~ There at Home

~ There at Home, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fantasy, Fiction, Mystery, Secrets, Cave, Home Love, Peace...

~ There at Home

 

A new day was there, I woke up into this huge cave

As big as a mouth of an animal of forlorn times

The sun reverberated through the caverns,

I stretched myself, and smiled, I was ready for a new day

 

He stood there, in the line of the sunlight

Too far away to see his face, but I knew he was

Off duty today, and human… slowly I walked to him

“Where are we”? I asked, He answered: “you’re home”.

 

I didn’t needed to know more, it felt as home,

And every breath I took, translated my heart

Into little smaller pieces of happiness

Here was no hate, or sorrow, it felt just peaceful

 

Many sound effects echoed through the cracks,

White gulls flew by, and sang their own song

And then I felt his warm hand on my shoulder, 

“Let’s go outside, my lady, I'll show you my secret”.

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Clockwork]

In some ways this reminded me of the scene from Inception where they wash up on the beach of the deepest level of dreams. In your poem, sunlight really resonates on that beach and delivers true purity and cleansing to everything it touches. The cave especially seems to be full of light and promise for a delightful adventure with a special someone.

Wow, C. rich visions again, for I can tell you it was all fictive. :) I do love probably a charming man, who shows me the way... ;) good to have you by C. so appreciate it.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Beautiful stunning piece, all words expressed in a whimsical air. Thanks a lot for sharing I enjoy reading this genius piece but my fave.

And every breath I took, translated my heart

Into little smaller pieces of happiness

Here was no hate, or sorrow, it felt just peaceful

Magnified the poem :) what a lovely words really genius :)

Thank you so much dear xxx

[CreativeStroke]

This. Was. Stunning, Absolutely stunning.
First off, the picture in the beginning is gorgeous. There is something about the shore that captures my heart.
Secondly, the story you told in such a few, short lines was mesmerizing. You had me captivated from line one, until the end. That's what great writers are made of.

Oh dear, thank you greatly, what I love about writing is, mini-story-poetry..... so much more chapters easy reading to come, thank you for being here.... sorry it's too much Eli style, but It works for me ;) xx

[CreativeStroke]

Well, I liked the style! :)

WOW that's awesome... I was afraid it didn't work, I lately love "brevity" in poems, and storie's, it's a true challenge to bring words, in shorter ways... pure, and meaningful, I'm working on that new style now... :) xx thank you so much!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a huge yawn, opens up to a new dawn...a new day of love and adventure...

i like how the speaker doesn't question, but trusts...

nice write.

Thank you dear friend, sometimes we just have to accept don't we? :) love this interpertation....

[jdr / Jennifer]

A beautifully written, elegant piece of poetry. It truly reached out and touched my heart. Such an endearing write- thank you for sharing this heartfelt write.

'I didn’t needed to know more, it felt as home,
And every breath I took, translated my heart
Into little smaller pieces of happiness
Here was no hate, or sorrow, it felt just peaceful'

Hi Jenn, thank you very much for your time and review. :) I'm glad you liked it.

[jdr / Jennifer]

It was a wonderful piece- thank you.

Thank you so much again, also for the fav! I come back for you x

[kublakhan27]

A vivid episode you've painted, and a journey that can go any number of ways...nicely done my friend :) xo

Interesting you say "episode" dear friend ;) thank you so much... xo

[kublakhan27]

;) My pleasure as always xo

I will come back for your puzzles my friend :D can't wait!

[kublakhan27]

And interesting that you would say puzzles ;D Visit any time you like, or whenever time permits...you know I always love to hear from you :)

As I from you my friend... thank you so much for your patience with me.

[kublakhan27]

No worries my friend :)

[Robin]

home , the heart , the moment , wonder filled

Exactly my dear friend :) thank you true listener.

[Chris]

An amazing pic...
Anouk is precious...

your words flow with clarity and heart.

Dear Chris, it's a honor to have you and your words here, coming from you means a lot to me. Anouk is my favorite Dutch angel voice... but she sings a lot of rock too... thank you dearly sir.

P.s. it's one of the beautiful caves in Portugal ;)

[Sahar moonlight]

very nice one Ellie. it has been long time since i came here. and it was awesome to start with such awesome poem. the feelings expressed were perfect!!

Hi my dear, thank you very much for being here, I am trying to catch up on reviews, after a turbulent time... I won't forget you sweet natty! xx beautiful words...

[Jack...]

Wow, this was beautifully enchanting...

“Let’s go outside, my lady, I'll show you my secret”.

So very alluring dear Elisa.

I hope you are feeling better.

Thank you so much Jack!!! yes, I do a little... :) happy to see you here!

[Pax]

mysterious... i see my friend the traveler, the explorer of beauty and love... i see that no matter where you are, at any given place and time, as long as the person next standing besides you is your happiness... then when ever you both travel.... the person next to you will always be the home in your heart...and that's all the matters... hugs to you dearest for a another yet amazing poem!

Oh dear, I love how you worded this, thank you so much... you know me well. :) lil brother, love you! xx HUGS

[Pax]

I knew you well because your my big sis who always have my back... your most welcome... ~ hugs tight

:-) that gives smiles on my face dear... Hugs xxx