~ Backwards

Love, Romance, Place to wake up, Euphoria

~ Backwards

 

 

I once belonged to steal the night, from a day,

But what a wonderful garden you’ve grown,

A window pane, so transient, visions into

Delights bloom, grace and harmony, of your own

 

Now nothing less is brought to me,

Just your eloquent voice of  rest and peace,

Burned us backwards against the clock

There is no more need to cry out the salt of tears

 

Embrace the pain, softly and with your careful touch,

Whisper it, your invisible heart, through the morning dew;

Paint the name, for it has to be buried there

Deep underneath this bed of leaves anew…

 

Now closed eyes will bring you forward

To awake into the bed of being there at home;

A place to stay, and to forever wake-up

On Sunday mornings, with a timeless love so prone

 

 

-           Elisa Laura

Author's Note

This is a write from April 2013,
I hope you enjoy! :) do what you must,
Constructive Critisism is always appreciated,
Love, Elisa

Reviews

[Rosalind Gale]

You do me in baby, my head always a mix of things when I read you. All sorts of one thing set next to another. You are unpredictable, yet at the same time, you make everything end in the way I hope it will. I so hope you are happy my dear Elise. Big kiss and hugs - my so talented writer -
Rosalind
-xxx-

Oh Rosie, sniff, you brought me tears to my eyes, my darling... you know we have such a strong bond, even when we don't hear eachother for a very long time... I thought of you that much lately, and now you just pop in, it's fate, for sure.... I hope you're well, and enjoying every tiny piece of life, and I'm there for you too in a while, I promise... my also ever talented muse. :) Love to you Rosie, and a strong hug from the Netherlands... ♥

[Lydia Shutter]

What a wonderfully romantic write this is....no more pain, just the knowledge you are in the right place with the right person. This is where you want to stay...heavy sigh! It's a garden that will bloom forever and bring you the beauty you deserve. Wonderful work. Lydi**

Bedankt lieverd, het is, de enige plek... ;-) beautiful words again by you, you make my night! -x- and a big knuffel, liefs...

[Ai Lun]

That is a beautiful poem. I really appreciate the flow to it :)

Thank you very much Aaron, I value your thoughts. :)

[Rossen]

Such a romantic glide...I would love to dance with you,I can tell that you are most graceful
as you show in the soft smooth steps taken to bring this eloquent piece to life...

Thank you Rossen, for such a gentle review. Back in the days, I did some classical dances, nice you feel that somehow through my writing. ;)

[sharonlee]

Emotive grace, such depth & compassion woven into each line. So beautiful Elisa.

Thank you so much my sweet friend... wishing you a wonderful morning/afternoon :) xx

[Michelle N. H.]

At first, I read this poem as one that concerned two lovers, a couple that had found home within one-another. A home where all the pain and hurt that ever was, had been embraced and accepted as a thing of the past, in order for them to start anew, a life together in serenity and beauty :) After our talk yesterday, I can't help but to think differently. It might as well be a piece written to someone partly lost, who can be brought forward still, with your eyes closed and your heart open x Perhaps you meant to convey two stories, two sides of the coin. Nevertheless, it is stunning poetry. Poignant and profound.

I so love what you got out of this "older one" with also a life of it's own... it seems that they all return, or I return, slowly backwards, then forwards... You're so clever Michelle... :) I"m smiling here. Thank you so much for the fav, and this wonderful review of yours... xx

[Michelle N. H.]

No worries, ever :) I loved the read and what it gave me x

I am so so grateful to you! I value your thoughts, really, so much. x

[Tina Louise UK]

A dreamy read with such beautiful imagery...love this :) x

Thank you so so much again... your presence is valued, so are your thoughts! xo

[ashesonfire]

This is beautiful :D It drew me in from the first line "to steal the night from a day"

The words and vocabulary you use flows very nice, in a whimsical dreamy way. Not to mention, I always relate Sunday mornings with someone sweet, tender, and romantic :D Very lovely.

I'm so glad you liked this older one of me. Super reviews you are giving me, thank you for all! :)

[ashesonfire]

Haha, no problem! I try to give a somewhat detailed review. I know it helps me out if I get some feedback. I find that "oh that was pretty" doesn't really give any feedback. As nice as the comment is, haha.

Yes, so true, "as I did explained that pretty much the same too in (my about me) " we think likewise in that. I don't have the time for reviewing much stories, but I will give you when I have all my effort. :) thank you so much.

[ashesonfire]

Aw thanks, not necessary though :D only if you want.

I love to read it, just lack in time, busy real life.... when I have some free time, I will give you all the effort. But I do always first much poetry... on here.

[Alys Jackson]

This is a truly amazing poem Elisa. Right from they start I was drawn in. It's quite abstract yet down to earth and full of meaning. It's a poem that I can really relate to and I really enjoyed reading it. I just have to keep reading it and I find new reasons to love it each time. Keep up the good work sweetheart! 😄

Thank you so very much, for this review sweety. I so appreciate your words. Truly, Eli xo

[Alys Jackson]

Any time sweet heart! xoxo

Thank you so much, I'll be back for you -xx-

[Alys Jackson]

What do you mean by that?

Oh I meant with that, I shall review more of you soon, (so I'll be back for you) :)

[Alys Jackson]

Hogg riiifght gotcha

[Alys Jackson]

Ohhhh riiight gotcha

He he, thanks dear! :)

[emmajoy]

' To awake into the bed of being there at home; ~ A place to stay, and to forever wake-up on Sunday mornings .. ' .. .. for me those lines are the core, the heart of your beautiful poem.. me smiling, understanding. Always so sincere and with such apt music.

Thank you so much for your heartfelt words toolip twin. :) your words mean the world to me...xx

[emmajoy]

:) .. enjoy your day, every second of it .. :)

Thank you dear one... every day anew... -xx-

[emmajoy]

you're welcome..

Answered you on the other place ;-) it was an old message luv... lol, it was meant for you though he he... ((HUGS))

[Scott Metro]

I am always amazed by the beauty of your heart..your words so well sharpened and placed gently into your splendid weaves.
You are the poet.
Sublime write dear Elisa.
Admiration.
Scott

Thank you dearly my sweet friend :) Admiration to you too always! :))

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scotty.....