Eli dear, you have a masterful write here. I love the mystic stories. I felt like I was hearing the song of the mermaids here... Now don't eat me please. ;)
One word seemed out of place. "I awaked" might be better *I awoke*
Loved this poem Eli and the music was perfectly combined to lift your words higher within the soul.
Oh Scott man! I am hungry now lol, just kidding ;) my friend thank you so much! You are so right, th.. read moreOh Scott man! I am hungry now lol, just kidding ;) my friend thank you so much! You are so right, thanks for helping me out, I so appreciate it, also what you did for my friend Sugar Plum ♥ for we Euro women need some help anyhow in this big English world... :) Thank you dearly for all you do, and you know, did read your latest already 5 times ;) but I need time to review.... for I like that one!
11 Years Ago
Your too sweet Eli. I like the little "plum fairy". She is very intelligent and she is a seeker of.. read moreYour too sweet Eli. I like the little "plum fairy". She is very intelligent and she is a seeker of great and pure truths. I'm glad I do not offend.
11 Years Ago
You never do dear friend, for I do love your fantastic imput on my poems, :) and you never either ma.. read moreYou never do dear friend, for I do love your fantastic imput on my poems, :) and you never either make me moody. For I'm not often moody :) so glad to have you by! Nia Nour, a.k.a. Sugar Plum, is fantastic, I read her since I'm almost on here, and she brings you to other worlds... one of my favs :) for sure as you are too!
Your poems and fantasy/mystical writes always amaze me, Eli! This one required several readings, too. I think there is so much symbolic meaning and depth to them that a single read won't do them justice!
The story, however, reminded me very much of "The Little Mermaid," particularly "I dwelled on the surface of/Nothing, between salt/and sea life I was." There is so much I could say and so many things I could analyze, but the poem is magical in its own right, and I'd know it was yours even if your name weren't on it.
You are blessed to have access to such a magical world - don't ever close the door!
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much my friend, for a great review, I'm so pleased you enjoy my stuff. :)
The poem itself is a spell. It's so captivating and mystic; the words capture the mind with their wonder. love it, love it, love it ^_^. Excellent work :3
We are witness to a mystical and lovely metamorphosis in this poem; the sensual value of the words and the dream-like tableau they support create a palpable boundary between the readers' world and the one created as we read. Very lovely and enigmatic. And for what it's worth: awakened instead of awake -- but awoke might be just fine.
Brava
A very mystical write. I enjoyed reading this, and I thought it was interesting how you wrote "In that night;" and "In that day after;" and so on. It really contributed to the story you were telling.
And also, I love the image you chose before the poem. It's filled with mystery.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Mizuki :) for being here, and your kind words.
Very handsome write indeed ,my dear Elisa:) It has a very eerie yet beautiful undertone to it that immediatley grabs the reader's attention. :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
My most precious, and handsome pal :) how good to see you dear, I thought you were on hiatus... than.. read moreMy most precious, and handsome pal :) how good to see you dear, I thought you were on hiatus... thank you so much for your words, visit, and time, my dear :)
11 Years Ago
Anytime :)
11 Years Ago
Anytime in time is good for me, my friend, nice you came by, enjoy the summer the fullest!!!! for it.. read moreAnytime in time is good for me, my friend, nice you came by, enjoy the summer the fullest!!!! for it's soon winter again :(
11 Years Ago
For that is just more inspiration :)
11 Years Ago
LOL, it is actually, damn! you're right :) more depressing, more hard, more cold, more I want to wri.. read moreLOL, it is actually, damn! you're right :) more depressing, more hard, more cold, more I want to write, in a half year ;-)
11 Years Ago
Well all seasons are for me actually.... all has it's beauty. And I'm somehow glad we live on the sa.. read moreWell all seasons are for me actually.... all has it's beauty. And I'm somehow glad we live on the same season, for example in Australia and South Africa it's winter now... :)
11 Years Ago
Yes :), but the winter doesnt always have to be bad. Remember my poem "Capricious" and how every sea.. read moreYes :), but the winter doesnt always have to be bad. Remember my poem "Capricious" and how every season has its balance, just like we do :)
11 Years Ago
I do I do... that's why I changed immediately my mind. :D We do my friend, and I love our freedom, o.. read moreI do I do... that's why I changed immediately my mind. :D We do my friend, and I love our freedom, of time, friendship, and seasons, and space, for you are a real treasure on here! :)
11 Years Ago
I am only a reflection of you,love :)
11 Years Ago
But I reflected of your love, so we are love... lovely friend! I love it!
"I soaked in the air like I was an amphibian,
Delightfully graced with my second life;"
Simply stunning, Eli. I don't believe I've ever read your work before, but you've whet my appetite for more. This piece transported me to another, more mysterious, world. Thank you for sharing:)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Rebecca, Feel free to come by anytime you like, and I will check out yours too... :) beaut.. read moreThank you Rebecca, Feel free to come by anytime you like, and I will check out yours too... :) beautiful words!