~ ’T Was Like the Renaissance

~ ’T Was Like the Renaissance, E.L. Elisa Laura, Surreal, Renaissance, Dreamworlds, Far away, There...

~ ’T Was Like the Renaissance

 

 

Exactly there, when I closed my eyes,

And watched into your glorious world of eloquent need

"Free and rid from pain"

 

Captivated still, she was dancing on that hill,

But she felt the chain of heaviness

Around his neck, getting rusty and smelly…

 

Now, all absorbed by green dreamed hue,

Left alone his trail of hurt, a moment came;

There flew by a little ladybug, upon his chain;

Telling her story through echoed splendor,

 

She lost her mind, in time, but tender…

Gasping for air, but seasons unfair,

"And she only could whisper";

But ‘t was enough for him to understand

As she died in his left hand…

 

“ He is the gateway to further future ”

He could hear her voice echoes say;

His howling along the never ending day, -

Lost for now on, though, profound he was,

Feeling her climbing through his glass …

 

“Drinking her…

            absorbing her…

                        Tasting her…

 

 

And to die a little,

With her…“

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you for being around x
But I guess, only a few can understand ;)

Reviews

[Kenaz]

This is a dream of a piece. It reminds me of one of those 70's experimental films at first with the dancing on the hill (hard to explain). The only thing I would say is that the poem has an overall serious tone but the word "smelly" really brings me out of the ether here. You don't have to replace it on my word but I would recommend a synonym such as "foul". This way you have still a similar meaning but it brings that stanza back down to where it needs to be.

I see the vision you mean, I know what you mean... that typical kind of retro feeling. Thanks for the thought, I would think about it.... :) I'm happy with your recommendations on my work T. It means a lot you're helping me out, on any matter.

[Kenaz]

No problem E.

[Lover Of Words]

this is so wonderful... Amazing job my dear

Thank you love, for your unconditional support and I will be back for you...

[Lover Of Words]

It's my pleasure. Always here for you

So I am here for you dear friend xx always!

[Lover Of Words]

Thanks i am honored
oxox

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, the melancholy in this is rich. What exquisite images you have painted with your words, Elisa! Freedom is so precious and too often the chains we feel bind us are of our own making. There is death here, but it seems to be a new beginning....one that will be brighter and more serene. The romance is tender. A haunting melody to accompany your words! Just a wonderful package. Lydi**

Thank you so much for this fantastic insight in your review... my sweet friend, you always bring me a smile! :) knuffels van mij!

[Dhaye]

What more can I say on this? Perfect!
Pain has ended. Rebirth...regeneration of love... So touching.
I really admire something like this because I love fantasy but haven't tried yet to make one.

Thank you dear for this lovely review, I do love fantasy, it's one of my most favorite things to write about, but I can write also about maths, and science... for many *urgh, and very cryptic...

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*Applause*

Beautifully expressed and written, love it!

Thank you very much, Saima

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You're welcome. :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Good work.

Thank you dearly Ken... :) sorry for my lack in time... I won't forget you ever!!!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Very beautifully written, and the picture is amazing--you did a great job matching it to your words. I like this one...reminds me a little of some of Sylvia Plath's stuff, just more colorful. Well done!

Oh feel honored by your visit and words, but that's too much for me dear friend, but thank you dearly :) Sylvia is one of my favorits too! how beautiful you name her. Hope you're well, I shall come back for you, after fighting my flu ;) xo

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

She is probably my all time favorite...along with Dickinson. Your words remind me of hers in your exploration and taking on the "tough" subjects. You're quite good!

Oh, and now you name my second favorite too... It's great to connect with you, and share thoughts, :) so are you friend!! I always am in a new world reading your work, but yet, so close and familiar, like feeling home... thank you for being around, appreciate it.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

:) I appreciate you too!

[Androglossia]

Where there is love there is pain. To dream for love is courage. To yield oneself completely to love is divine. Bearing the things that may come along the way to the extreme is nobleness. Loving someone in any condition or circumstance is intrepidity. This is an impressive write, my dear and the imagery you painted here for us is beyond ordinary. I especially love the last two lines.

My dearest Maryanne,

I am seriously thinking about to put your words to frame and hang.
This is like a tile on my wall, for if I once again want to watch.
You always expire philosophy to my heart, and your empathy, is like the tides that smooth and good. Thank you so much... always a little present for me to read your thoughts xx

[Androglossia]

My intention was to give my thoughts about your poem in a most eloquent way. I am surprised and glad that it has such a great effect on you:) And yet, you are more than worthyof those words:) You are most welcome, dear..

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Reading this gave me chills... the end was WOW!...
You are a magificent storyteller, as well as a wonderfully enchanting Poetess...
The music accompanying your poetry is soft, yet eerie... brought me to a place of sadness. An Elegant write, my dear Eli!~xoxo~

Thank you so much beautiful sis xoxo, your words are the fuel of the day for me now!! :D

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I hope you are better Sissy!... Remember, Vitamin C!
I'm off to get some sun (vitamin D)... :)
XXXX

I will take some right away, some oranges... :) thanks for all sis love you xxx

[icelandicblue]

The ending gave me goosebumps. What a masterful stroke of your pen! To love completely is to be enlightened.

Thank you so much my dear friend... and what a nice new pic of you!