~ Soft Whispers

~ Soft Whispers, Elisa Laura, Dark, Fantasy, Ambient, Dreams, Dream Visions, Night Walks

~ Soft Whispers

 

 

Soft sounds,

Rippling, like fingers

On a table

 

Long pauses, silence…

Returning rhythms,

The whirl of thoughts

 

Of you in me...

 

I hear you for years,

In nights, like these

 

Before the moon is full,

Do you want 

           To tell me something?

 

“Tell it to me,

            Say it!”

Stop whispering…!

 

You can trust me,

The sea is ours

 

And I was there for centuries,

But your name was the future,

 

Like a mirror of the ocean,

 

Now we will never be

Together, my own soul,

 

My previous life...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Reviews

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I love the vastness of this poem. It uses references to such a wide expanse as a backdrop and it really is a benefit to what I am feeling that you are meaning. The contrast between vast and specific, centuries of time and things that happen in a moment...the wide expanse of the sea and the specificity of fingers tapping on a table, it all adds to the feeling of the depths of this emotion. You have made me realize something about writing; I need to take an idea from music and use it in my poetry. In musical recordings there is something they call the "Pad" in the background. It is not an instrument. Instead it is the collective "background noise" which the producer/sound engineer has built into a feeling. The Pad includes the echo of a wide opened room, or the immediacy of the feeling the singer is right there in bed with you. All these feelings are part of it. If you hear a seagull just for as second in a song, then you immediately think of that song as taking place at the beach. In the case of this poem, the clever "pad" you set down of vast time depth and wide ranges of distance really supported the themes well.

Truly Ro, such a great review from you my friend, not only do you seem to understand my subconscious, but also, the facts of "lucidity". I think you exactly felt here too. (that's a great combination), and I am truly happy you did. Many thanks these are reviews, I hope for, and will dig your words truly! - Elisa

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Many thanks for your excavations, and may you dig up great treasures, from one archaeologist to another!

You're welcome, I've learnt much today from your point of view. And what a wonderful inspiring words here... may you too!! ;)

[Eric Pudalov]

Robby, I appreciate this review as well! That concept of the "pad" is something I haven't necessarily applied to my poetry before, and yet it seems so important. I remember reading an interview with John Paul Jones of Led Zeppelin, and he was talking about the song "Going to California," saying it "sounds like lawn sitting." I think that's part of what you're talking about; the "pad" built into the song gave it the overall feel of someone playing guitar and singing out on a grassy lawn.

Thank you for replying to this......

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I totally agree about Led Zeppelin! This is just what I am talking about!!! It really is possible to do this in poetry. It takes a clear idea of how to lend a feeling to something, but with the smallest of allusions!

[Eric Pudalov]

You know, I may have done it in my poetry without realizing it - I didn't know there was an actual term for it. But I think that creating an "environment," if you will, is part of good storytelling. Perhaps in the next poem that I write/publish on here, I'll keep that in mind.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

It is something I notice that good writers can do, but other writers really can't. It is the art of creating an environment, but then only barely alluding to it. A good writer can give you the barest details, but you still can fill in the rest for yourself. It is a unique ability and I don't know what the word is for it, but it is a way of showing without really even needing to give the details. You have to sense your audience so well that they don't even know what you are slipping into their minds.

[Eric Pudalov]

We had studied something like that in a poetry workshop I took. We did a lesson called "overstatement/understatement," and I decided to go with understatement. I wrote a poem about rape, but never explicitly stated that it was about rape...I just described the feelings between the man and the woman. I think that's what you're talking about, if I'm not mistaken?!

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

That IS what I am talking about! Brilliant use of understatement!! It allows the audience to participate when you leave things out but trust them to fill in the gap!

[sharonlee]

Such a haunting quality to your thoughts... softly moving, deeply resonating.

Thank you so much darlin, this was a real dream.... :) I am so happy to see you by! xx

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Wow,what a great poem,Loved it!! You started off totally fabulous,the end brought so much sorrow everyone deserve happiness:) thanks for sharing*

Thank you very much Carl :) always happy to see ya!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I had to slow down and read this word by word! The flow of perceiving images with your words was nice...I wonder the metaphor.

Thanks a lot Shane... :) I will tell you the metaphor one day ;)

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I hope so :) The suspense is killing me, I hope it lasts!

;) I will........... he he

[MsJewel]

I can relate to this beautiful poem in so many ways Elisa. It is as if you have taken a peek into my heart.

The dream like feel of your words is almost as though a whisper - or a soft breath in the moonlight.
You have so much talent. You never cease to amaze me.

:) Julie

Thank you very much Julie :) for your wonderful words, upon this write. Hope you have a great evening! xo

[Edgar Perez]

There isn't much I can say to express how
much I love this piece.so im just gonna smile.
And I really wish you can feel my smile,
because I feel your words.
I am truly blessed to read your work.
This is absolutely brilliant.

Thank you very much dear Edgar, for being here, and to spread your thoughts... I feel honored with your presence. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

simply breathtaking, these words...we have to express our feelings or they will pass us by...

And then I did hear a whisper, from a very good friend.... and I had to express how grateful I was to him ;)

[captain]

This reminds me of an old soul speaking to us, whispering soft voices reminding us like dejavu of the past as if we did something from the previous life that we did today. Very nice!

Thank you so much dear friend, for pointing out what you got out of it... I think you as a true navigator, can feel ... :) the sea is mighty.

[captain]

welcome, as the navigator the flow of emotions is my drive :).

[PearlPoet]

"Now we will never be
Together, my own soul,

My previous life..."


Never say never! Your poem touched me on so many levels tonight.. A Beautiful verse from a Beautiful Soul.. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~soft hugs~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Thank you very much dear friend... coming from you means much to me A. :) turning around, and back to sleep ~~~hugs~~~ 'til after weekends! :)

[PearlPoet]

Have a great one dear One! ~smiles~ Im not going to sleep yet, Jacob's review awakened me ~winks~

Thanks, a lot! I will come by soon for your newest ;)

[PearlPoet]

Rest, no need for hurry I will be "around" for awhile...

[Raymond Federle]

This is one of those things you just can't simply read. You have to feel your way through each word and line and it doesn't feel as though it ends but continues on with a life of it's own after all is said. Excellent and groovy and did I mention brilliant? :) The video is awesome to!

Thank you very much Raymond... yes, to feel, and nothing but to feel... glad you could found a connection here. :)

* could find... ;) (I'm half asleep)..... be back soon for yours!