~ The Dark and Me

~ The Dark and Me, Elisa Laura

~ The Dark and Me

 

Silver swords sharp as needles,

Pierced my figurative lips,

Of my inner soul,

Into the smallest mosaic pieces -

Left me bleeding in the night,

Without any glue of love,

 

It crossed my deathly feeling,

The long night without a breath;

Outraged and rotting,

Creeping to the throat

Like a punch of voltage,

An claustrophobic explosion

And a silent cry to come;

 

There where I proceeded the dark,

Between the soul and the room;

I saw a body rise;

No more thirsty travels,

Nor to walk, "The Dark"

It slurped out, the internal me...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Feel free ;)

Reviews

[Calissa Knox]

Wow. This is simply spectacular!
You put a lot of emotion into this piece.

I loved the ending line,
"Nor to walk, "The Dark"
It slurped out, the internal me..."

You are a very vivid writer,
yet the emotions are very strong in your writings.

This is a dramatic, haunting, and beautiful poem.
It cuts through to the soul.
It was extremely suspenseful,
and kept me reading until the end.

Thank you so very much for your review, yes, this was a write from deep down the bottom... your words mean much to me, I like the way you described this dear Feather. :) Many thanks!

[Calissa Knox]

I'm very glad my enjoyment of your masterpiece could bless you, Elisa! :)

Yes, it did, after all darkness felt, there is a little light, :) So happy you enjoyed this. Come back for you, after my dinner tonight ... :D

[Calissa Knox]

It's always good to have light after the darkness. Okay, have a great dinner, Elisa! :)

Thank you dear, I had a great one, just had my home full of friends, who came to surprise me tonight... sigh, had no time to review. Will do as soon as possible... :)

[Calissa Knox]

Sounds really fun! I'm glad you had a great day. :)

It was really fun! thanks a lot, I shall come by when my head is clear, and all there.... x :)

[Calissa Knox]

That's wonderful! Have a great night, Elisa! Hope to talk to you soon. :)

Thankies dearheart, I'm hugging my pillow now, he was never so cute... ;) you to dear, talk, chat, debat soon!!! can't wait xx :)

[Arthur Crow]

Dark and alluring I found this scribe... very descriptive, which I think is essential to good poetry.
Yes strong emotions, gripping and memorable.

Thank you very much my friend, it's great to have your opinion here. It was a "real" moment... ;)

[Arthur Crow]

You are most welcome anytime :)

[Alexx Wake]

Congrats on your award! Much deserved! :)

Thank you so much, I didn't know I had one, but now I do, thanks to you... :)

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

A this is wonderful I like all sorts of poetry this one will fit excuse me it's the dark category perfectly it is absolutely spell binding like the dark can be at times you have very many good lines I couldn't choose just one wonderful writing

OMG Chloe :D sooooo happy to see you my dear poetess, and writer, :) this is the ice upon the cake for me tonight.... glad you're back. :) thank you very much for your heartfelt review. I'll be back for you xx

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

Thank you thank my what flattery lol can it be your writing is getting even better I am happy to see you too and glad to be back take good care

[kublakhan27]

Hello Darkness my old friend...

Wow sis, just wow...I am absolutely awestruck...this piece took me to a place that your poetry has never taken me before. Silver swords, glue of love, a punch of voltage and a claustrophobic explosion (I especially relate to that part)...this is an absolute feast of imagery and foreboding. The last stanza has meant something different to me every time I've read it, which is a few times now. Between the soul and the room I saw a body rise...really, that's awesome...I think this is my new favourite my dear :)

Hello Leonard Cohen in persona himself :P

Love you Bro.... thanks for pointing out....
No, it hasn't even me...
I was out of conciousness writing this.
:) so happy I could Awestruck you with invisible art..... :)
(I know love) I know.... :((((( Thanks so much for your honest rubix-cube-luvery mind... you get the Eli, always... even in dark... ♥ Much love. xx

[kublakhan27]

This is hardly invisible art sis ;) I know how you feel...I don't feel "conscious" when I write, at least when I'm writing well. It sounds like an overstatement, but it really is an out-of-body experience for me...I feel like another person because I'm so shy and introverted in the flesh. My WC friends just don't see that part of me. But really, however this one came about, it produced a truly riveting piece of poetry. I'm glad to know that I get Eli, and you know you get me as well as anyone :) I'll try not to lose the rubix cube haha Love and hugs dear friend...xoxo

I think it's what connects us so deep.... :) I'm happy you feel equal... really. This was one from out of my darkest times, I ever felt... I was torn to the bones. I know you are, and that's what many are on here.... :) you're not alone, never. You're my biggest older Brother, and I can learn soooooooooo much from you Steve. (truly my Canadian half). You're the best. And I love you. Please never change. Bro. xxx hun!

P.s. Lenny would have loved what you've just said... just saying.... see you soon, come back for your arts...

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Eli, you don't know how much that means to me to have you say those things...you've always had a way of soothing me, and I never feel alone knowing I have you to talk to :) I've never thought of myself as someone that people learn from, but it brought a warm smile to my face knowing that I could have that effect with you :) I'm honoured to be your Canadian half ;) Love you Eli...never stop being you, and I will try to do the same (((hugs))) xox

[Jack...]

"Left me bleeding in the night,
Without any glue of love,"

The darkness, merely a veil of unanswered questions or undetermined decisions...or perhaps a place to hide our hearts from the pain that seeks us. Without that ever bonding glue of love, life becomes the darkness that we fear, but when held safely in the arms of our desires, the pitch of night is now a friend.

Elisa, once more, I am mesmerized and hypnotized by your way with words and ideas. Still a certain innocence brings light to these charcoal gray skies hovering within your poem. So very wonderful my friend.

I feel so blessed you have felt me in the darker realms, in this one, and that you fully understand it's embrace, at times... means much to me my dear friend, you always get it so well... and there is always light, after darkness... when we feel blue, it's just a phase... and then we only get stronger. Many thanks for your beautiful words dear Jack...

[Ruth]

Without darkness, there is no light...have to say, enjoy the song you chose for this piece too. A wonderful poem. Truly holds depths of wandering through hallways bleak and sometimes out of reach...still, we do reach though, and find some comfort along the way xox

Many thanks dear ♥ yes, I loved the intro the most, I listened to this one, when I wrote it.... sometimes, we must go so deep, to see light again, true... I'm proud of you and me lol xx thanks so much of being here too! sweets

[Ruth]

Always my pleasure honey xox

Tonight, I shall read more of yours.... (have to watch soccer first in a while, Amsterdam plays in the Champions league... ;) ).... must see this one. Love and hugs to you!

[Ruth]

Ah, no rush beauty, enjoy the match!!! xx

Thankies... it's starting, so I go offline xx see you in a bit (((HUGS)))

[Horizon K.]

Those dark moments, dark thoughts, they do come, stay for awhile, hurt us until they leave... But this is also a dreamy piece, this dark, not a part of your true self, like an apparition as it leaves. There is light then. You paint a vision Elisa, as of we watch ourselves like a screen. And it makes me think, these moods dark and light, unlike night and day, are not the absence of the other, they can be, at the same time, overlayed...

I love the fact you entered, into the (outside of the side-line) and watching at yourself feeling... only you have such a brain too :) wonderful review lovely Sister thank you xx :)

[topsyturvy]

Wow, simply wow! I love the flow, very Nice!

Thank you so much for saying so, glad you enjoyed this one x :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Dismally apt for this season, yet your focus on romanticism too, great writing.

Thanks so much for loving this darker one too :) many hugs !

[SHEEMA HUQ]

You are very welcome :) Hugs to you too