~ I know we love Green
E.L. Elisa Laura, the state of being total off the world, of feeling love, and being sick...
of love, sick and tired of being sick and tired....
Following out of sight, flitting in at the edges of perception, the Cheshire cat disappearing among the trees and materialising when the chaos plaguing Alice is most thick. Is that Fate I see in the distance? Or is it the echoes of the past come back to visit?
Such a personal and poignant poem, Elisa. Incredible. :) xx
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Goodmorning from a windy Netherlands, sweetie... thank you so much. You feel my heart... it seems yo.. read moreGoodmorning from a windy Netherlands, sweetie... thank you so much. You feel my heart... it seems you have your hands on my heartstrings, and play me sweet music.
10 Years Ago
Goodmorning from a windy Netherlands, sweetie... thank you so much. You feel my heart... it seems yo.. read moreGoodmorning from a windy Netherlands, sweetie... thank you so much. You feel my heart... it seems you have your hands on my heartstrings, and play me sweet music.
Many, many, many hugs! ~ I hope you feel better big sis... being sick and not being able to do much, is frustrating at times... dreams and fantasy are our only refuge to a hard life... dream well and write more...
what great imagination...love the personification of the bird into the lover...travelling so far to be with her...and then she wakes, and the bird is not there...but what a nice dream
love this
jacob
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you dear for your powerful interpretation, words, and thoughts on this one... :) it's lovely t.. read moreThank you dear for your powerful interpretation, words, and thoughts on this one... :) it's lovely to see how it get's interpret... :D I'm reading all yours in the meantime till I'm recovered... you write fantastic friend. Until then, Elisa thank you!
Elisa, dear Sherpa, what a beautiful poem you have written, I love the green, green is life and fresh beginnings, like spring, I love this poem! be well , I am sorry to hear you are feeling poorly again :(
This is so you Elisa. It is soft and tender, beautiful and loving and just carefree enough to bring a smile to my face. This, I can tell, came from somewhere deep inside. I do wish you a quick recovery for your smile is truly missed here.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Jack, my dear, I can't thank you enough, also for your mail... :) with friends lik.. read moreThank you so much Jack, my dear, I can't thank you enough, also for your mail... :) with friends like you, who respect me, in good and bad, and give the right help, (with that I mean, I love my privacy). ;) Miss you all guys, I'm getting there slowly! xx
WOW WOW WOW! so many connections we make in this world...touching dreams when we are unaware. i always come here to find solace from the screaming of the planet. THIS is why you are here. This is where you belong. I know it selfish that I say that hidden here in the pages of never never but you are such a treasure!Blessings Dear one! Your serenity calms my heart.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you my sweet friend... for your heartfelt words here upon my poem. Very appreciated! be back s.. read moreThank you my sweet friend... for your heartfelt words here upon my poem. Very appreciated! be back soon for you xx
I see the migration of a bird coming back... of course this is personification... and then the ordeal layouts in the rest... A bit different of a read... had you not given us some feedback... before engaging in this verse...
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Glen, this is a personal piece, I think only the most very close ones will get... .. read moreThank you so much Glen, this is a personal piece, I think only the most very close ones will get... so I don't blame you at all, one day I will explain it to you better, when I'm feeling better, and I do like it to keep my pieces a little bit mysterious, for if you say all it won't let imagine and think the other upcomming readers anymore... I am grateful for your review though, thanks a lot.
Gorgeous natural expression Elisa, transmitting this state of being to me so profoundly, your own kind of bell jar... Seeing dreams in this exhausted and hazed state of lost between night and day, looking between the ethereal layers of the visitors that stop by in green. Rest well my dear... I miss you and hope to see you recovered and back here soon...
xoxo Horizon
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you my sweet Sis, what am I without you? :) your kindred heart is always right on the spot, an.. read moreThank you my sweet Sis, what am I without you? :) your kindred heart is always right on the spot, and I'm getting there, it just takes me some time, I will mail you soon my e-mail... I miss you too! thanks for being my fuel in these days....xxxx
11 Years Ago
Oh love, no need to rush for me, take good care of yourself, but yes please send me your email... I .. read moreOh love, no need to rush for me, take good care of yourself, but yes please send me your email... I would love to be in touch with you that way:)
Oh, the beauty in this one, my dear friend... I feel the emotion right to the tips of my toes and fingers. I love the melancholy aspect of staring out of the window to see a little bird that is the bird of possibility, and yet that is all that it is, because this love can only be found in dreams. A journey, a catharsis, an expedition of the heart...beautiful.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
I'm happy you felt this one so deeply my dear, for it was a honest, and heartfelt one... I like your.. read moreI'm happy you felt this one so deeply my dear, for it was a honest, and heartfelt one... I like your take on it. You always know me well ;) xx miss you and till soon!
I love the picture of the humming bird you chose for this piece. I am also really fond of of your second stanza, and the lines where it talks about the other person returning from that long journey. I've also had experiences like the last three lines of your third stanza. Those instances are truly draining and heart-breaking. Well written my friend!
P.S: One small thing: I think you could remove the words "On a" from the third line of stanza one. I think that would clean of the rhythm of those lines a bit.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you dear friend for your lovely review, you hit me in a serene moment of not having my mind cl.. read moreThank you dear friend for your lovely review, you hit me in a serene moment of not having my mind clear lol, no alertness, at all but pure feeling.... and I am grateful for your honest improve to me ... on your advice I can build, grow and it always touches me deeply when you come by, I thank you for helping this little lost Dutchie lol... hugs C.
I like the photo and the poetry was amazing. I like the thoughts in the poem. Sometime in sweet dreams we must seek the beauty missed. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote