We must die a little to feel a lot... there is a certain pain in birth, as there is in death...
The two are inevitable.. life and death shall meet...
This is a story filled with heartbreak, and healing.. I believe your silence speaks louder than words...
Beautifully penned, Sis!~xoxo~
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
As unpredictable as I am, I came out of the shower, and oversaw your beautiful words again. Nobody l.. read moreAs unpredictable as I am, I came out of the shower, and oversaw your beautiful words again. Nobody like you understand the essence of my soul. THANK YOU!
Not even a man! Every man! :) It's sheer madness, the speed of reviewing, not to land the true feelings, traversing popularity, above what really matters .... that's what sisters are for. And be aware, I do all for my true friends, (you know they know). I am ever grateful of your patience, and Spanish blood line, who sees art to art Sis. If one is born, we all die a little, transient and fleeting life is.
I am one of the few who is always aware of, death, so I do not fear death. In fact, I will not regret, if it's my time. (this is not in depressed sense). As everyone interprets, more, as the light I've seen it before, and with him, sister with him ... :) he he... this was a death wedding ;) I celebrate xx
11 Years Ago
I know where your heart is, Sis...there is a rebirth!...
It is felt throughout this piece...th.. read moreI know where your heart is, Sis...there is a rebirth!...
It is felt throughout this piece...there is a beauty in death... painful as it may be...
I do see the merging of both...
You are a brilliant Poetess... write until there is no more ink.... Love you!~xoxo~
11 Years Ago
I shall... sigh, I shall, however I'm over tired, and hurt, I am a slave of the pen, until I truly d.. read moreI shall... sigh, I shall, however I'm over tired, and hurt, I am a slave of the pen, until I truly die. Love you too xx :) and may it not be on here, I shall post you forever! ;) sweetest!
11 Years Ago
P.S. I never saw you as a fearful woman... You are very strong... you emanate strength in your poetr.. read moreP.S. I never saw you as a fearful woman... You are very strong... you emanate strength in your poetry...That's why you inspire me!! xxxx
11 Years Ago
But what I lack you have, and what you lack I have lol, we fullfil eachother... When I start to writ.. read moreBut what I lack you have, and what you lack I have lol, we fullfil eachother... When I start to write erotic, my muses will be like: WTF????? and when you write classic yours are like HUH???? WHAT"s wrong with her LOL ;) Love you for that Sis, you're my fuel, light my all :)xxxx
11 Years Ago
Ha ha!! I love it!... you are too funny Eli... :D
So true... they are stunned! It's okay to ch.. read moreHa ha!! I love it!... you are too funny Eli... :D
So true... they are stunned! It's okay to change it up a bit. (he he)
Otherwise, it wouldn't be fun! XXXXX ;D
11 Years Ago
Yep agree, I should post some Erotic soon, on here LOL, ha! for I have many :D ;) well you know alre.. read moreYep agree, I should post some Erotic soon, on here LOL, ha! for I have many :D ;) well you know already lol... I know Sis, when you do Classics, I'm a little in love always with your writing!!!!!!!! for you rock at that too, (not many know), but I do. Love you hun!
11 Years Ago
awww Thanks Sis!...well your erotic even makes ME blush! LOL ;D
You shouldn't keep that to you.. read moreawww Thanks Sis!...well your erotic even makes ME blush! LOL ;D
You shouldn't keep that to yourself.... it's too hot girl! ;)
11 Years Ago
He he... sigh.... ;) you know what I am up to in the future, and I shall let you be the first to kno.. read moreHe he... sigh.... ;) you know what I am up to in the future, and I shall let you be the first to know........... xxxxx sweety and soulsis!
11 Years Ago
I know... and I can't wait! lol ;D
don't keep us waiting too long... xxxxxx
11 Years Ago
I won't love... I am balacing things out, and I know I never give up, on you guys, not ever on my se.. read moreI won't love... I am balacing things out, and I know I never give up, on you guys, not ever on my self either.... I shall come back stronger, soon :) xxxxxxxxxxxx I LOVE YOU ROBBIE!
