~ I Could Hear Your Liquid Melody

If you listen you can hear, another half... in words, music, love, and distance.

~ I Could Hear Your Liquid Melody

 

 

The notes of your violin,

Cried, like painful, truth

Yet hidden in the strength

Of this perfect male sensuality

 

Only you could move me, on a record,

Like a marionette, of love, making me

A dancing doll for a moment, forgotten by

All time due, rush…

 

Melancholic pleasure-

Soaking into the deep

Black hole, of being lost there,

Together, but powerful together alone;

 

On distance, I dance with you,

So close inside of my heart

We breathe the music of passion

Like we play and sing as one

 

With every gasp you took;

Whilst playing your wooden child;

 

I fell in love, and deeply in love with you,

With your music, before we ever met

 

Your hair beautifully dark as the night,

Your eyes, could draw a landscape by their own;

A sea of loneliness, wherein I could drown -

 

Your hands, as soft as silk,

Playing so gracefully in distance for me,

 

A medley of tears, for me to catch,

I would save them like little raindrops,

In this glass I’m holding,

 

I will keep them forever safely,

Next to the shell of joy,

So I can hear, but also watch,

 

 

Your  Liquid Melody…

      Mixed with your heart strings

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Inspired by Russia, and the fantastic stories and literature of this beautiful country.
Love is something elusive. Freestyle poetry/Prose, whatever you want to call it...


Enjoy!

Reviews

[Matt Sayer]

The music, defying distance. Tears and laughter, coaxed like a timid mouse by the soothing strings, the melody of moods penned by a musical heart. Truth in vibrations: spoken, sung, screamed. An orchestra of life drawing two souls into a dancing duet, the peaks, the lulls, the climactic crescendo: love in stereo.
Your poetry resonates so evocatively with me, Elisa. Love this :) xxxx

You have a gift you know that my dear friend ;) it's beyond A.I. ;) thank you so very much for digging into my work, and to feel and understand it so well.... xxxx

[Souladareatease]

...this has been a pet term of mine since days of Yore...when I play...lead on any string-I write in liquid...I think of a rolling ball of Mercury...how it moves around...free.....this is how I describe my favourite artists...be it music, paint, Pen, Dance ....Ones whom move with the flowing....weaving in and out of the structure....molding the base to THEIR whim and will----(MANY do not do this)....such an awesome capture Elise ---Liquid Write indeed!!!

Thank you so much for picking that out, dear friend, and seeing what I was trying to bring over.... clever you are, hehe! :) happy with your words always, E.

[Souladareatease]

:) ;D

[Shaunna Harper]

Awesome...beautiful descriptions and evocations. Funny you mention Russia, actually,because your piece made me think of Venice! o_0

Still, really enjoyed it. Love the intricacies in this one.

Thank you so much Shaunna... :)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Perfect poetic piece... I always feel pleasure to read your poems, since first time I started to use this site, as i was not so interested to read anything before that. :) here you come completely inside the soul and love of music, as if the string and melody stretches like hands and fingers, it`s so soothing for me!
lovely...

-nour-

Thank you so much, I thought you would love this one dear... for it's close to you :) missed reading your words, so good you're here! love and hug

[Ken Simm.]

Rich as the country, deep as the music and as layered a love poem as I've read.

I'm so happy to see you going through my latests... thanks so much my friend, for seeing these things in my little words. :)

[kublakhan27]

First off, I love the gramophone pic, you had me right there ;) It's amazing how many different emotions a violin can evoke...I can't think of another instrument that is so emotionally diverse in terms of effect..."playing your wooden child"...I love that line to death, and the way you blend music and sensuality...they really are a match made in heaven aren't they? Of course it takes a great writer to come up with unique ways to convey that partnership, and you have certainly done that here...one of my favourite pieces by you without question :) xo

Steve, my friend, thank you so much for this absolute fantastic review, I so appreciate you dig deeper into the feeling, and try to understand. :) they are... :) thank you humbly xo

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure dear friend :) xo

Makes me smile :) xoxo

[kublakhan27]

As the song goes, when you're smiling, the whole world smiles too ;) xoxo

Awww... ;) I feel humbled with you hehe

[kublakhan27]

;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

loving the music even before meeting him...

how romantic this is...and i can feel the country in this poem, the way you describe it.

Thank you jacob for traveling with me on this one ;) great to have your words by!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

*sigh* This brought back feelings I have felt in the past, my friend; feelings of loss and love and the bitter ending to what never really had a full beginning to start with. I feel as though we are all connected through space and time, and destined to intersect at given points in our life--I take this outlook on each meeting of my life, whether friends or relationships. I loved the bit about "knowing" someone and their music before you actually met, because I feel this is possible. Another dreamy piece...bittersweet symphony for sure.

My dear, thank you for this outstanding review, you have a knack to feel what is really important, and what can be a platonic love. I tell you, we are connected. :) so good to have your honest heartfelt opinion always by! I so appreciate you for being on the site, help, and being constructive here. :) thanks.

[Friday]

The allusions to music are wonderful. Melancholic is in the poem so it's taken :), but it also has a kind of light feel to it I think. Dynamic. The 2 final lines make up a superb ending.

My dear friend, I am so happy you enjoyed this, music is my life, without it I won't breathe... some don't understand why I put music with my writes, for they shouldn't that's ok, but without it, it wouldn't be me, so I am grateful you support me on it. I do love to deliver my total moment to my readers. Thank you dearly for this review.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

The love and passion you have painted is truly moving. A love this deep can make your heart cry, as if so overjoyed just to be near him...the source of burning light in which this loving soul emits.
Entrancing piece...astounding write Sis!~xoxo~

Sis, thank you for your gift, to pick up things, as good as you do. Really, that was exactly what I was trying to bring over. The sense and emotion of a "true" love, in this or in the spirit world... love and a big hug! xx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You are a glorious writer... classic writes never fade, and neither does "true" love...
Nice one Sissy! (((hugs))) xxxxx

I'm so grateful to have you by love... :) you're the ever fuel of my day Sis! :D (((hugsss))) xo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

and you are mine... the reason I came back!xoxoxo :D

Now I can say the same to you hehe!!! WC without you isn't that colorful!!! :) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

awwwww *tears* :')
Love you Eli!xxxx

Love you too Robbie, ♥ xx It's good to have you back!