~ Our Sky

~ Our Sky, E.L. Elisa Laura, Love, Rest, Silence, Being one

~ Our Sky

 

 

She dreamt in his arms, on a day of June;

       Till now, on the stroke of Sunlight;

Warm on the stroke of Sunlight,

      Touched by the heartbeat of Midnight

 

Loved by the fear of his heart;

     Watched by the pain of his smart;

Danced with the angels of Afternoon,

      Knowing now, would be soon...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Another one from early June, a vision...
Feel free,

Thank you
xx

Reviews

[Traci]

The music, the picture, and your words....PERFECT! So much was portrayed in these two stanzas, words filled with love. "Loved by the fear of his heart." For some reason this line stuck out the most to me, causing me to pause for a moment, to reflect on the full intensity of your words. Lovely job as always, Eli, and again, so nice to have you back.

I'm happy you felt the write sweet friend, That's a special sentence of the poem, yes. Thank you so much, also for the welcome back :) x

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Lovely vision of dreamy reality in the arms of beloved man...I liked the simplicity and the structure very much! Our sky is the private place for romance and place of endless joy and dreams..I loved "dancing with the angels of afternoon" and the pure hope, this piece radiates! great work, dear sis!

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July-013

My beloved one yes, thank you lovely one.... Our sky is, for there is much to capture, we reach definitely further there... :D so happy with you Sis. You're my gem, aklways and forever xxx thank you!

[PurpleQuartz]

This poem just has a pure beautiful feel about it. I think it really showed what love is, in such a wonderful way.

Thank you so much sweet friend.... For saying so....

[Pollai]

A really nice piece filled with a sense of serenity with fear of vulnerability. I liked this read great piece :)

Thank you dearly Pollai :) glad you enjoyed this one !

[Souladareatease]

Such Beauty and capture of a world in whole-You Pen it perfect Elisa-time bottled from the ink well!!!

Thankies, for saying so :)

[Souladareatease]

so very true!!!

Thank you again dearly...

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This had a very lyrical feel to it... I think what I liked most was the transition of time, from sunlight to midnight, because it shows the way that time does not really matter when it comes to the heart--we lose track when we are in the arms of the one that we love. Sublime word choice and a great poetic effort here, my friend.

Thank you for saying that Sarah. Always very pleased with your reviews.

[Friday]

There's a great deal captured here I think in brief. Excellent!

Thank you...

[Clockwork]

Its a very nice peacefully vision with someone quite nice to share it with. Seems to me like it could be close to realization with how the last two lines are set up...the phrasing and the suggestion in them. Good dreams seem to find her in those very capable arms :-)

*Smiling* thank you dear Christian.

[Clockwork]

You're welcome :-)

[Aethereal]

There're some excellent lines in this poem. A heartbeat metaphor may be carried further. Each year has four heartbeats, one beat for each season. Each beats for a reason.

Exactly well felt :) happy to have you around! thanks.

[J_Star]

Elisa, this is so sweet and touching, and it distills the essence of a relationship's depth into such a crafted sweet two stanzas. Nice work! Love the pic, too; the combined relaxation and intensity of their faces goes perfectly with the words.

Thank you so much J. for your nice review, I appreciate you.