~Under the Spell

~Under the Spell

A Poem by
"

~Under the Spell, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fantasy, Water signs, Sea, Ocean, Nympf, Death, Live, Life Salt

"




~Under the Spell


 


 In that night;

 

I couldn’t  see anything,

But only feel the

The wet casings of

Dense molecules,

Formed into an emulsion

And this compactness all around me;

 

In that day after;

 

I dwelled on the surface of

Nothing, between salt, and

Sea life I was;

I heard turbid noises,

Far away an intoxication of modernity

I was one, but only one with the mass...

 

In the next minute;

 

The silent slice of life

Moved through my being,

The suffocating glamour

Of a kiss mouth to mouth;

Danced within this white hole

Of memory; for now,

I awoke on land

 

In the next day;

 

I soaked in the air, like I was an amphibian,

Delightfully graced with my second life;

This cold, like thin freedom in your lungs,

The light in your eyes; “overexposed”

But the warm arm around your neck

And the smell of ozon…

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2013


Author's Note

Feel free,
With love,

Eli,
xx

Thank you!


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

Eli dear, you have a masterful write here. I love the mystic stories. I felt like I was hearing the song of the mermaids here... Now don't eat me please. ;)

One word seemed out of place. "I awaked" might be better *I awoke*
Loved this poem Eli and the music was perfectly combined to lift your words higher within the soul.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Oh Scott man! I am hungry now lol, just kidding ;) my friend thank you so much! You are so right, th.. read more
 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Your too sweet Eli. I like the little "plum fairy". She is very intelligent and she is a seeker of.. read more

11 Years Ago

You never do dear friend, for I do love your fantastic imput on my poems, :) and you never either ma.. read more



Reviews

simply thrilling! I`m so impressed from this poem of darkness, even it`s not horrible, but it`s real and ghostly, showing the true essence inside us.. trying to capture the world beyond reality of visible things..very nice flowing, the voice of the soul is so touching and haunting. My favorite is the last verses, I always imagined that i`ll fly!

I soaked in the air, like I was an amphibian,
Delightfully graced with my second life;
This cold, like thin freedom in your lungs,

The warm arm is it of guardian angel?

-nour-
June-013

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you dear, yes: "rying to capture the world beyond reality of visible things.." you're seeing i.. read more
I soaked in the air, like I was an amphibian,
delightfully graced with my second life-- such beautiful lines. Amazing indeed...

I love the feel of this piece. There is saddness, but there is also hope and the rising of the pheonix above the ashes; the formation of something new and exciting. I too feel this right now, feel these words. You are a true talent, my friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you dearly Sarah, I'm pleased you see so much in my writing... :)
i like you make such wonderful allegory...tell one story, and hidden between the lines another wonderful story of evolving in life and love..."the light in your eyes, overexposed"

almost warns of this fantasy that could be covering up bad intentions....but i don't want to take negative away from this piece, so i will consider...second life...as something like a baptism into a calm and peaceful existence...on land.

your words, beautiful as always.

jacob

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Ah jacob thank you so much, yes, I understand what you mean... in all, but I can tell you honestly, .. read more
Wow, wow, wow, I love a poem that can tell a story, I know cause I try so hard to be that kind of poet.
This is just like an awakening, I'm seeing the process of evolution in such a mystical way.. and it's frankly quiet beautiful and haunting at the same time. I love it to pieces.. I cannot believe i've missed out on reading your work, this is amazing.
Your choice in music is perfect, it gives the poem so much more depth and celestial feel.

I've come back to read this again, this is incredible.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

*I'm all red face now* thank you so much Keegan! it's such a pleasure to have a good poet like yours.. read more
Such a magical world you have created here with your vivid imagination. And the music just takes me away on a journey, again able to feel the captivating words as I visualize everything perfectly. You have a true gift my friend, and I never get tired of reading your wonderful work. Another favorite!! So nice to have you back :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you dearly Traci, for this one was the one of the sea, I told you about ;) so glad you enjoyed.. read more
Traci

11 Years Ago

Always my pleasure. And the sea, you know my thoughts already :)
I felt as though this one floated from within the womb, so wonderfully safe and mesmerizing, this is a masterpiece my love....so affecting, a dance, a rebirth on the page!! I can't say enough my sweet friend, a million over a hundred, I felt this one to my core...sigh. Magnifico!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Aw, so glad you enjoyed it, for it was exactly the way I thought while writing this one.... the feel.. read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Astounding write really Eli, I"m still affected by it, and that music is haunting...brava my sweet f.. read more
I am so sorry I haven't been on your page for a while. I will try and catch up on your writes. I'm finishing my night by reading this write of yours and I am so glad I did.

This is magnificent. Everytime I read you, you take me on this wonderful journey. All your writes are so vivid that it's like a little image is playing on my screen, I love it. It was perfect, written superbly.

Well done!

~ Noodle.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

s y e

11 Years Ago

I'll read more tomorrow, promise. Take your time, my writes aren't going anywhere. :-) I love your w.. read more

11 Years Ago

Oh yes, they do! for I've read them already ;-) loved the Dad piece. Will reply tomorrow with all my.. read more
s y e

11 Years Ago

You're such a gem! Miss you, too xo
Oh my im speechless.... the music goes with this magnificently..... oh girl stops me in my tracks spectacular....

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Kels, thank you hun, for I so appreciate your visit xx :) one love!
Lover Of Words

11 Years Ago

I am so honored to read your words
Hello again Elisa! What an enchanting poem! It held a mystical and haunting feel about it that was very captivating.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

My dear, so good to see you thank you ! :) I am catching up slow-slowly hehe, so good to see you aga.. read more

Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

1947 Views
26 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 8 Libraries
Added on June 25, 2013
Last Updated on June 26, 2013
Tags: ~Under the Spell, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fantasy, Water signs, Sea, Ocean, Nympf, Death, Live, Life Salt

Author


Writing
~ Listen ~ Listen

A Poem by



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Repellent Repellent

A Poem by Frieda P


~ The Red Moss ~ The Red Moss

A Poem by