~ Illusions?

~ Illusions?, Elisa Laura, What do you know? What do you feel, What do you see? What will you Assume? Illusions, Life, Death, Love, Live, Real, Scribble, Hurt, Facts, Truth, Fake? Time for a change.

~ Illusions?

 

 

Rare dark streets,

The smell of chemicals

Ether hanging in thin air

Hospital odor meets;

 

Dancing on your bed,

Looking at the sky, 

The ceiling lights so high,

Flashing, before your eyes,

Trembling, shaking fled ...

 

Needles in your arms,

Blood through your veins,

Darkness in your thoughts, 

Life in your pains…

Silence for a while...

There is a little bit of

Death in your breath...

After each time we've met...

 

 ~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Music by: Nine Inch Nails - Closer - Instrumental

Enjoy even the darker me. xx

Reviews

[Rosalind Gale]

Your darkness, to me, is everything. It is the light from which I can always feel you, see you, and know your emotions. This poem reminds me of a song, I mean, it could be one. This piece made me want to smoke a cigarette, but I dare not. My baby will tell me off. You are special.
-x-

Thank you very much dear one... I have the same with your writings, they are all brilliant... Oh and don't smoke ;) he he... you're the best xoxo :)

[Ice QueenJen]

Nicely written poem Elisa!

Thank you so much Jenny love, always a blast when you visit -x- :)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

beautiful and painful, as love and life...Reminds me of vision of short movie, life is so tender, we can`t know its "logic", but can feel this airy illusions , made of words, realized in poems as yours. very deep, strong and lonely. I loved the expression "Life in your pains". so real!

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Thank you so much again for a wonderful review, this one is up to the reader whether it's real or not... ;-) and I love what you got out of it... -x- :)

[zephyr]

What a fantastic write and love the tunes.

Thank you very much Sarah. :)

[joshua deathdealer]

The ending is to die for!! Dark and stormy piece that leaves the reader breathless and yearning for more. Excellent work dear. xo

Oooh thank you so much my soul-seeer, reader, lover :D xx have missed you bud! hope your night is well xx

[joshua deathdealer]

I am well. Getting ready to have a surprise birthday party for my mom. Should be fun..lol How are you?

Oh wow, so great, did you finished that special song for / to her? I hope so :D should be so fun! so glad to hear.... I'm in early monring lol... didn't slept well, but well you know how it goes he he... xxxxx catching up on some pillow later ;-)

[joshua deathdealer]

We did finish the song...kinda nervous about playing it in front of fifty people or so...lol but it should go well. It's early morning here too..a little after 4 am. I can't sleep either..so much to do later. Have a pleasant rest though and a blessed day.

;) no, you rock, why nervous ;D he he.... I know how brilliant you are. lol, I understand though, it's always exciting. Every single performance. Oh happy so happy for you, I must go in a while, catch up on a bit rest later.... but so happy you have nothing planned.... hugs deary..xx

[RienKelsoCinema]

"Needles in your arms,

Blood through your veins,

Darkness in your thoughts,

Life in your pains…"


So much to say here that rings in a thousand images. Most of them not good. But sometimes this is what needs to be said. Brutal but very real.

Sorry it disturbed you, yep this one was real... :) I'm not very often like that.... :) your review is so appreciated.

[RienKelsoCinema]

No, not disturbed in the sense of off putting. You can write whatever you want, no one can tell you what to write. I wasn't saying it was disturbing, I was saying it was a familiar feeling through the sub-conscious.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, brilliantly dark work here, Elisa. I thought it was just about a stay in the hospital till I got to the last stanza. "A little bit of death in your breath."....hmmm....makes me think about the ending of a relationship...one that neither party wants to sever too quickly, but both know it is really headed in that direction. As always, very well written. I missed this one when you initially posted it. Knuffels, Lydi**

Oh Lydi, what would I do without you? :) I can't thank you enough, you're making my night with this one. Beautiful how you pick up all details always. Knuffels xx

[TheSweet]

I think this the place where our work meets in the middle. It has a lot of the sporadic style of my poems - plus it's kinda got the rather dark undertone. Overall I quite enjoyed this wirte and I rather love the line: 'There is a little bit of death in your breath.' It's the kind of line I wish I'd written myself. In so few words, you've spoken a lot so I can't help but praise it. Thanks :)

Thank you so much sweet Kyle, for these words, feel honored you seem to recognise some things to your own writing style. Your reviews are always so appreciated here.

[TheSweet]

Hehe, you say that now, but maybe one day I'll find something I thoroughly dislike :>

But so far that seems very unlikely. :P I love the song, by the way. Have a nice rest of the week!

Oh, but please if you find something you thoroughly dislike, tell me honestly where I can improve myself to the max. ;) You know I appreciate you. And you too! hope all is well, and also with your studies. :)

[Fernando Dardón]

We are made of dark feelings, and also of luminous feelings. I guess that the difficult part is to balance ourselves, just like the ying-yang. Maybe it is necesary to experiment a little of both to unos whether we are alive or not.
Bonne poème, sœur. Vous êtes un expert :)

Merci mon cherie frère.... :) thanks so much, you always get big Sis. :) This write has facts in it who are true... I will explain you soon all. :D so glad you came by!!!x

[Fernando Dardón]

Mon plaisir :)

: ) early morning smiles! gracias hermanito. Must do a lot today urg... be back soon promise!

[Lover Of Words]

Darkness is a beauty in one soul, this is dark yes but still has that beautiful touch to it...

Thank you sweet Kelsey, Not so much online lately, but I will be back for you... I'm so grateful to you. This was a hard write. It has reality in it.

[Lover Of Words]

havent been on much myself such a powerful piece