~ Air

~ Air, Elisa Laura, Sky, Nothingness, Freedom, Wings, Relativation

~ Air

I flew over high mountains,

I could paint so many landscapes

With my eyes, looking down

On the seas and fields

 

The sun in me, warmed my soul

The wind was kind, and gentle

You were everything inside of me

My beloved air

 

You were the space,

Everything around me,

Nothing more than air,

For my blood, lungs and heart

For you I lived, without awareness

 

So dreaming and thinking the sky

I found myself in you,

And you my large cloud

My wave of passion

The storm of my core,

Mingled with me in our skies

 

My air, and I

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Music - B-Tribe - La Unica Excusa...
Enjoy! xx

Reviews

[RienKelsoCinema]

I'm taking another read.


"My wave of passion

The storm of my core,"


Seems to stick with me. This foundation is what creates the person of tomorrow. Think about it. With no passion comes no ambition. It is something you can't explain, it's just something you have to do. Good read.

Thank you so much my friend, I do love your take on this one.... :) Smiling here..... good morning from Holland :D

[RienKelsoCinema]

Thanks!

Good morning from the US. :D

[Pax]

“My air, and I”

Air, is what we breathe, it lives inside of us as it is a part of us, we can’t exist without it. And in love we feel empty without it.

“For you I lived, without awareness”

Oh those lines reminds me so much of how love comes to us without us knowing. And then we say how could I ever so blind, loving someone without even realizing it.

It's just so nice to read, love in many perspective, in many form, in many verse of your poetry big sis. Here is Air, another form of love. Filled our lungs to pump our hearts to keep it beating for us to live and to love. Refreshed!

Oh exactly, we breathe, often we don't are grateful we do... :) well seen! bro :D smiling here. We should every day be grateful we awake, and are alive.... ♥ that's the motto of this write.

Thank you so much for such a beautiful review again.... sigh! :)

[Pax]

yup, i always remind myself to be grateful even the little things in life. and most specially that- grateful we are alive and kicking some a*s in our words..hehe and you are most welcome...

So true...... :) I'm smiling

[Samuel Jack]

This is gorgeous! This poem totally captures the giddy feeling of first love and then the strengthening of that love.

Really enjoyed the visuals you paint, flying free at the start through golden clouds and then head first Into a sex storm! That's what I imagined anyway ;)

You've got some absolutely "spot on" ;) Lines in there, but I think "my beloved air" is my favourite, it's such a good metaphor for love because what's more important to life than air? Nothing.

Thank you so much my friend for your great review. I will be back for yours in the New Year, wishing you a great time :)))

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

This is such a beautiful poem with nothing much I can add, which is an oddity. Some poetry spurs me to be forced to give suggestions, but this is clear and complete. It reminds me of a dream I had where I wasn't just flying, I was high up in the clouds like a plane. At one point I dipped down into the mountains, and then soared back up, feeling the cool clear air...I can picture this feeling very well and your words brought the dream from years ago right back.

Hi Ro, thanks a lot truly. :) I'm ever so happy to read it brougt some dream flash-backs back in front of your eyes. Beautiful to read your words my friend. :)

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

;) I look forward to properly reviewing more of your poetry!

The feeling is mutual my friend. (hate it I lack in time right now lol). I wish I could live on a lovely Island, and get my head more focused, (have some rest)... thanks so much for the review, truly means much to me! I'll come back for your writings, they always inspire. :)

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Oh man, I have always wanted to live on an island alone in the sun. It might be lonely sometimes, but I think my rich inner life would keep me just busy enough! I totally get it about time. Just enjoy your holidays, sweetie!

I'm a bit of a loner sometimes... ;) you know HSP need rest, focus now and then ;) I think I would make a huge mister Wilson :) to talk too. ;) it's so good to be inner rich, better than in the wallet I always say. You to, have the most wonderful time dear one. :)

[Tina Kline]

A very beautiful and impressive poem. Your skill shines in this write and I enjoyed reading it.

Thank you so much my dear Tina, and goddes of the darker quill~ much love, will be back for you :D can't wait!! xo

[Paul Seaman]

Interesting mix of placing the topic of your poem inside yourself. Within / Without. Kinda Cool.

Thank you so much, It is mainly a meditative aspect, many forget ;)

[Scott Metro]

So very pretty...I love the way you find beauty in the simplicity of life..only a kind heart and soothed soul could see everything so close.....I am your reader now...you have pulled me into the serenity.

Bless you lovely soul...
Scott

Wow, thanks a lot my friend, that means much to me... What a nice review on my little poem... I'll be back for yours as soon as possible friend thanks again, Elisa

[Scott Metro]

I feel that you would be disappointed with my crippled abilities compared to your own.
I am a fan.
Scott

Oh no! not at all Scott, you are a very very good writer, (I just lack in time), so busy, and when I come by, I want to give all a writing gave me, did to me. So, I can be slow, but I will return the favor, my friend. Don't ever say such a thing again lol ;) you're one of the best here! Elis xx

[Scott Metro]

Kindness.................

[Matt Sayer]

Surrounded and filled with the perfect passion, swimming through the air and drinking it in, drunk on the essence of the wind that holds you aloft, free-falling but never touching the ground, gliding on the gusts of effervescent love. Such delicate and magical imagery here. Just beautiful! :)

Such great words here, my friend... you made me feel and reborn, like I flew like a true eagle. :) A dream I have, and it often returns... your words just made my early morning, I can't thank you enough :)))) ;)