~ There at Home

~ There at Home, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fantasy, Fiction, Mystery, Secrets, Cave, Home Love, Peace...

~ There at Home

 

A new day was there, I woke up into this huge cave

As big as a mouth of an animal of forlorn times

The sun reverberated through the caverns,

I stretched myself, and smiled, I was ready for a new day

 

He stood there, in the line of the sunlight

Too far away to see his face, but I knew he was

Off duty today, and human… slowly I walked to him

“Where are we”? I asked, He answered: “you’re home”.

 

I didn’t needed to know more, it felt as home,

And every breath I took, translated my heart

Into little smaller pieces of happiness

Here was no hate, or sorrow, it felt just peaceful

 

Many sound effects echoed through the cracks,

White gulls flew by, and sang their own song

And then I felt his warm hand on my shoulder, 

“Let’s go outside, my lady, I'll show you my secret”.

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Clockwork]

In some ways this reminded me of the scene from Inception where they wash up on the beach of the deepest level of dreams. In your poem, sunlight really resonates on that beach and delivers true purity and cleansing to everything it touches. The cave especially seems to be full of light and promise for a delightful adventure with a special someone.

Wow, C. rich visions again, for I can tell you it was all fictive. :) I do love probably a charming man, who shows me the way... ;) good to have you by C. so appreciate it.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

lovely mysterious poem ! I like all the place, the cave has deep meaning, its safe and wished to feel that atmosphere! You write it like from another world :)
Here was no hate, or sorrow, it felt just peaceful

{nour}
23.06.013

That's what I love, to write from another world... ;) hehe, thank you so much my dearest! for feeling with me on this one. :)

[Friday]

Very nice wording epic styled. An open ended piece it seems. Wonderful!

Tack så mycket min vän ... ;)

[Friday]

Er was zo Weinig..... lol

LOL.... :D Less is more ;)

[Zahra]

Great imagery. It's amazing the way you've sketched this story and characters on our minds without even describixg them so much, in a short poem.

Thank you dearly, nice you say these things...

[Zahra]

you're welcome!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

A calming scenic write...
feels so peaceful alongside the music...

great work :)

Thank you so much Yas :)

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Amazing. :)

Thank you Mehak ;)

[Deuces]

Your imagery and knack for creating scenic beauty within your poems is always breathtaking. Loved this... gave new meaning to a new day and new beginnings. Much needed. Thank You.

Thank you so much my friend for this lovely review.... indeed much needed for many.... take care, :) Elisa x

[Androglossia]

I liked the concept, it's lovely and ethereal. It brings hope and promise. It carries rebirth and acceptance and most of all, it offers love:) The picture is beyond the ordinary. But I don't like seeing its opening because I'm claustrophobic and it made me feel hemmed in, lol. It's just me dear. I developed this illness since second grade when I and a classmate were stuck ina sewer but more often than not it's tolerable:) The entirety is serene and is very soothing to the senses. Very well done, love.

Thank you my dear for again a wonderful review, ah I can very well understand your statement, that must have been terrifying.... X

[Androglossia]

Sometimes it terrifies the hell out of me :) You're very welcome!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Breathtaking!... this was a dreamy vision Eli!... it was mysterious, romantic, and tranquil as well...
You kept me fascinated through the entire piece!... The ending has left me wanting to know what else will happen, what is this secret... ?
Lovely weaving of art!.... Stunning write!

Thank you so much my beautiful sis ....

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Thank you for bringing beauty on the pages, Sis~XOXO~

You're the best, your song made me so happy... (((hugs))) xx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

SO glad!..XXXX...(((hugs)))

[sharonlee]

Beautifully composed Elisa.
xxox

Thank you so much love xxxxx