~ There Was No Time Left

~ There Was No Time Left, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fictional, Poetry in between, Man on Fire, Flames, Fire, Fireman, Husband? Wife? Love? Pain, Death, Afterglow...

~ There Was No Time Left

 

 

 

 

There was no time left

In his dark room full of smoke,

He was too late

There was no time left

To save her,

Embrace her,

 

 

To feel his heart melted with hers

By day, she would be gone,

Choked into all what was left

Maybe she was no more…

 

 

Yet, he was calm, to his core,

He knew there wasn’t more pain,

He coughed and fell down

With his head on the floor

 

 

 He saw her face, gleaming in red

Was she the lady he never had?

Was she the smoke in his lungs

The spell of his death?

 

 

There was no more time left….

No time,  no nothing…

Left to be said

 

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Feel free ;)

xx Thank you

Reviews

[realmwriter]

"Was she the smoke in his lungs The spell of his death?" Oh my what a powerful line.

I can answer this question.

She is the vapor in my breath where I am just the mist
She is the cloud in my head where I am just the dream
She is the reason where I am just the existence
She is the soul where I am just the body
She is the light where I am just the shadow
She is the vessel where I am just the fragile

She is the scream caught in my throat
The tear I refuse to shed
She is the why to my question and the answer
The question I refuse to ask
She is my future and will be my past
The now I refuse to leave behind
She is my comfort and my joy
The reason there is a smile on my face

I love her more each day as we live our lives away.

Awesome poem, It was a joy to read...!

Thank you so much for this wonderful review, with a heartfelt poem inside of it, lovely words, friend!!! feel honored by your visit, and I'm glad you enjoyed! :)

[realmwriter]

The honor is mine. I've enjoyed all that I have read of your writings. Oh and incidentally, the music for this piece is rather striking and fits perfectly. I rarely listen to music while reading a piece unless it is something I was already listening to but this, I had to listen...!

Thank you again so so much... :) for all your words. I come back for your art... running out of time, and obligations, you know how it goes... really glad that you enjoyed it!

[realmwriter]

As am I and You are very welcome...!

:)

[realmwriter]

:) you keep sending me little smiles like that and I will be blowing you kisses...! :) LOL

Aww *redface* I've received them LOL thank you friend... ((Hugs))) x

[realmwriter]

:* I really wish WritersCafe had emoticons...!

That would be fun, indeed... but I guess they don't do it, maybe cause it can distract so much from all writing on serious base...

[realmwriter]

Could very well be...!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Sometimes we have done wrong to someone we love, realized our mistake and decide to make it up but it's over...there's no more time left.
I hope I can relate to this.
Good job, Elisa. And oh, a nice choice of music, too.

Aw, dear dhaye, thank you so much for this take on my words, interesting thoughts, it brings you, it are your thoughts, so I highly appreciate this... just beautiful thank you. - Elisa

[CreativeStroke]

"There was no time more left…" I believe you want the words 'time' and 'more' switched around here.
I really liked this piece Elisa!
The way you played with the words and took us all on a journey, it was a captivating piece. Well done, as always!

Ah yes, dear, thank you.... that's cool you notice that, you're right. Again thanks for helping me out. I'm so happy with you! :)

[CreativeStroke]

Some times my brain just picks those things out, other times I skim right over and don't even notice!

I do like it when you notice.... I felt myself a huge fool, and thanks to you I could fix it ;) xo

[CreativeStroke]

You aren't a fool! Everyone makes small mistakes in their writing. I do it too.

[Veronica Chandler]

~Elise~
I am spellbound, enchanted and mesmerized by this incredible journey you set me on with this piece from your spirit. The image captured me, your words I read again and again as I listened to "Blueneck ~ Lilitu for the first time. I cannot begin to describe how meaningful it is for me to be introduced to new music.

Thank you so much dear Veronica, your words mean the world to me... this is a piece, I wrote in the car... I will explain you soon more about it... your embrace here is so treasured! thank you kindly! and so happy you like Blueneck, I live through music, and lyrics... a lot :)))

[Veronica Chandler]

I live and breathe music, words, art and nature too...
;-)

That is so good to know about you, makes you whole!!! ;) thank you so much friend!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is eerie Sis!...gives me chills...
and the music is haunting... I truly feel the demise of the man who felt the smoke of death... perhaps she was there to give him comfort in his last hours...
The story within this piece has my mind reeling... WEll Penned!

