diggin in to this piece, I had to chew on your words first, before I could leave a response. You understood it perfectly. What can I say? you know me inside out... do you know how grateful I am with you? and soon you shall know... your soul is precious, your compassion and heartwarming person even more. Thank you with whole my heart brother.... many hugs to you too.

[Pax]

now I have to fav this, I haven't had a chance to shelve it yesterday, i was on a hurry... :)
I am glad, your precious too, hugs....

Ooooh I didn't even asked for that dear brother, but thank you so much. You brighten the days! always.... know dear one, I'm on a hiatus right now, I'm on here, but slow.... I'm just not feeling well, and will soon. xxxxx hugs brother.

[Pax]

when a piece had/have stirred my thoughts, that goes to my favs, and this piece had... welcome :)read morewhen a piece had/have stirred my thoughts, that goes to my favs, and this piece had... welcome :)
you know i am worried when your not feeling well, so don't stress out yourself too much, okay... :)
be good and rest well... take care of yourself well...

Thank you brother, you're true family to me ♥ Your words got cutt-off, but I read you on the live feed, it means the world to me, not even important it not shows up here, I know your heart. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx till soon!

[Pax]

glitches, again,:), i get worried when your not feeling well, that's what's close family we are here...hugs...and i also said: so don't stress out yourself too much, okay... :) be good and rest well... take care of yourself well...

Muwah! you're the best... I will, listen to you, have to go to the hospital again tomo, but it will be ok... thanks to my friends... love you and all... who are close to me. Catch up soon! promise xx

[Brittany Zedalis]

Yep, I've lost the ability to capture in words how wonderful your poetry is.

I truly am amazed, by your presence tonight, I can't thank you enough, you will know that that means I'll read your whole library too my dear. :D:D

[Brittany Zedalis]

Oh god haha I'm going to have so many review notifications

Yeah! and I look forward to that :D I shall spam you :D

[Brittany Zedalis]

Oh boy, oh goodie xD

Ha ha ha.... ;) be aware, I love to review... when I'm free/have the time. :D xD see you soon, must truly leave now, 4:20 ayem, oh goodies... ;) xx

[Brittany Zedalis]

Oh geesh get to bed!

[Raymond Federle]

Deeply dark and glorious! Excellent! :)

Thank you dearly my bud, for always take a look on even (my darker side)... ;) come back when I'm a bit better k? have a tommy flu yucks.... ha xx

[Author Unknown]

Pax has said everything that needs to be expressed. He read all my thoughts LOL ... This is nice Ms Elisa ..

Thank you so very much for your support :) I appreciate it muchly!

P.s. Yes, Pax is a brilliant reviewer :) so glad to have him by on my works....

[Author Unknown]

I'm glad I have an uncanny allegiance .

I know you're brilliant likewise my dear friend. ;) now I just do :D

[Kenneth The Poet]

There's a slave/master vibe to this piece, without all accouterments associated with such a piece. It's like the relationship is going to hell fast and there's no way to save it. To read such a piece from your hand is quite unexpected and I like it.

Thank you for this.

You know this isn't me right? you know me :D I must thank you for this great review my friend.....

[Kenneth The Poet]

I do. Not a problem at all either.

Thanks buddy, it was an "out of a body experience" ;)

[CoraZanini]

amazing,just the way you said everything and the feeling i get reading it,amazing!

Thank you so much.... dear xx

[joshua deathdealer]

Where are you...Who are you now..my daytime slumber..come and wake me up. Bring me back to myself. I shall arise..beautiful

Through the darken night,
I'm so lost in;
Your selfish pity monster,
Shining furious fake warmth

Ooooooh thank you thank you bud........ ♥♥

[joshua deathdealer]

I have a new one I'm working on and the ending is like this..and I will sit here until your kiss comes and wakes me up again..

That's true zombie bud.... I shall kiss you awake dear friend..... I"m so zombie lately, even vamp.... it's true, I can't denial it. ;) ha xo

(deny) maybe.... and I can't thank you enough!! So so curious, even about your new book/story... about the dream of past, and presence.... tell me more soon k? xx

[joshua deathdealer]

Don't deny it. lol the new book is about love thru reincarnation but I also have a poem...the next one..which I am speaking of..I have been staying up all night for so long..i'm used to tho lol

Lol we are so the same haha... I piss my pants now, coz of the fact..... ;) almost... :P oh can't wait to read it. :) and the poem too. You keep me sane on here lol.... ;) and to let me come back soon. We are rocking as zombies.... p.s. screw the standard :P ♫

[joshua deathdealer]

Babe your poems keep me here. seriously tho. I honestly think your favorite writer on here. I check all the time to read your latest work. "stereo blazes and my hearts on fire...another bullet through my head and then we will call it a night"...screw the standard..xoxo

And yours keep me here. Honestly ;) You're mine too, there is nobody who seriously can reach deeper in a soul than you can. Most are too rational :)

[Lover Of Words]

How to put your talents into words all i can say your beauty is as bright as the sun and your work always speaks volumes love this one

I'm so grateful to you Kels... thank you, this one was a most painful piece I ever wrote.... sniff...

[Lover Of Words]

I saw the pain in your words love but your strength and wisdom will carry you as far as your smiling heart will carry you and i hope it is as far as your dreams will allow and further from your fears and may you find peace in yourself

Thank you love, for the sweet words, towards this piece, they mean the world to me... (((YOU))) wise young woman xx

[Lover Of Words]

It is you whom deserves the standing ovation my love your words are painful yet somehow inspiring as are you dear

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Wow! This is dark, sis....
The pain is all-consuming.
The hurt is unbearable...
I understand the self pity.... when one feels this ten-fold,
It becomes a black abyss that sucks the light out of everyone.
Especially damaging the one who cares so much.
"Septic matter" is toxic, whether it is hypothetical or not...

Intense piece!!....creatively written.~xoxo~

Oh thank you so much again love. You always understand my brain, and the love I have for others... I wished for better days for everyone. muwah! Love you darling xx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Me too...your heart is golden..
Profound write,sis!!XXXX

Yours too... it means a lot to me you are here. I call you soon. XXXX love