~ That Early Morning

~ That Early Morning, Elisa Laura, E.L. FreesStyle, Dark/Light Mornings, Moments, Poetry, Fiction

~ That Early Morning

 

 

 

   It seemed the night, was over,

     I walked across the large unending fields,

 

            Power lines above me,

    The obscure air,

 

The wind spoke, I sighed…

       The ambience led me into a direction

Of something;

           My heart beats compassed me for…

 

“It” was yet to come…

 

        A never ending hike,

            The long grass tickled my feet,

          The dew, was reborn another day --

 

     And this morning breeze, was humid so fresh;

    It gave my throat a little raw feeling,

Like salt on a skin can give --

 

Yet, I was sure, I would walk until

       The earth moved to another night time…

 

Almost unconscious, tired and feet swollen,

            Lungs full of oxygen that seemed,

Inhaled three times,

 

      A stifling rigidity, around me;

                 To reach the power of love’s electricity...

 

 

                                Awake…

 

~ Elisa Laura

   05/13/2013

Author's Note

Do what you must... :)



Enjoy! xx

Reviews

[Sugar Plum ♥]

The last word of the poem sounds in my mind as "alive" - and it`s the same in that sense..Your poem is so full of energy, activating mind and senses for the value of the special moments...I almost see that early morning as a chain of special moments, in subconscious levels...Very remarkable, dear Eli! :)

-- nour --
August-013

I'm glad you felt it as "alive" my sister... yes, it's alive wether it's in after-life alive, or here... it's alive... :) thank you so much for these outstanding words... as ever, you make me smile from ear to ear Sis. :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

We do that when it comes to love or dreams, our spirit calls to a higher light...
Always moving to reach our destination, even when exhaustion overcomes us...That is
the human spirit. I love that you have weave the morning breeze to accompany you on your
journey. This is breathtaking Sis! Dark, yet Lovely and uplifting...

"Yet, I was sure, I would walk until

The earth moved to another night time…

Almost unconscious, tired and feet swollen,

Lungs full of oxygen that seemed,

Inhaled three times,



A stifling rigidity, around me;

To reach the power of love’s electricity...

Awake…"


Indeed AWAKE!! ~xoxo~:)

Thank you so much my sweetes Robbie, you always have a knack to perfectly see those little things, I love you muchly! your review brings smiles upon my face Sis.

xxx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I enjoyed reading this, Eli...I'm so glad you're smiling, you mean the world to me. Love you too Sis!~xoxo~:)

Thank you so much love, you don't have an idea..... xo! I enjoyed it yesterday so much! you're the best !!! love you !

[Jack...]

And what a morning it is...I come to find one of your beautiful poems waiting for me. This was soft and filled with desire my sweet friend. I love the feeling it sent through my mind as if I walked along side you as the sun was rising, breathing in the day and exhaling my emotions. Very beautiful.

Thank you very much sweet friend for your ray of light on my page. I truly am happy to read your reviews always, thanks for the mail too, will look at it, as soon as I can :) Thank you so much.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Your words transform about with a subtle movement... as you convey to the reader... you know electricity has a way to enhance the senses... all those paranormal events nowadays... not saying this is one of those... I do like the end lines and gives this verse a release...

Thank you so much Glen, it's always a pleasure to read your thoughts... :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Goodness... I thought we were already friends... may be that's why I do not see your works pop up in the main page... I read your e-mail a while back... thanks for your thoughts also... if I missed something or someone needs a review let me know... I'm doing the pre/promotional now for my book... Just finished the acknowledgement today...

I thought that too lol, sorry for my delay, just home, was the whole day outdoors. I shall keep in contact promise! :) I wish you good luck on all your art, you write fantastic. Will support you. - Elisa

[Nkosana B Masuku]

wow this is truly a beautiful poem to start the day.Great write.

Thank you so much my friend :) happy morning to you too!

[Nkosana B Masuku]

you welcome :)

[Aethereal]

A lovely expression of what its like to embrace love through using an early morning field, sunrise, and power line metaphor. It reads as a dream. The picture fits your poem.

Thank you my dear friend, for this fine review. :-) Does my last line makes you think of living or death? ;-) I'll be back for you... breathing, time in, and poetry slowly out in the meantime... xo

[Aethereal]

Your last line forms a delightful contrast between Being and Nothingness whereby one defines the other. We wouldn't see white marks on a blackboard if the board was white instead of black

Contradictory well spelled my friend... I was curious what your brilliant mind would think :) thanks for explaining, your thoughts on that line. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I really enjoy the movement in this piece...the beautiful and tender observational movement. Even in the most delicate strokes of the paintbrush, beautiful faces and scenes can be created. You have such a unique style, and it speaks directly from your heart. I love that about your work. Well done!

Sarah love, thanks so much. Your words mean the world to me, coming from you. You humble me. I know we both go through a weird time... I want you to know, I carry for you, and am around always. Your words did do much to me this morning. Thanks my friend. xo

[David Scott]

Lovely to read you again dear EL.
You gave me a highlight in this poem.
"The earth moved in time".
Oh it does doesn't it? Yes! We are left in some forsaken oblivion as the works goes on without us. Hovering not ahead, but above us. Teasing the longing soul to reach into a space where time no longer lives...
Perfect line! Great poem!

David dear, thank you so much for being here, and your ever great reviews. :) Goodmorning from here, and read you were busy, I will pop in soon, for your new ones... always high leveled inspirations, thank you for being you my friend. I loved your review.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your poetry truly defines your soul, Elisa. If your words were food, I would never starve for more!
Love to my dear friend...


Kelly

Thank you so much Kelly, for your heartfelt review. I so appreciate it. :) Much love....x