~ Profound

~ Profound, Elisa Laura...

~ Profound

 

We are the earth,

We run on the same planet,

 

                   You are in my future,

                   I was in your past,

 

Days whirl, like snowflakes,

For my eyes, but there is sunshine,

 

You melt my cold moments in your warm light,

                  Inside your heart,

                  Your happiness is my face ...

 

The ozone layer is not damaged,

When you sing your music,

 

                   And your arms around me, the radiation

                   Your faith brings me back to serenity

 

Evening counted times,

The mornings so shiny,

 

                    Confidence by the wind, of our existence,

                    Care, love, and the ink, our blood,

 

Tasted, lived, love that trembles, like a gift,

We are the atmosphere, the ring, of our

                     Hearts so near...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Enjoy, xx
Wishing you all a wonderful Christmas xx

Reviews

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Labyrinth of time, made of different realities...Love express itself mostly with the pain , and why we don`t have the power to say. Really profound piece, as its title. We pay high price, and exchange body for soul, go through many tests, nothing is just one choice. It`s meaningful...I loved this lines:
You melt my cold moments in your warm light,
Inside your heart,
Love is all

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Beautiful words, yet again by you sweety. :) This was a piece to someone very special, as well to everyone... for there is a love between all connected time-zones, and the comets we have in our universe. -x- I'm smiling with your reviews :) I will be back for you as soon as I can...

[A. Amos]

You are in my future,
I was in your past,

nice and very pure, loved it

Thank you so much! :) (it's the world, and time) only we are appart.... so some live in the future, some, live in the past, but we are all art....

[A. Amos]

I 100% agree with you and really do want and wish great success for you in life.

Thank you dear one... I apperciate you. :) be back soon for you.

[A. Amos]

you are most welcome and check out my poem plea of a sinner:)

I read already, leave my comment soon ;) you're awesome.

[A. Amos]

so are you my friend always remember i'm one of your loyal fan

So am I dear one... I know your heart... somehow, it's very close to mine :)

[A. Amos]

thank you very much

Always my honest pleasure. My voice never lies.

[A. Amos]

so does mine i really believe you are star and no one can stop your shine

Through your honest writing, I believe you're one too... even unseen by many yet, but not unnoticed by me.... ;) I have the feeling I know you for years.

[A. Amos]

because we are artist and we know what we do is not easy, we create fun for people living all our joys behind its not everyone job. I can see many thing they are writers but capturing your crowd and making them follow that is what you can do.

Sure I can, and sure I have a crowd already, but for me, that's not the most important thing, I have a real good life next to this place, and ofc. it's nice to be on top here, but not a must... I glow, when others get there, honestly, I have had my time here... a few years ago ;) still it's nice, but never my priority, I'm more a woman on the background, observing, watching, analyzing, and helping others, for they deserve it.

[A. Amos]

God you have wonderful and beautiful soul, with so much feeling that is why you are good in writing. God bless you and keep you safe as I feel like your my daughter or my sister and i just want your success in decent form. I'm truly honor to meet a soul like yours

The feeling is mutual my friend, bless you too. Shine like an Alpha Centauri bright, and alight, the sky with your words. Great to have talked to you, and there will be more talks. I'm sure. I'll be back, I won't forget true soul-connection. A honor for me too to have met you.

[A. Amos]

Its help to ease your mind when you know someone is out there and you can talk, I will read all your work and will guide you honestly OK

I will do the same.... that's a promise, I honestly can be a slow turtle, but I do..... I have a life-time mind mantra. :)

[A. Amos]

i know that is why I'm your strong believer take your time no worries

Thank you for the long-life-time-trust, time is just a value some genius gave it a name... it flows rather beyond space, and happening, while we just don't expect it ;) and that's where I often am.

[A. Amos]

You are the one who is born with a gift to heal, sad and lonely souls trying to find just a glimpse of bliss, enjoy life gain more experience and than you the whole world will follow you where ever you go

I think you there are one too my dear friend.... ;) I just reflect your beauty xx

[Brittany Zedalis]

I'm getting addicted to the music you attach with your work. I love this poem, and I love the music, haha.

Aww you are the best!! thanks so much, he he... another eclectic Sister in the house ;) seriously, I can't wait to be back lol, I think we match well in a lot of things... I mean "anime" for example, I can see it through your writing.

[Brittany Zedalis]

I have an unhealthy addiction to anime. Haha.

Haha see.... lol knew it..... for me, it's something, that the western world don't understand.... ;) takl soon to you lady xx :D

[Brittany Zedalis]

Sounds good to me xD

To me too :)! thank you for all so far! (big smile here)

*talk lol, typed too fast, I have that issue sometimes... (they say) ha ha...

[Brittany Zedalis]

I type too fast for my own good sometimes.