Great thoughts, on my words sis, you read my mind always.... :) I have a weak for fireman's lol..... ;)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

They do make us weak in the knees don't they? lol ;)

Haha oh exactly you feel the vibe sis.... they do ;) lol

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Yes, I feel you! (he he)

;) hehe..... xoxo you have to see that smile on my face right now :P

[Robbie~xoxo~]

:))

[David Scott]

Oh my... this picture haunts me... How many days have I felt like i was drowned in thin air. My soul floating away without anything to keep it held inside me. A fluttering of wings as my life looses meaning...
Ok, back to the write. We often loose ourselves in the fight to save what or whom we love. Yet, we always find oursleves when we feel averything is lost... Even in time. In reality, there is time. There has been, there still is, and there will be. It just will not be what we thought it was supposed to be.
Loved the emotions you sparke in my heart with this write and picture. The music is perfect too! I need a late night and some relaxation to enjoy the song more.

I like your maze of thoughts my friend, of questions, and answers... always, thank you so much for being here, I was about to enter your page too in a while... :) Time is so timeless, if we think about time, it goes ways back, before all, and all is time... yes, I'm curious if time can stop? of that it will excist after all is destroyed? so many interesting thoughts you give me here. Thank you for liking the music too... :) my friend, always a pleasure to read your words. - Eli

[beautiful dreamer]

wow! just wow this is amazing!

Thank you :)

[RedInk524]

To me, this is about a man who accidentally loses or kills a close friend with his own demons. The fire represents his demons, the room the relationship, and the smoke the building poison from his demons. He cant control the fire, and he couldn't save her from it. And so he is left to wonder what she could have been to him and to mourn what was lost.
Interesting write.

Wow, I love your thoughts, upon my little words my friend, you have an unique way to dig deeper into the psyche of many, and maybe yours? anyway this was brilliant as ever... :D Thank you deeply for a most insightful take on it... :)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

beautiful poem about the death and the fingers of unexpected, kreeping to anyone, strong vision you creat here dear Eli, I can see all the room, the fear and the blood, and still there is calmness inside, as we know there is no time left.
{nia}
02.04.13

So good I could took you there to feel the moment, I like your words so much... they always make me think deeper, hugs sweet friend x

[Pax]

vission of near death on smogs creating an illusionary perception of what would be become... sad... and dark end... until time will just end and death will come... a tragic tragic poem dearest friend...

Pax, my dear, thank you for being here, unless I'm so off lately... I will come back for you :D can't wait.... thank you for your beautiful review.

[lost girl]

to be that smoke...it is so fleeting. almost choked by one's desperation of meant or not meant to be. want is such strong overwhelming addiction...so confused with love or need. I always leave your palace feeling stronger...revived!After I read and feel your ..hear your sounds. I wanna run into the rain screaming ...releasing all doubt...feel the wind ripping through my soul...depleted of all the smoke, dust, dirt, ..my soul raw..new. you have such a handle on capturing essence ...connecting fire and ice. your gifts are undeniable! your a true artist!

Seeker, you're a brilliant writer yourself, thank you so very much for this ray of words upon my little ones... :) I feel really blessed to have you now and then by, and I will come back for your art, goosebumps, and thrilled to read your words. - Elisa

[Veronica Chandler]

If you have not already seen it you would most likely enjoy ~Nahko Bear~ Medicine for the People http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YsgP8LkEopM
Enjoy In Joy

Thank you dearly for the recommendation, I shall check it out, and let you know dear! :) always share music with me, it's a must ♫ ♥

[Veronica Chandler]

Count on it...This video has exquisitely compelling imagery.

Such a beautiful piece of music friend, those lyrics and notes reach to your core.... to find the guide inside... lovely ♫ do you know "Diane Arkenstone"? I bet you do... ♥ and "Oliver Shanti" ? I bet you do ;) with you I can talk :D great video........... :) so happy you recommend.....

[Veronica Chandler]

I do know Diane and Oliver both... I am thrilled you enjoyed it, the video has been like a mantra for me lately and I am certain I will be chanting new tunes soon enough...as I am sure you will too.

That would be beautiful my friend... my work lives with music, and I can't live without it, indeed... and I am truly happy to discover yours... you're a treasure!