~ Separated

~ Separated, Elisa Laura, Eli's Poetry, a little abstract.... Late night rambling :)

~ Separated

 

Entangled, entwined,

All together, torn,

Upset, and heard,

            The separated are

             In the cold,

To form

 

The format,

 

The formidable touch

             Through true void,

             To touch

Happiness,

As it will

Run

              Under the feet,

              Of those who reach.

 

Rather than some

Ran away where no feet,

 

Stood, and are standing,

 

On hallowed ground as

Stable, and steady.

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Late night rambles...
x

Reviews

[Pax]

a very puzzling event if I may say. The poem itself spoke from a rooted depths of your core big sis. Happiness is indeed always do keep on moving, it never stop, if it stop - it is as much as the opposite sides of its value - sadness - 'stable and steady', it never moves on, a sad case for our mortality. very expressive piece. I like the poem and the photo painting - both coinsides together perfectly!

I like all you got out of this my lil bro :) your meaning I treasure on this write... xoxo :) thank you very much! I will explain this one, into the detail soon to you!

[Pax]

a pleasure always... we all treasure our writes. be well big sis, hugs!

Thanks so much for all! :) always! big hugs back at ya! :))

[Nicole Williams]

Okay, first off i want to say that the picture is amazing,
i stared at it for a while,
and then your way with words left me speechless, yet again.
Everything of yours that I read is absolutely magical.

Thank you very much sweet Kora for being here, and your words, truly I appreciate them. :) x Elis

[Sugar Plum ♥]

All the piece has so surreal sound, and seem to reflect the cold (as coming from the great photo). Separation is so much cold, if we are not " table and steady" we could easily fall apart. The nature of heart is vulnerable...We have to transform to little rocks even if our hearts bleed. Until this time is gone.
I`m so impressed from how your words are put together forming echo inside mind and soul! ♥

:: nour ::
:: December-013::

Great words again, yes surreal... two total extremes in front of eachother. Little abstract, indeed, we could easily fall apart. Oh my you have a heart, that feels, and knows. Again with this one, you are so close to my heart. Thank you very much nia ♥

[Sugar Plum ♥]

You are amazing, my sister and always close to me! ♥

[Calissa Knox]

I felt the expression, and emotion in this piece very strongly.

My favorite line is, "All together, torn,
Upset, and heard,
The separated are
In the cold,
To form"

This is unique, complex and wonderful poetry. I really enjoyed reading this!

Thank you so much, again :) when I wrote this I felt utterly melancholic, depressed maybe, but at least I felt six different things, and it resulted into this.... I'm ever so grateful to you, for picking those lines out, they were the ones, I struggled most on ;) xx

[Calissa Knox]

You are very welcome. There's something unique and special about creating art from pain, and melancholy. There's something profound about taking what was once ugly and turning it into something beautiful.

You're totally right on that, dear. I always try to live like that, make somehow something out of it...and with a glimps of positivism, balanced though, thank you so much really....

[Calissa Knox]

That's a great way to live. You're very welcome, Elisa!

Thank you again... :)))

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Amazing write and I love the picture with it! Sweet combination that conveys so much about feelings and emotions. I love the structure and the message here.

Thank you dear Josie, nice to have you by on this one... xx I'm pleased you loved it.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

It is one of my favorites!

Thank you very much for making it a favorite :) means much to me! I come back for you... xx

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

u r welcome! :)

[ewest1220]

lol I looked everywhere for where the music was coming from. (Was listening to Nightwish and all the sudden there was another girl singing) Really enjoyed this piece I loved the staggered feeling of the piece. The imagery was also very well done. Great job on this one :)

ewest, long time, thanks for returning, how is everything? hope well my friend.

I am invisible ;) the music is with me.
Nightwish, is great. thank you so much for being around,
thank you with whole my heart.... :)

[ewest1220]

And thank you for writing this! I've been great, but incredibly busy. Got married, got a new job, restarted my martial arts classes and have tripled the size of my book. Also I've been trying to learn a little Japanese but not much progress there lol how've you been?

