~ Separated

~ Separated, Elisa Laura, Eli's Poetry, a little abstract.... Late night rambling :)

~ Separated

 

Entangled, entwined,

All together, torn,

Upset, and heard,

            The separated are

             In the cold,

To form

 

The format,

 

The formidable touch

             Through true void,

             To touch

Happiness,

As it will

Run

              Under the feet,

              Of those who reach.

 

Rather than some

Ran away where no feet,

 

Stood, and are standing,

 

On hallowed ground as

Stable, and steady.

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Late night rambles...
x

Reviews

[Pax]

a very puzzling event if I may say. The poem itself spoke from a rooted depths of your core big sis. Happiness is indeed always do keep on moving, it never stop, if it stop - it is as much as the opposite sides of its value - sadness - 'stable and steady', it never moves on, a sad case for our mortality. very expressive piece. I like the poem and the photo painting - both coinsides together perfectly!

I like all you got out of this my lil bro :) your meaning I treasure on this write... xoxo :) thank you very much! I will explain this one, into the detail soon to you!

[Pax]

a pleasure always... we all treasure our writes. be well big sis, hugs!

Thanks so much for all! :) always! big hugs back at ya! :))

[Kenaz]

You really have to take time to read this one. Every single word seems to have so much significance, especially when they are separated. For some reason I felt my eyes become watery as I read the word "Run". I suppose everyone else has a different word that speaks to them from each piece. This is a complex and tangled poem that I could never fully understand, but I am glad to have read it.

Thank you so much for the great thoughts upon this one my friend, it's a cryptic one, I admit... you have felt, and written very special things you got out of it. Love your review. Thanks a lot.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

When the ground shifts from under us, it can feel unsettling as if you've witnessed a facade cracking to reveal something quite hallow...It can break your heart.
This is a thought provoking write to ponder, Sis! Very dark and emotional. Well penned!

Hi Sis, thank you for your wonderful words upon this little write of me. I treasure it! :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

So glad you are writing again... Cheers!~xoxo~:)

:) Thanks for your support always, and I'm pretty happy too lol... cheers hun! xoxo ;)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's a new day, a new month, a new beginning... LIVE, LOVE, LAUGH!! (((hugs))) XXXX :)

True, I have something with "01"'s in the months....LOL I will LIVE LOVE AND LAUGH :) love you ! many hugs sweet friend! X

[David Scott]

I like how you flipped the topic in its head.
What the Spirit binds nothing can tear apart beyond its own volition.
Strong thinking and living!
Words to live by and hold deep.

So glad you got it Mr. Scott ;) totally well said here... I'm grateful to have you by once again. Have a lovely day!

[Lydia Shutter]

Happiness is always there....we just have to look for it! So happy to see this upbeat write from you, Elisa. Your words are so emotive....so very lovely. Lydi**

Thank you with whole my heart sweet friend, much knuffels xx :)

[Lover Of Words]

This is so amazing- it has a little magical feel to it... the music is perfect for the feel of this write. Its leading to a range of emotions of happiness and tears.... Most amazing my dear... Most amazing...

Thank you sweet Kels, and I'm glad you noticed all, I hope all is well with you my friend... keep on smiling always :) xx thanks for sharing your light on my page!

[Lover Of Words]

Shining my love and admiration upon your page is always a pleasure

And I'm very thankful for your warm heart my friend x

[Lover Of Words]

And i am honored to know your beautiful soul :)

[s y e]

Your writing always takes me on a magical adventure, I love it. I loved the structure and wording, your picture is amazing too. Your poems always flow so beautifully and tell a wonderful story.

Perfection.

Thanks so much dearest! :) this one was a little abstract, but I'm so glad you loved it... thanks for the support, love and friendship always! xx

[s y e]

It's always a pleasure to read your poems, Eli -- I love it. xx

I feel so honored and happy with your words! :D xxxx ♥

[Jack...]

Truly always a magical adventure flows from your pen my friend. Even if a small bit of sadness finds its way to our eyes, for some do stand out in the cold, peering in through happy windows, wishing to be invited in, but slowly becoming one with the shadows as the invitation does not come. Very nice.

Sweet friend, I love it you know me so well. Your words bring me happiness and tear me out of the dark, as they always do... you bring heartsmiles. Thank you.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

This is magical! I see these figures do a dance while I read this piece and listen to it's melancholy rant. my heart is going through all the motions and my senses feel all tingly and on the verge of tears. YOu always stir so much inside me with your creativity! perfect for this rainy Hallo night:)

Queenie, thank you my dear, for your wonderful words, on this piece of mine.... :) you always have a knack for be in touch with me, like I said, we've met before ;) mwah to over seas...

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I get that feeling as well! Hugs:)

It's only a few times, (in your life) our lives... I think it's special :) ((HUGS)) x

[joshua deathdealer]

Majestic ramblings indeed. This read beautifully and I really like how you set it up. Great abstract images and feelings.

To form

The format,

The formidable touch....best part to me. Excellent work and thanks for sharing. Welcome back!

Thank you dearly my sweet friend. for your words, it's always nice to see you. Also for picking those out ;) I'm so happy to be back... :) x

[Pryde Foltz]

There is magic in your ramblings. Happiness does run beneath our feet and some of us run faster.

Ah I had to come back for your thoughts, my dear friend, thank you so much for your ever well and intelligent brain. :D I adore it. I must take a few hours of sleep, but be back as soon as I can for your writings... :) can't wait x