~ Along the River

~ Along the River, Elisa Laura, The Sun, and The Moon, Japan, Travel, You, Me, Us, We, Nature, Being, Awareness, Love, Romance, Dead, Invisible, Ghosts

~ Along the River

 

I stared, for hours;

Until I felt a warm hand

On my shoulder,

 

     So I turned around

To catch a glimpse of your face,

A fragment of touch;

 

     And I saw nothing,

Not even you, but you were there,

I knew we traveled to Japan,

     It was another river,

     Another air;

 

On the “Shinano”

We are and stare...

 

While the Sun arises

    In a golden light,

 

And the day would come soon,

 

     You just touched

           A bit of the so

Silver  moon.

 

-           ~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Music by Kokia - Chouwa Oto - With Reflection
Enjoy! xx

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My Dearest Eli,
You know how I feel about the Sun... transcending a warm touch like no other...

There is gentle eloquent voice carried within each line of your narrative, which brings me to a place of solace.

You have penned a beautiful flow of words...Vibrant write!~xoxo~

Hey Sis, sorry I was on the phone a loooong call.... :) Thank you so much darling. I know how you feel about the sun, the sun is something/someone special. And Japan, is the land of the rising Sun, the country is one of my muses... Thank you for feeling this place, and see it as a place of solace, that means a lot. Your words I carry with me always Sis, they mean much to me xoxo :) thanks....

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Me too (on the phone) LOL :D
I was telling C that I would love to go to Japan one day...
read moreMe too (on the phone) LOL :D
I was telling C that I would love to go to Japan one day...
You are the best artist to etch such divine images. Gorgeous write!XXXXX :)

LOL, we are always on the phone haha..... :D yeah that would be great, the message didn't came through in it's length, but I read it on the live-feed, so many thanks love XXXXXXXX

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My comment got cut off... I said you are the Best Artist to write such divine images... YOU are the BEST! XXXXXX

*red-face* lol... no, I think you are... :D:D I'm just a weird traveler, with a notebook lol XXX

[emmajoy]

There are people who never die, never fade, never become nothing - they are, in spirit, in mind, in the heart. Your poem holds that firmly, mystically and with complete comfort. And the sun spreads its light, the moon shares its cloak and the touch just.. is.

Hi love, and yes... fantastically said by you... shivers from your words, in all good :D many thanks xo

[Sugar Plum ♥]

I loved all, the poem the sweet sound of memory, the photo and music...Giving me warm feeling in the cold days of winter. Your soul is connected so much with the spirit of nature and all love and memories are revealed in the view of nature...River is the flow of the changing life, sometimes clear, sometimes with dust or mud, watching the moving waters is really calming senses and bring us to higher level of understanding. Water is everywhere...You allow your mind to be open to the past and future and that how all energies and emotions flow in it! I love this poem-piece!

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What a wonderful review Nia, I knew you would know what I meant, and felt by this poem... I'm happy you felt connected here. Thank you so much ! x

[writing mojo]

Gravity, I am guessing in tides with this bodiless desired...great way to ponder on with ohms eclipsing to thought with out blue...excellent piece

I wonder sometimes a lot about the gravity... And the gravity of true love ;) thanks a lot my friend...

[writing mojo]

always welcome

I'm on my phone now, and away from home, I try to be back later to review more :) many thanks...

[Silent Serenity also kn..]

Very calm and soothing write here Elisa and the music just blends it all together.....you know those tranquility musics you can lay down and listen too well with your poetry here and the music you can almost envision your poem take a life of it's own.....Extremely creative and well written .... thank you for sharing dear :)

My dear friend, I'm honestly so glad you totally felt this write, even with the music, (some hate it) but it's typical Japanese, and in my eyes and ears, a masterpiece... eyes closed ofcourse, thank you so much for this lovely review... I will be back for you (in my evening I hope) xx

[David Scott]

I love how you hold your memories like a glowing aura around your soul.
You pen loss with the grace and quietness of a river flowing in a perfectly deep channel.
There is still a purpose and a connection to the moments that have washed downstream...
Always connected...

Lovely heartfelt poetry Eli.

I bow with respect before the poetic beauty of the Baroness. ;)

OMG thank you so much Mr. Scott :) that was exactly where I was going for, and tried to say.... you always feel me! I can't thank you enough for this beautiful review, I hope I feel a bit better tomorrow, so I can be more online to read/review... (not so well tonight), so early in bed... I wish you a happy evening, and thanks again :) xo

[David Scott]

Have a blessed sleep my friend. Enter your dreams with the gentleness and radiance of the setting Sun, and the strength of the Sun's promised refreshment on the morrow.

Thank you again so much, for the care, and lovely words my dear friend, I will, I think I'm just exhausted lol... sleep will do me good... :) muwah! to you friend,'til tomorrow x and you have a beautiful inspiring evening ok? :)

[kublakhan27]

I've felt many hands on my shoulders over the years, only to turn around and see nothing most of the time. I know you're there, my dear friend, yet nothing is all that I see. I can only imagine the presence of friends under these circumstances. Words are all I have: they are the only things that make me feel alive, and the only things that assure me that the nothing I see is only in the flesh. I desperately want to visit Japan someday, but I'll never have the money to fly overseas or do much of anything beyond my country. I always wonder how it would affect my writing. But it has done wonders for you sis...I'm always happy to see how you translate those feelings of movement into words. They are always beautiful. Great work as always dear sis...love always (((hugs))) :)

Thank you with whole my heart for this rich review sweet Steve. I'm speachless... :) your presence is always so appreciated dear bro, and what you say even more. :) (((Hugs and Love)))

[kublakhan27]

Love and hugs always, my dear friend and sister. I'm just glad that I can make you happy in any small way :) xoxo

You always make me the happiest dear big Bro! :))) xxx

[kublakhan27]

And you know the feeling is mutual my darling sis...hope you're enjoying your weekend :) *HUGS*

I do thank you darling... wishing you a great weekend too, much love! talk soon x

[Blank]

You have such poetry in your words, which I know sounds redundant since this is a poem, but the words you chose and the settings you set, they're always so beautiful and majestic. You articulate your feelings in such a way that it always comes across as soft and reassuring. Beautiful write with lovely images.

Oh thank you so much for this great review my friend... I truly appreciate it... :)

[love, lorey]

So many facets to this! Lovely and hauntingly brilliant!

Thank you very much Love, Lorey! :)

[love, lorey]

You are very welcome, madam!

[Lydia Shutter]

There is an otherworldly feel to this one...a mystical spell is cast by your words and that haunting melody you chose to accompany your words. You stand there and you feel someone’s presence....perhaps someone who is no longer on this earth or someone you long to be with once again. In any case, the beauty is powerful.....just so lovely. Filled with hope and celestial beauty. Knuffels, Lydi**

Thank you my dear friend for being here.... I love your words, they make me think... :) I appreciate it, Lydi xx Eli

[Baby Ricochet]

Have lovelier words ever been written on the WC? Probably but not by me. Tis a beautiful poem Elisa. Take a bow

Hey Baby!! Thank you very much :) hope all is well... x

[Baby Ricochet]

I'm still alive and kickin

Great to hear, we can high 5 then ;) I'll come back for you this night...