Yes, I should let land my thoughts first before the hands type, impulsive sometimes ;-) but all with a good heart... see you soon, must sleep now, urg, time difference :) x

[Odysseus Wanders]

Wow. Such grand tones. So big.. so atmospheric. Its almost like I can see this hand wave over the world and bless it. And with such invitation... the calling out... so personified. Its lends such life.
The poem makes me feel like we are one organism.
Timeless quality to it. Profound is a good title. All that we are or ever will be... happens here.
Nice Elisa-

Thank you so much Terry, my friend, yes, well said, wow... I felt like an amoebe, when I wrote this :D Keen insight, I appreciate you, and your review Terry. :) Elisa.

[kublakhan27]

Dear sis, I've had this one in my bookmarks for the longest time and just never got around to leaving a comment...you know how crazy things have been lately. But I wanted to tell you how awestruck I am by this piece...it is pure beauty, a truly moving read. I'm still trying to catch up on the writings of my friends, and I will be back to read more of your masterpieces soon...take care Eli, you know you're always in my mind and I wish you the utmost happiness :) xoxo

Thank you so much sweet brother, you know I'm in the same vessel ;) so I understand you fully, I have still to respond to many e-mails, I try to plan a day for it soon... Know you're also always in my mind, and I am worried about you... But I know you're stong... stronger then you think ;-) Much love Steve! take good care, and don't ever rush on my writings ok? xx

[kublakhan27]

You know I view you in the same light sis, on all points :) As always, no rush to get in touch...I know you're never far away and you know that's true on my end as well...all the best to you...much love :) xo

And that's how it is sweetheart. :) trust is the key to us :) you are in my thoughts, and I wish you soon better... much love. xo and really thank you so much for all you do :)

[Fernando Dardón]

WOOOW !! such beautiful metaphors!!!
I specially liked this one:
"You melt my cold moments in your warm light, Inside your heart
I love the relation you made between cold-warm, struggles-love. It is just sublime!!
the love of a heart calms the pain of a bad moment, as the heat of light warms and melts the ice.
bravissimo!!!!! :D

I also liked the musicality of this verse:
"The ozone layer is not damaged,When you sing your music"
It calls for a better world, one that's possible when you are with the ones we love.

And for the last. this one:
"We are the atmosphere, the ring, of our Hearts so near
It reminds me true friendship, with connected hearts, that doesn't have to see physically each other, but just to talk at a distance, their souls and feelings connect each other

BEAUTIFUL
I'm giving you a 100 ok? you deserve it :)
(but shhhh.... don’t tell anyone I'm doing this ;) )

Thank you so much hermanito, I truly love your keen insight and lovely words towards this write. You dig deep into the richer meaning of it, and seem to understand it fully. I'm blessed to have you over again, :) smiling here. I won't tell anyone, you know, I'm not acutally hear for the ratings, but just to share my thoughts, with similar people, like yourself... heartstings, music, love, and family forever ;) xx

[Fernando Dardón]

Always a pleasure (and it really is) to read your poetry and review you :)
Now, go to sleep dear, cause then you'll look like a raccoon. You know why? :D

Hahaha hermano loco, lol que amo... entiendo su teoría mapache .... LOL Sis is leaving... rapidoooo ;) talk/chat soon brother. Take a good sleep too, and be allert on school ;) xx

[Fernando Dardón]

University I'd say ;) okay
seeeeyaaaa!!! :) (yeah, i'm kinda crazy :D )

LOL si, meant that... ofc. :))) Sis is tired, and should shut her fuzzy eyes down now lol.... besos, seeya! xx

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Very Profound indeed Elisa:)

Thank you Sir :) good to see you by! :)

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Sir is like putting a name on an out house it just don't fit lol:) Name Jon I respect the sir but its not me lol:) But I should be thanking you in such a divine write that transformed the sky. That was all you not me lol:) I'll gaze some more in your sky soon.

Oh lol, I'm sorry... ha! I thought I was just being polite ;-) lol well Jon thank you then.... I will do the same Jon ;-)

[0000000000000000000000000000]

You were:) no sorry needed ok your fine, Your very welcome:) respect is awesome but that sir makes me feel like I'm 100 lol btw I'm the one on the left in the cover pic that's my buddy Allen:)

It's just how the Dutch are educated probably ;-) he he, but thanks for saying so, now I call you just "Jon" promise :) Ah cool! always nice to know! nice to meet you new friend.

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Its all good:) good:) Nice meeting you too:)

Thank you as well, and I shall come by soon when our time zones are not so much in difference :) promise, will review soon, and like to do that.

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Elisa your friendship is enough:) ok:) I saw the RR thing yes I see in the same light my dear poetic friend. Let the words flourish in a linger of breeze and find there ways to a wishful limb: Because the words always find they way home:) Bless be pleasure meeting and becoming friends:)

[Kenneth The Poet]

What the title says...and it inspires me to press on.

He he, smiling... you should you should ;)

[TheSweet]

Well considering the sheer number of metaphors, I'd say the title pretty much sums this one up. I liked how the 'Your happiness' line is stood alone, it emphasises it well as quite a potent line sort of hammers home the connectivity that I got from the poem. Well done on the write, El. :)

Thank you Kyle for the beautiful words towards this one, I always can learn something from you, very nice!