So happy to hear, congratulations my friend, that's so awesome.... I wish you well, and happy. You're kidding? MA Arts??? that's my whole life.... ;) talk soon about that more with you..... Japan is my Muse too. Even if they were mean against the Indonesians, love them still.... ;) WW2. ;) I'm good, getting better, have been through rollercoasters, but I had my belts tight :D

[ewest1220]

I'm glad to hear things are going well for you! I'm currently doing Soo Bahk Do which has been immensely rewarding. Hopefully your rollercoasters have relaxed a bit :)

They did, thanks a lot.... aaaaah that's ever so great!!!! glad you telling me all. :D *happy face here*

[J. J. Nightingale]

Wow embedded music.. cool ..

Great image .. No rambling here ..

I have never been in THAT cold ..but have know other disabling situations ..

Frozen .. no way to move forward or back.. just there alone and cold..a dead stop..

This is a good write.. Hugs Little Dove... J. xxo

Jazzy, dear, I'm so happy with you my friend, you always seem to understand this little heart, wow, I loved it what you saw in this ... xoxoxoo

[J. J. Nightingale]

Love will find it's way.. even on the darkest days ... be well smile.. you r LOVED ..

Thank you dearheart, for your wisdom, and friendship... you're too! ♥

[icelandicblue]

It is hard to run without feet and your feelings of the disconnect in today's society leaves a void in all our humanities. We need to find our way back to hallowed ground. A beautiful rambling from you.

Oh Anne, thank you so much for this good review, I adore what you saw in it.... :)

[Larry Dyson]

wonderfully expressed..a truly "meek"way of thinking..Laury

Thank you Laury, I'm so happy you enjoyed, I come over to yours when I'm home. Elisa

[Ruth]

A ramble is a blessed state sometimes, we lose the fear to convey and analyse life...or emotions...this is beautifully woven honey, a sublime exit for wounds...displayed with elegance xox

Thank you so much my sweet Poppy :) it's so lovely to see you here xoxo :)

[Ruth]

My pleasure lovely, like you, I am back ;) lol xox

Yay!!!! so happy with that.... :) xoxo lol (I know what you mean).... he he

[kublakhan27]

This is incredible work sis. If this is your equivalent to rambling, you should ramble to your heart's content ;) It is surreal and very real at the same time. I find myself relating to this one quite deeply, though your work tends to have that effect on me anyway haha You've been writing with a lot of authority lately, and I believe there are no bounds to how great you can be in light of what I've read recently. Don't stop writing now ;) xoxo

Hi dear, you think it really is? :) thank you so much, lol I felt too much while writing this one, at least six different things. *you know how our brain goes lol* thank you so much for feeling and seeing that these latest ones are different from the rest, yes, I think indeed more authority... still not sure myself. There is always light love, even on blue days, and sensitive ones ;) xoxo I'm so grateful to have you by, you have no idea. *a huge hug* xx

[kublakhan27]

I do indeed :) The thought of feeling too much was not something I thought of before, but I can certainly relate to that feeling...

Always a pleasure sis, you know I feel the very same way towards you...love and hugs :) xo

Thanks so much :) I sometimes feel way to much... I know you can relate ;) Hope all is well in your world brother. :)

[kublakhan27]

Things can always be better with me sis, but I don't feel as alone as I have in the past. It is an understatement to say that you have much to do with that :) (((hugs)))

I embrace you, I wish you well, I wish you the best, for you deserve that. I feel you my canadian half. Always ;) xx take good care of you. (((HUGS)))

[kublakhan27]

And the same to you my dear sis :) (((HUGS))) xo

The one I saved, I shall review, dear, :) I'm in love with your rubix cube works ♥

[kublakhan27]

That's just how life feels to me at times my dear...I guess it's inevitable that my words would project that feeling :) xo

Sometimes I think that way too, too OCD lol. I love that they do ;) it's the perfect bro-sis denial :D

[kublakhan27]

Haha So true sis ;D I don't really have OCD but I do have things that feel an awful lot like it. I've never decided if that's a good or bad thing when it comes to my writing, though I tend to lean to the good, exhausting as that can be sometimes ;)

Geezzzz what the heck is wrong with WC, I cant reply.... :(


Oh I don't have either lol, it is just a slight, little neurotic thingy you know, we both have, ;)
To think too much, being a prisoner of the mind, in all realms..... where is the key where is it??? you need to free meeeee lol ;) that way of thinking :D I saw 14 dwarfs, Since I had not on my glasses... ;) I like your way of thinking, it´s ever so close to my own.... dear.... xx WC won´t let me post, (glitches) :( but hope it comes over after a thousand times deleting this post... sigh....