~ The Man of Gold

~ The Man of Gold E.L. Elisa Laura, Fictive Love, My Second World, Fantasy

~ The Man of Gold

 

When dark nights fell, and the sun was under,

          His bones started to petrify,

His body became bigger, his eyes opened wide;

          His lungs breathed the nighttime sky

 

He was made of bullion, inside his heart,

          His love was gilded like a real ray of gold

Human at day, a god at night, he seemed,

          He lived precious into his parallel world

 

His other half was far away,

          She was made of Silver with Ruby stones;

He always dreamed of her, when he felt alone,

          And embraced her with all his platonic bones

 

Their whispers crossed the universe,

          For they were made to merge like precious white gold

Now he had to turn human for the sun came up,

          So she could dream, of his voice, like a lullaby told

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Fantasy nights....
Feel free
Enjoy ! xx

Reviews

[Dean Kuch®]

When dark nights fell, and the sun was under,
His bones started to petrify,
His body became bigger, his eyes opened wide;
His lungs breathed the nighttime sky===================>My favorite stanza, hooked me from the get-go!

This entire piece, Elisa, was an epic story, at least part of one, if an elegant, poetic prose. That thumping, battle score was an excellent accompaniment to an all ready outstanding presentation...

Magnificent!

DEAAAAAAAAN buddy good to see you back again, I don't believe my eyes LOL is it really YOU???
*smiles* Thank you so much for being here, and give a glimpse of your own brilliant mind.

For I never forget any piece you wrote in history....
Thank you, more asked to continue, now I seriously have to think about that hehe... ;-)
:)

[Dean Kuch®]

Heh, you are welcome my friend. I think we both took a rather extended hiatus, no?

Hehe.... Yes we did.... thats so good once in a while... ;)

[KeeD]

Every now and then a leader is born, a king achieves a throne, a God is raised in flesh, no more worship of stone. This poem shows that prestige, that epic saga about to begin that will linger on history's tongue forever. Heroes stand out for their strength, so do your words. The strength and fantasy of this poem takes you to a place where the shadow of a warrior can cover the sun and you still feel the light shine upon your heart.

Wow, well said my friend... sigh... no words for you did move me with your review, truly!

[David Scott]

Like the very plates of the Earth reaching to find the parts of themselves sheared off ages ago the lovers reach, but never touch...
Oh my was this strong Eli!
I had an Epic feel as I read this poem. I felt like I was reading the storyline to a great video game like "skyrim".

Ah wow, glad you liked this one, for I met this dude into my fantasy world for I fell in love with him, pretty much hehe... he's my fantasy hero. :) great I need to check out that game! thank you so much!

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

this one hits too close to home, for bizarre reasons too embarrassing to mention right now; maybe after a few drinks..i need to let it brew in my brain for 3-5 days and I'll get back to you

I like the somewhat classic style and wording you use here; I'm intrigued to read some more things after I move this couch and grab a beer

Thank you very much for your time and review. I appreciate your visit, and feel free to come by any time...

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

I shall..I'm just a tad distracted atm..but I shall

Just whenever you feel the vibe.... it's a relaxed world the one of me...

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

ditto, I'll be getting back into the swing..i've been neglecting this cafe world until recently

Well we can shake hands, I'm recently returned after a too (sigh good hiatus) sometimes, I yearn to the rest and peace again lol ;-)

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

I have a collab Idea in mind..gonna talk to seth and krystal about it

Well that's great, I'm having a several projects too on the roll ;)

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

nice........

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

that's not an ellipsis..damn mandatory character rule

I think WC became also anti-facebook LOL ;-)

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

mayhaps ur right

Perbe who knows...

[Ken Simm.]

A write from somewhere else in the multiverse; where you are free to be and so is the object of your write. A remarkably creative piece of writing.

Multiverse, I love that word, used in my mind in two directions right now, Ken it's always a pleasure when you visit, thank you humbly...

[Leslie Philibert]

Nice work with a fantasy/Tolkienesque feeling, written excellently. A good poem.

Thank you so much my friend, glad you enjoyed it.

[Pax]

An epic romance that cross boundaries of Time and Space that's what i see in this fantasy filled romantic lovers between two distinct forms and culture but one that binds them into one embrace dispite the vast difference and space between them... love... the ever knowing ability of the heart to wonder accross the distance into just a step away...

A beautiful story in a poetic tale...
fantastic!

I'm so pleased you like this Pax. :) your mind did s fine analysis.... Huge hug x

[Pax]

hugs back... I am glad...

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

magic in motion
its a japanese fairytale in fashion
with a cloak of magic runes and origami
reminds me of tales narrated by my mummy

Ah my friend good to see you by, and the rich visions, I so adore them :D

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

i adore you too:)

:-) making an alien dance right now, will come back soon for more of you! p.s. hope your gingerade was nice! take care :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

twas pungently tangy thanky

lol Too much pepper prepared powers? :D

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

more like shiver shivery showers

[Androglossia]

Although this was intended to be a fantasy, you scribbled a lot of truth on here which also existed in mankind. I've read somewhere that there was an ancient myth about the thread of fate. It says that we are all interconnected with a thread of fate. And this thread of fate is attached to all the people whose lives are destined to touch and need to fine each other. This thread of fate may tangle but it will never break. I just don't remember exactly where I read this but I remember the words. So like your poem, no matter the distance and no matter the irony, once two people are meant to find each other, the universe will conspire.

That is such a fantastic thing you say here dear Maryanne, for I've read that too. It also has to do with the connected smell, of one and another, genetically pre-designed. Fantastic you see always truth in my fiction, I love what you got out of my little words my dear. If you know more about the thread, mail me about it, once you refind it ok? very interesting! xxx thank you so much!

[Androglossia]

Yes, I find it interesting too for it holds certain truth about life and fate. I will try to remember and do some research about it. I'll let you know what I'll get:) You're very welcome!

I will do the same, for you got me into it!! fantastic indeed about life and fate. And you gave me new inspiration too to write about something else ;) let you know soon love!

[Androglossia]

Please do:) I am your eager reader, sweetest!

Aw *blush* thats a huge compliment coming from you dear :) happy with you my friend!

[Androglossia]

Hugs *

[Corset]

An Epic fantasy poet series is born! I love the idea of the gold man and the silver lady, this is beautiful and hope it continues :)

Thank you sweetest, after a few requests I will give it my thoughts :) for sure why not? thank you so much for your encouriging words! Lots of Love!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is a fantastic fantasy story Eli... an infusion of magical elements!
Imaginative and mystical...gold and silver intertwine, creating a complex romance...
I envision a white-gold ring which symbolizes eternity. Riveting write Sis!~xoxo~:)

Aw, thank you dear, for that's a perfect thing you have said.... ♥

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's my pleasure Eli!~xoxo~:)