~ The Man of Gold

~ The Man of Gold E.L. Elisa Laura, Fictive Love, My Second World, Fantasy

~ The Man of Gold

 

When dark nights fell, and the sun was under,

          His bones started to petrify,

His body became bigger, his eyes opened wide;

          His lungs breathed the nighttime sky

 

He was made of bullion, inside his heart,

          His love was gilded like a real ray of gold

Human at day, a god at night, he seemed,

          He lived precious into his parallel world

 

His other half was far away,

          She was made of Silver with Ruby stones;

He always dreamed of her, when he felt alone,

          And embraced her with all his platonic bones

 

Their whispers crossed the universe,

          For they were made to merge like precious white gold

Now he had to turn human for the sun came up,

          So she could dream, of his voice, like a lullaby told

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Fantasy nights....
Feel free
Enjoy ! xx

Reviews

[Dean Kuch®]

When dark nights fell, and the sun was under,
His bones started to petrify,
His body became bigger, his eyes opened wide;
His lungs breathed the nighttime sky===================>My favorite stanza, hooked me from the get-go!

This entire piece, Elisa, was an epic story, at least part of one, if an elegant, poetic prose. That thumping, battle score was an excellent accompaniment to an all ready outstanding presentation...

Magnificent!

DEAAAAAAAAN buddy good to see you back again, I don't believe my eyes LOL is it really YOU???
*smiles* Thank you so much for being here, and give a glimpse of your own brilliant mind.

For I never forget any piece you wrote in history....
Thank you, more asked to continue, now I seriously have to think about that hehe... ;-)
:)

[Dean Kuch®]

Heh, you are welcome my friend. I think we both took a rather extended hiatus, no?

Hehe.... Yes we did.... thats so good once in a while... ;)

[Stefanie Holmes]

"Their whispers crossed the universe,
For they were made to merge like precious white gold
Now he had to turn human for the sun came up,
So she could dream, of his voice, like a lullaby told"
This last stanza beautifully brought everything together. I loved this piece and as always your writing is fantastic!

~Stefanie

Thank you love, I am always so happy when you come by! you are the best! -x-

[Antoñyo]

Pretty darn awesome and vividly captured!

Thanks for the 100/100 share

Thank you so very much :) really!

[Mark]

A poetic Love story, amidst a world of fantasy. I think I was born in the wrong world, the wrong time, or the wrong dimension, for it is places like this, I yearn for. Beautifully written!

Thank you my friend, I'm so glad, I'm not the only one, who thinks she is born in the wrong world ;-)

[A. Amos]

Like always you take your readers to a magical journey loved it.......

Thank you, Fantasy is what I mostly love and do... :) with a pinch of truth in it ;-) your thoughts are so valued my sweet friend...

[A. Amos]

You're welcome my friend

I will come back soon for you friend... late late here... :)

[NeiL ArandA]

You never stop to amaze me . This is a very good write. Your imagination and wordings are on a different plane. The way I understand is that two distinct person lives and inhabits the same body. When darkness fell the other one sleeps and the other emerges. They both long for each other but couldn't exist together on the same reality or plane. They live and exist in parallel time and place as in night and day. Wow such profound imagination.

Thank you so much brother, it's truly a gift when I see your words by. Yes, this one was a piece I did back in the days, (all on my row now are older writings) now and then, I repost them on top... :) Yes, you saw there a very good point... it's to be interpret in many ways, like the connection between the Sun and the Moon, the male and the woman, the two star crossed lovers, I am so glad Neil you felt home again in my Second world, and I'm happy I gave you a Key :) enter always, I will return the favor dear.

[NeiL ArandA]

That's quite an offer and honor I couldn't refuse. I do have a dreamy side. That's how we sometimes cope with harsh reality.

Yes, so true... ;) I do so appreciate your thoughts on my pieces, thanks again.

[ashesonfire]

Aw, a very nice love story! I love all the imagery you put into this poem, and wow this would make a very nice full blown story! Your little clip here; however, tells such a beautiful part of this love story.

"His love was gilded like a real ray of gold" this had to be one of my favorite lines for sure. Love it :D

I had more requests to lengthen this.. so I will definitely think about it my friend... thank you so very much for all your effort, and great words. Elisa :)

[ashesonfire]

Of course, keep up the good work! Definitely let me know if you lengthen it :D

I will let you know! it's a deal :) thanks so much again!

[Poetic Beauty]

This would make a great story or book. The details are stunning. Star crossed lovers to the extreme.

Thank you so very much my sweet friend, I will think about that... thanks for the imput.

[joshua deathdealer]

This is such an epic love story Elisa... "love was gilded like a real ray of gold"....True love is gold. (:

I love the way you worded it with.."dark nights fell, and the sun was under" and...."precious into his parallel world - His other half was far away"

What a romantic notion with the supernatural leaning to him changing at night then having to return to humanity with her still in this realm hearing his fingerprints left on her world...wow I love this engaging poem. I love the fantasy too!! xo joshua

Hi dear, many thanks for this beautiful review.... again, sigh, your words are tattoo's on my core, I carry them with me, always. So glad you enjoyed. I'm back from my trip, tomorrow I go hike, and then I'm fully on WC again for the week, I hope... can't wait to give my reviews for you. I hope you have a lovely eve/night to come, and if to work, good luck xoxo

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The thing that I so love about your writing is that it is all so uniquely your own. I love, and admire, your poetic voice, because you speak without boundaries; your words have wings, my friend!

This piece was magical...I am a lover of fantasy and mythology, and I saw both of those things in this piece that flowed so gently and yet with quiet strength. Well done.

Thank you so much for saying that my friend. That is the freedom I try to write, and bring over. So happy with you always by, also when I did spelled something wrong, or can do it better, please always say so :D xx Thank you once again, for we are sharing the same hobby in it.... :D