~ Separated

~ Separated, Elisa Laura, Eli's Poetry, a little abstract.... Late night rambling :)

~ Separated

 

Entangled, entwined,

All together, torn,

Upset, and heard,

            The separated are

             In the cold,

To form

 

The format,

 

The formidable touch

             Through true void,

             To touch

Happiness,

As it will

Run

              Under the feet,

              Of those who reach.

 

Rather than some

Ran away where no feet,

 

Stood, and are standing,

 

On hallowed ground as

Stable, and steady.

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Late night rambles...
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Reviews

[Pax]

a very puzzling event if I may say. The poem itself spoke from a rooted depths of your core big sis. Happiness is indeed always do keep on moving, it never stop, if it stop - it is as much as the opposite sides of its value - sadness - 'stable and steady', it never moves on, a sad case for our mortality. very expressive piece. I like the poem and the photo painting - both coinsides together perfectly!

I like all you got out of this my lil bro :) your meaning I treasure on this write... xoxo :) thank you very much! I will explain this one, into the detail soon to you!

[Pax]

a pleasure always... we all treasure our writes. be well big sis, hugs!

Thanks so much for all! :) always! big hugs back at ya! :))

[writing mojo]

I like this surreal piece it fits so well in the flat spinning Dali landscape, stands alone from the resting points, yet lives against the shadow of a person stone walled by the fate of being just another lover ....great write

So wonderfully to have you by weatherman! you understand this brain so well, always lol.... thanks a lot my friend! :)

[writing mojo]

always Elisa I will try to use my soul for predictions

Me too, I think we should forever. :) thanks a lot.

[Androglossia]

Happiness,
As it will
Run
Under the feet,
Of those who reach.

This touched me in a way, dearest. Not looking at the photo, your words are tender and as light as a feather that brushes onto someone's face ad take her back to reality. I don't know but your words made me feel nice. Good morning from Asia Pacific!

Morning dear :) (and I just returned from the road lol), 2 AM now... hanging in here a bit before I go to bed... thank you so much for your review, this was a little cryptic peace, at least to myself, it has 6 points, of different views, when i wrote it. Your interpretation is highly valued here. There is light in this one xx :D thanks so much.

*piece, lol I'm too hippy sometimes ;)

[Androglossia]

You are very welcome, sweetest! I'm glad you were having a good time :)

It's good to see you again! :) yes, I had, stayed longer than planned lol... (that says something haha)... but glad to sleep in my own bed again tonight.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the rambling. I had to read again. Artwork was very good also. I agree with the lines.
"Happiness,
As it will
Run Under the feet,
Of those who reach. "
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Thank you so much my friend, I appreciate you.

[Antoñyo]

Late night rambles can be interesting, thought-provoking and revealing...I can't say how revealing, but this is certainly the first two...so much so I've read it on two separate occasions.
Thanks for sharing

Hi Antonyo, thank you so much for your review, it means a lot, I shall hopefully be back tonight for yours and the others, after my weekend travels x :) happy you were here.

[Antoñyo]

Anytime, and you're very welcome

Thank you Antonyo. Again :) till soon!

[Belle]

I feel the touch of surrealism in here and at times I feel your words as like a lone wolf who spends time with a group as a member of a pack yet prefers to live independently because of the absence of the sense of belongingness...This is just another interpretation I have apart from the meaning conveyed by the given title.

I like the placing of words in this poem, Dear Eli. Well done.

Thank you so much Belle, for giving your thoughts on this one, I appreciate you, and the review xx

[Horizon K.]

Oh, this is an enigmatic dreamy piece Elisa! It makes me think of feelings, constantly in flux, running beneath my feet like rivers, liquid, lacking the stasis to remain... Yet happiness is there, for those who reach for it, it can stay...
So lovely, your words Sis. And the picture adds to the effect so well! I love it!
xoxo

Also many thanks, for understanding this one, dear Sis. I'm ever so happy when you come by, my travel is longer than I planned, I hope to be back tonight love xx

[SHEEMA HUQ]

This is subtly philosophical and reads beautifully, I like the way, your words drops down, a fine poem, my friend.

Awe thank you dearest! :) I'm glad you enjoyed this one, I try to be back tonight for yours :D x

[emmajoy]

There's much coming and going in life, physically, mentally and spiritually. Seems, for me, that this is a meandering deeply felt time, part light, part dark hugged in your words; hope somehow just holding on. So hope you do, dear friend.

Wonderful words from you my dear, thanks a lot... :) I'm smiling again... ;) xx

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we need to reach to make relationships work. not run away!

Touché my dear friend :) thank you!