~ Profound

~ Profound

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~ Profound, Elisa Laura...

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~ Profound



 

We are the earth,

We run on the same planet,

 

                   You are in my future,

                   I was in your past,

 

Days whirl, like snowflakes,

For my eyes, but there is sunshine,

 

You melt my cold moments in your warm light,

                  Inside your heart,


                  Your happiness is my face ...

 

The ozone layer is not damaged,

When you sing your music,

 

                   And your arms around me, the radiation

                   Your faith brings me back to serenity

 

Evening counted times,

The mornings so shiny,

 

                    Confidence by the wind, of our existence,

                    Care, love, and the ink, our blood,

 

Tasted, lived, love that trembles, like a gift,

We are the atmosphere, the ring, of our

                     Hearts so near...


 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2013


Author's Note

Enjoy, xx
Wishing you all a wonderful Christmas xx

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Labyrinth of time, made of different realities...Love express itself mostly with the pain , and why we don`t have the power to say. Really profound piece, as its title. We pay high price, and exchange body for soul, go through many tests, nothing is just one choice. It`s meaningful...I loved this lines:
You melt my cold moments in your warm light,
Inside your heart,
Love is all

:: nour::
:: 03.014::

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Beautiful words, yet again by you sweety. :) This was a piece to someone very special, as well to ev.. read more



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Labyrinth of time, made of different realities...Love express itself mostly with the pain , and why we don`t have the power to say. Really profound piece, as its title. We pay high price, and exchange body for soul, go through many tests, nothing is just one choice. It`s meaningful...I loved this lines:
You melt my cold moments in your warm light,
Inside your heart,
Love is all

:: nour::
:: 03.014::

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Beautiful words, yet again by you sweety. :) This was a piece to someone very special, as well to ev.. read more
You are in my future,
I was in your past,

nice and very pure, loved it

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you for the long-life-time-trust, time is just a value some genius gave it a name... it flows .. read more
A. Amos

10 Years Ago

You are the one who is born with a gift to heal, sad and lonely souls trying to find just a glimpse .. read more

10 Years Ago

I think you there are one too my dear friend.... ;) I just reflect your beauty xx
I'm getting addicted to the music you attach with your work. I love this poem, and I love the music, haha.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

*talk lol, typed too fast, I have that issue sometimes... (they say) ha ha...
Brittany Zedalis

10 Years Ago

I type too fast for my own good sometimes.

10 Years Ago

Yes, I should let land my thoughts first before the hands type, impulsive sometimes ;-) but all with.. read more
Wow. Such grand tones. So big.. so atmospheric. Its almost like I can see this hand wave over the world and bless it. And with such invitation... the calling out... so personified. Its lends such life.
The poem makes me feel like we are one organism.
Timeless quality to it. Profound is a good title. All that we are or ever will be... happens here.
Nice Elisa-

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Terry, my friend, yes, well said, wow... I felt like an amoebe, when I wrote this .. read more
Dear sis, I've had this one in my bookmarks for the longest time and just never got around to leaving a comment...you know how crazy things have been lately. But I wanted to tell you how awestruck I am by this piece...it is pure beauty, a truly moving read. I'm still trying to catch up on the writings of my friends, and I will be back to read more of your masterpieces soon...take care Eli, you know you're always in my mind and I wish you the utmost happiness :) xoxo

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much sweet brother, you know I'm in the same vessel ;) so I understand you fully, I hav.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

You know I view you in the same light sis, on all points :) As always, no rush to get in touch...I k.. read more

10 Years Ago

And that's how it is sweetheart. :) trust is the key to us :) you are in my thoughts, and I wish you.. read more
WOOOW !! such beautiful metaphors!!!
I specially liked this one:
"You melt my cold moments in your warm light, Inside your heart
I love the relation you made between cold-warm, struggles-love. It is just sublime!!
the love of a heart calms the pain of a bad moment, as the heat of light warms and melts the ice.
bravissimo!!!!! :D

I also liked the musicality of this verse:
"The ozone layer is not damaged,When you sing your music"
It calls for a better world, one that's possible when you are with the ones we love.

And for the last. this one:
"We are the atmosphere, the ring, of our Hearts so near
It reminds me true friendship, with connected hearts, that doesn't have to see physically each other, but just to talk at a distance, their souls and feelings connect each other

BEAUTIFUL
I'm giving you a 100 ok? you deserve it :)
(but shhhh.... don’t tell anyone I'm doing this ;) )

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Hahaha hermano loco, lol que amo... entiendo su teoría mapache .... LOL Sis is leaving... rapidooo.. read more
Fernando Dardón

10 Years Ago

University I'd say ;) okay
seeeeyaaaa!!! :) (yeah, i'm kinda crazy :D )

10 Years Ago

LOL si, meant that... ofc. :))) Sis is tired, and should shut her fuzzy eyes down now lol.... besos,.. read more
Very Profound indeed Elisa:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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10 Years Ago

Its all good:) good:) Nice meeting you too:)

10 Years Ago

Thank you as well, and I shall come by soon when our time zones are not so much in difference :) pro.. read more
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10 Years Ago

Elisa your friendship is enough:) ok:) I saw the RR thing yes I see in the same light my dear poetic.. read more
What the title says...and it inspires me to press on.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

He he, smiling... you should you should ;)
Well considering the sheer number of metaphors, I'd say the title pretty much sums this one up. I liked how the 'Your happiness' line is stood alone, it emphasises it well as quite a potent line sort of hammers home the connectivity that I got from the poem. Well done on the write, El. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you Kyle for the beautiful words towards this one, I always can learn something from you, very.. read more

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