~Under the Spell

~Under the Spell

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~Under the Spell, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fantasy, Water signs, Sea, Ocean, Nympf, Death, Live, Life Salt

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~Under the Spell


 


 In that night;

 

I couldn’t  see anything,

But only feel the

The wet casings of

Dense molecules,

Formed into an emulsion

And this compactness all around me;

 

In that day after;

 

I dwelled on the surface of

Nothing, between salt, and

Sea life I was;

I heard turbid noises,

Far away an intoxication of modernity

I was one, but only one with the mass...

 

In the next minute;

 

The silent slice of life

Moved through my being,

The suffocating glamour

Of a kiss mouth to mouth;

Danced within this white hole

Of memory; for now,

I awoke on land

 

In the next day;

 

I soaked in the air, like I was an amphibian,

Delightfully graced with my second life;

This cold, like thin freedom in your lungs,

The light in your eyes; “overexposed”

But the warm arm around your neck

And the smell of ozon…

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2013


Author's Note

Feel free,
With love,

Eli,
xx

Thank you!


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Eli dear, you have a masterful write here. I love the mystic stories. I felt like I was hearing the song of the mermaids here... Now don't eat me please. ;)

One word seemed out of place. "I awaked" might be better *I awoke*
Loved this poem Eli and the music was perfectly combined to lift your words higher within the soul.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Oh Scott man! I am hungry now lol, just kidding ;) my friend thank you so much! You are so right, th.. read more
 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Your too sweet Eli. I like the little "plum fairy". She is very intelligent and she is a seeker of.. read more

11 Years Ago

You never do dear friend, for I do love your fantastic imput on my poems, :) and you never either ma.. read more



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Your poems and fantasy/mystical writes always amaze me, Eli! This one required several readings, too. I think there is so much symbolic meaning and depth to them that a single read won't do them justice!

The story, however, reminded me very much of "The Little Mermaid," particularly "I dwelled on the surface of/Nothing, between salt/and sea life I was." There is so much I could say and so many things I could analyze, but the poem is magical in its own right, and I'd know it was yours even if your name weren't on it.

You are blessed to have access to such a magical world - don't ever close the door!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend, for a great review, I'm so pleased you enjoy my stuff. :)
So beautiful, as though floating in a dream above the scene you have so gracefully created with lovely images and emotions. Stunning, stunning poetry

:) Julie

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much lovely one :) I'll be there for you in a while too... xx Eli
The poem itself is a spell. It's so captivating and mystic; the words capture the mind with their wonder. love it, love it, love it ^_^. Excellent work :3

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thankies dear, always a pleasure to see you by!
it is very nice this work of survival this aim to defy death this will to be reborn within this time-frame

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

my spirit is feeling the sonic depths of tibetan singing bowls in spatial stereo right now:)

11 Years Ago

Wow, yes, well said my nirvana friend... :) I like the vibe of that...
poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

u feel what i feel i know it in my bones that shiver me timbers
We are witness to a mystical and lovely metamorphosis in this poem; the sensual value of the words and the dream-like tableau they support create a palpable boundary between the readers' world and the one created as we read. Very lovely and enigmatic. And for what it's worth: awakened instead of awake -- but awoke might be just fine.
Brava

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
A very mystical write. I enjoyed reading this, and I thought it was interesting how you wrote "In that night;" and "In that day after;" and so on. It really contributed to the story you were telling.
And also, I love the image you chose before the poem. It's filled with mystery.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you Mizuki :) for being here, and your kind words.
Mizuki Tsukiakari

11 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
this indeed is a very interesting poem :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thanks a lot :)
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Very handsome write indeed ,my dear Elisa:) It has a very eerie yet beautiful undertone to it that immediatley grabs the reader's attention. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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11 Years Ago

I"m all innocent :P hahahaha

11 Years Ago

A hippie mind is hard to understand I admit.... ;-)
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11 Years Ago

hahahaha :)
"I soaked in the air like I was an amphibian,
Delightfully graced with my second life;"

Simply stunning, Eli. I don't believe I've ever read your work before, but you've whet my appetite for more. This piece transported me to another, more mysterious, world. Thank you for sharing:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you Rebecca, Feel free to come by anytime you like, and I will check out yours too... :) beaut.. read more

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