11 Years Ago
I know you will... you always do!
Nothing makes me happier than you coming back full force. read moreI know you will... you always do!
Nothing makes me happier than you coming back full force.
Love you too, Sis!!~xoxoxoxox~ :)
Nothing makes me dream of it too, (baby steps) LOL... sigh... I'm true to my heart, and the things, .. read moreNothing makes me dream of it too, (baby steps) LOL... sigh... I'm true to my heart, and the things, I've faced, loved, and lost.
11 Years Ago
It doesn't happen overnight... but you are the best at whatever you put your heart into.. (((hugs)))
11 Years Ago
I know sweetie, thanks, such a heart of me to you again.... I know I walked in my hole hiking carre.. read moreI know sweetie, thanks, such a heart of me to you again.... I know I walked in my hole hiking carreer, I think 4 times to Rome, from my home, and Rome wasn't build in 1 day ;) I have patience, with myself, as I have with my dearest people, we have our own time Sis, always! :) love you xxxxxx
As always I enjoyed the dream aspects of your poem a lot.
I felt this piece has a different flow to your later poems.
Like the lines "of love so - invisible art to my core" I found the English in this line a bit awkward, also in the line "no more tears of pain, I shall combat!" I found the use of English here awkward, but my point is that I liked it.
Those awkward bits broke up the flow in a way that reminds me of Jazz music.
Dank u wel Elisa, your poems are always a dreamy treat.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much again, I will work on those when I can.... Great you are so honest always :) see y.. read moreThank you so much again, I will work on those when I can.... Great you are so honest always :) see you soon.
I like this piece very much. My favorite part was 8th stanza "I will donate them, like water to the Earth". Such fire in your words. Simply beautiful my friend.
As for the critical review:
"I don't need nothing more"-is a double negative my friend. In English it is frowned upon. Just get rid of "don't" or "nothing" :)
"You're holding both my hands"-just invert the "my" and "both"
"If a carousel of love"-did you mean "in a carousel of love"?
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you very much my dear, for finding this one, somehow beautiful.... :) and many thanks too for .. read moreThank you very much my dear, for finding this one, somehow beautiful.... :) and many thanks too for the grammatical help, you're so right, on all... I didn't saw it, I shall change it after soccer tonight, and be back too for yours, with all pleasure... your help and review is appreciated.
On the last one, no more like: Like a carousel of love, but differently from out of Dutch it's hard to explain you that in English...
11 Years Ago
So you mean like "As if a carousel of love"? On a side note...you play soccer or watch it?
11 Years Ago
Yes, I think I meant that!!!! I watch soccer, I played it when I was a teen.... lol but shhhh don't .. read moreYes, I think I meant that!!!! I watch soccer, I played it when I was a teen.... lol but shhhh don't tell that to everyone ;)
Haha, in America having soccer as your favorite sport is almost blasphemy...
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Who sais it's my favorite sport? ;) an assumption, lol, anyhow, have to watch this match... enjoy yo.. read moreWho sais it's my favorite sport? ;) an assumption, lol, anyhow, have to watch this match... enjoy your American football my friend.... ;) x
11 Years Ago
You misunderstand me :D Soccer is my favorite sport!
Your words are truely magnificent... simple yet so deep! Like an piece of art that brings things to life, yet leaves us wondering.... Simply tremendous
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you for your kind words Kelsey! :)
11 Years Ago
Simply deserved for an amazing writer like yourself
11 Years Ago
That's too much to me Kels lol.... I'm just me ;) but thanks a lot... (((HUGS)))
11 Years Ago
I know your just YOU but your still amazing in your own brightly light way... :)
11 Years Ago
You're a sweetie thankies :) so are you! take good care of yourself! xo
this is the process of shedding one's former self for something anew, hearts don't break they quake the very foundation within systems and supports...that hold long enough until you have the strength again to absorb them through change ...great piece
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Ah yes, they quake, well said! :) seeing Dali again there ;) Wow, so well said, you're brilliant lol
When I read this, its like a renewed feelings. Love - heartbreak - healing - moving on - in love again - ...the cycle goes in circles, cause it all comes back to being in love again, second time, third time, or being in love over and over to the same person... its an amusing piece, purely expressed with love so deep you flourish big sis,...
