~ Illusions?

~ Illusions?

A Poem by
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~ Illusions?, Elisa Laura, What do you know? What do you feel, What do you see? What will you Assume? Illusions, Life, Death, Love, Live, Real, Scribble, Hurt, Facts, Truth, Fake? Time for a change.

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~ Illusions?

 

 

Rare dark streets,

The smell of chemicals

Ether hanging in thin air

Hospital odor meets;

 

Dancing on your bed,

Looking at the sky, 

The ceiling lights so high,

Flashing, before your eyes,

Trembling, shaking fled ...

 

Needles in your arms,

Blood through your veins,

Darkness in your thoughts, 

Life in your pains…


Silence for a while...


There is a little bit of

Death in your breath...

After each time we've met...


 

 ~ Elisa Laura

© 2013


Author's Note


Music by: Nine Inch Nails - Closer - Instrumental

Enjoy even the darker me. xx

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Your darkness, to me, is everything. It is the light from which I can always feel you, see you, and know your emotions. This poem reminds me of a song, I mean, it could be one. This piece made me want to smoke a cigarette, but I dare not. My baby will tell me off. You are special.
-x-

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear one... I have the same with your writings, they are all brilliant... Oh and.. read more



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Nicely written poem Elisa!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Jenny love, always a blast when you visit -x- :)
beautiful and painful, as love and life...Reminds me of vision of short movie, life is so tender, we can`t know its "logic", but can feel this airy illusions , made of words, realized in poems as yours. very deep, strong and lonely. I loved the expression "Life in your pains". so real!

:: nour ::
:: 03.014::

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much again for a wonderful review, this one is up to the reader whether it's real or no.. read more
What a fantastic write and love the tunes.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much Sarah. :)
The ending is to die for!! Dark and stormy piece that leaves the reader breathless and yearning for more. Excellent work dear. xo

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Oh wow, so great, did you finished that special song for / to her? I hope so :D should be so fun! so.. read more
joshua deathdealer

10 Years Ago

We did finish the song...kinda nervous about playing it in front of fifty people or so...lol but it .. read more

10 Years Ago

;) no, you rock, why nervous ;D he he.... I know how brilliant you are. lol, I understand though, it.. read more
"Needles in your arms,

Blood through your veins,

Darkness in your thoughts,

Life in your pains…"


So much to say here that rings in a thousand images. Most of them not good. But sometimes this is what needs to be said. Brutal but very real.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Sorry it disturbed you, yep this one was real... :) I'm not very often like that.... :) your review .. read more
RienKelsoCinema

10 Years Ago

No, not disturbed in the sense of off putting. You can write whatever you want, no one can tell you .. read more
Oh, brilliantly dark work here, Elisa. I thought it was just about a stay in the hospital till I got to the last stanza. "A little bit of death in your breath."....hmmm....makes me think about the ending of a relationship...one that neither party wants to sever too quickly, but both know it is really headed in that direction. As always, very well written. I missed this one when you initially posted it. Knuffels, Lydi**

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Oh Lydi, what would I do without you? :) I can't thank you enough, you're making my night with this .. read more
I think this the place where our work meets in the middle. It has a lot of the sporadic style of my poems - plus it's kinda got the rather dark undertone. Overall I quite enjoyed this wirte and I rather love the line: 'There is a little bit of death in your breath.' It's the kind of line I wish I'd written myself. In so few words, you've spoken a lot so I can't help but praise it. Thanks :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much sweet Kyle, for these words, feel honored you seem to recognise some things to you.. read more
TheSweet

10 Years Ago

Hehe, you say that now, but maybe one day I'll find something I thoroughly dislike :>

B.. read more

10 Years Ago

Oh, but please if you find something you thoroughly dislike, tell me honestly where I can improve my.. read more
We are made of dark feelings, and also of luminous feelings. I guess that the difficult part is to balance ourselves, just like the ying-yang. Maybe it is necesary to experiment a little of both to unos whether we are alive or not.
Bonne poème, sœur. Vous êtes un expert :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Merci mon cherie frère.... :) thanks so much, you always get big Sis. :) This write has facts in it.. read more
Fernando Dardón

10 Years Ago

Mon plaisir :)

10 Years Ago

: ) early morning smiles! gracias hermanito. Must do a lot today urg... be back soon promise!
Darkness is a beauty in one soul, this is dark yes but still has that beautiful touch to it...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you sweet Kelsey, Not so much online lately, but I will be back for you... I'm so grateful to .. read more
Lover Of Words

10 Years Ago

havent been on much myself such a powerful piece

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