~Under the Spell

~Under the Spell, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fantasy, Water signs, Sea, Ocean, Nympf, Death, Live, Life Salt

~Under the Spell

 

 In that night;

 

I couldn’t  see anything,

But only feel the

The wet casings of

Dense molecules,

Formed into an emulsion

And this compactness all around me;

 

In that day after;

 

I dwelled on the surface of

Nothing, between salt, and

Sea life I was;

I heard turbid noises,

Far away an intoxication of modernity

I was one, but only one with the mass...

 

In the next minute;

 

The silent slice of life

Moved through my being,

The suffocating glamour

Of a kiss mouth to mouth;

Danced within this white hole

Of memory; for now,

I awoke on land

 

In the next day;

 

I soaked in the air, like I was an amphibian,

Delightfully graced with my second life;

This cold, like thin freedom in your lungs,

The light in your eyes; “overexposed”

But the warm arm around your neck

And the smell of ozon…

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Feel free,
With love,

Eli,
xx

Thank you!

Reviews

[David Scott]

Eli dear, you have a masterful write here. I love the mystic stories. I felt like I was hearing the song of the mermaids here... Now don't eat me please. ;)

One word seemed out of place. "I awaked" might be better *I awoke*
Loved this poem Eli and the music was perfectly combined to lift your words higher within the soul.

Oh Scott man! I am hungry now lol, just kidding ;) my friend thank you so much! You are so right, thanks for helping me out, I so appreciate it, also what you did for my friend Sugar Plum ♥ for we Euro women need some help anyhow in this big English world... :) Thank you dearly for all you do, and you know, did read your latest already 5 times ;) but I need time to review.... for I like that one!

[David Scott]

Your too sweet Eli. I like the little "plum fairy". She is very intelligent and she is a seeker of great and pure truths. I'm glad I do not offend.

You never do dear friend, for I do love your fantastic imput on my poems, :) and you never either make me moody. For I'm not often moody :) so glad to have you by! Nia Nour, a.k.a. Sugar Plum, is fantastic, I read her since I'm almost on here, and she brings you to other worlds... one of my favs :) for sure as you are too!

[Eric Pudalov]

Your poems and fantasy/mystical writes always amaze me, Eli! This one required several readings, too. I think there is so much symbolic meaning and depth to them that a single read won't do them justice!

The story, however, reminded me very much of "The Little Mermaid," particularly "I dwelled on the surface of/Nothing, between salt/and sea life I was." There is so much I could say and so many things I could analyze, but the poem is magical in its own right, and I'd know it was yours even if your name weren't on it.

You are blessed to have access to such a magical world - don't ever close the door!

Thank you so much my friend, for a great review, I'm so pleased you enjoy my stuff. :)

[MsJewel]

So beautiful, as though floating in a dream above the scene you have so gracefully created with lovely images and emotions. Stunning, stunning poetry

:) Julie

Thanks so much lovely one :) I'll be there for you in a while too... xx Eli

[Mashairi]

The poem itself is a spell. It's so captivating and mystic; the words capture the mind with their wonder. love it, love it, love it ^_^. Excellent work :3

Thankies dear, always a pleasure to see you by!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

it is very nice this work of survival this aim to defy death this will to be reborn within this time-frame

Thank you my friend...

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

:)yes thx for the friendship

Thank you too, and for your beautiful words, and spirit xoxo

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

my spirit is feeling the sonic depths of tibetan singing bowls in spatial stereo right now:)

Wow, yes, well said my nirvana friend... :) I like the vibe of that...

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

u feel what i feel i know it in my bones that shiver me timbers

[annie lee]

We are witness to a mystical and lovely metamorphosis in this poem; the sensual value of the words and the dream-like tableau they support create a palpable boundary between the readers' world and the one created as we read. Very lovely and enigmatic. And for what it's worth: awakened instead of awake -- but awoke might be just fine.
Brava

Thank you very much :)

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

A very mystical write. I enjoyed reading this, and I thought it was interesting how you wrote "In that night;" and "In that day after;" and so on. It really contributed to the story you were telling.
And also, I love the image you chose before the poem. It's filled with mystery.

Thank you Mizuki :) for being here, and your kind words.

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

You're welcome :)

[Bhumi Motwani]

this indeed is a very interesting poem :)

Thanks a lot :)

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Very handsome write indeed ,my dear Elisa:) It has a very eerie yet beautiful undertone to it that immediatley grabs the reader's attention. :)

My most precious, and handsome pal :) how good to see you dear, I thought you were on hiatus... thank you so much for your words, visit, and time, my dear :)

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Anytime :)

Anytime in time is good for me, my friend, nice you came by, enjoy the summer the fullest!!!! for it's soon winter again :(

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For that is just more inspiration :)

LOL, it is actually, damn! you're right :) more depressing, more hard, more cold, more I want to write, in a half year ;-)

Well all seasons are for me actually.... all has it's beauty. And I'm somehow glad we live on the same season, for example in Australia and South Africa it's winter now... :)

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Yes :), but the winter doesnt always have to be bad. Remember my poem "Capricious" and how every season has its balance, just like we do :)

I do I do... that's why I changed immediately my mind. :D We do my friend, and I love our freedom, of time, friendship, and seasons, and space, for you are a real treasure on here! :)

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I am only a reflection of you,love :)

But I reflected of your love, so we are love... lovely friend! I love it!

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ahahhahahah I saw what ya did there :P

I"m all innocent :P hahahaha

A hippie mind is hard to understand I admit.... ;-)

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hahahaha :)

[Rebecca Buller]

"I soaked in the air like I was an amphibian,
Delightfully graced with my second life;"

Simply stunning, Eli. I don't believe I've ever read your work before, but you've whet my appetite for more. This piece transported me to another, more mysterious, world. Thank you for sharing:)

Thank you Rebecca, Feel free to come by anytime you like, and I will check out yours too... :) beautiful words!