Oh love your review, you see so much in it... this is a dearly European "Death wedding" :) celebrati.. read moreOh love your review, you see so much in it... this is a dearly European "Death wedding" :) celebration, when some are gone, is the way, I love to live, not in sadness... :) You have a beautiful mind my Brother, how could it be otherwise? you're my brother lol :D thank you sooooooo much. I love you got the joy, and celebration out of it. xoxox :)
11 Years Ago
hugs, thank you, and you as well, you have such beautiful way in expressing your mind about love... .. read morehugs, thank you, and you as well, you have such beautiful way in expressing your mind about love... and that's the right attitude to celebrate when someone is gone, because not all is gone, his/her memories lives on in everyone's heart... and you are most welcome big sis, always a pleasure to read your verses...
11 Years Ago
So beautifully said sweetie, yes, we live them still..... :) love and hugs, come by soon for more xx.. read moreSo beautifully said sweetie, yes, we live them still..... :) love and hugs, come by soon for more xx, so happy you enjoyed this one, :) be good, strong, and we are always together!
This is mesmerizing my sweet Eli, the hauntingly beautiful music is a perfect accent your lovely poetry, reminds me of a quote...feel better soon cara. xox
“He who does not understand your silence will probably not understand your words.”
― Elbert Hubbard
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Grazie dal cuore mia cara.... si giusto! :D you're right, luv, that quote nails it on the head.... s.. read moreGrazie dal cuore mia cara.... si giusto! :D you're right, luv, that quote nails it on the head.... sometimes you can't anymore, you need a break, you're a beautiful person inside out Frieda. And after this week I try to be back... hospital visits, and some rest after, then I need to get inspierd again (I hope)... :) Love you darling, thanks for your unconditional support x
P.s. You and me know how Southern European weddings are ;-) he he... ♫♥
11 Years Ago
You are too kind bella, take your time, we will be waiting with open arms.
Always my sweet si.. read moreYou are too kind bella, take your time, we will be waiting with open arms.
Always my sweet sister, avete tutto il mio cuore, I hope that's right. ;-) Baci! xo
11 Years Ago
That's more than right for me love, it's from il cuore, so what I can say more? bless you love. Mill.. read moreThat's more than right for me love, it's from il cuore, so what I can say more? bless you love. Mille baci xx
Like a phoenix we rise from the ashes that is left behind. This is beautiful. xx
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks luv, really! :) I knew you as a few would understand the "The wedding of the dead" ;) xx till.. read moreThanks luv, really! :) I knew you as a few would understand the "The wedding of the dead" ;) xx till soon, I'm powering my strengths :)
I've missed your writing. Reading your hypnotic words while listening to Mary J. Blige's "Love No Limit" is quite the trip!
The blood in your veins is always connected to your pen. Loved the way this ended with renewal. Awesome.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you dear, I've missed you too :( I shall explain all soon.... promise! so good to have you by .. read moreThank you dear, I've missed you too :( I shall explain all soon.... promise! so good to have you by again, :)
To love again is to be reborn....every relationship allows us to show sides of ourselves we were not even aware of....till the right person drew out certain emotions. The world is reborn after winter leaves....so will you be reborn when the darkness lifts and the beauty surrounds you again. Beautifully written poetry, Elisa. Knuffels, Lydi**
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much my dearest. I treasure your valued thoughts, with me every day! :) They bring me h.. read moreThank you so much my dearest. I treasure your valued thoughts, with me every day! :) They bring me happiness.... xxx & Knuffels my friend :)