~ There Was No Time Left

~ There Was No Time Left, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fictional, Poetry in between, Man on Fire, Flames, Fire, Fireman, Husband? Wife? Love? Pain, Death, Afterglow...

~ There Was No Time Left

 

 

 

 

There was no time left

In his dark room full of smoke,

He was too late

There was no time left

To save her,

Embrace her,

 

 

To feel his heart melted with hers

By day, she would be gone,

Choked into all what was left

Maybe she was no more…

 

 

Yet, he was calm, to his core,

He knew there wasn’t more pain,

He coughed and fell down

With his head on the floor

 

 

 He saw her face, gleaming in red

Was she the lady he never had?

Was she the smoke in his lungs

The spell of his death?

 

 

There was no more time left….

No time,  no nothing…

Left to be said

 

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Feel free ;)

xx Thank you

Reviews

[realmwriter]

"Was she the smoke in his lungs The spell of his death?" Oh my what a powerful line.

I can answer this question.

She is the vapor in my breath where I am just the mist
She is the cloud in my head where I am just the dream
She is the reason where I am just the existence
She is the soul where I am just the body
She is the light where I am just the shadow
She is the vessel where I am just the fragile

She is the scream caught in my throat
The tear I refuse to shed
She is the why to my question and the answer
The question I refuse to ask
She is my future and will be my past
The now I refuse to leave behind
She is my comfort and my joy
The reason there is a smile on my face

I love her more each day as we live our lives away.

Awesome poem, It was a joy to read...!

Thank you so much for this wonderful review, with a heartfelt poem inside of it, lovely words, friend!!! feel honored by your visit, and I'm glad you enjoyed! :)

[realmwriter]

The honor is mine. I've enjoyed all that I have read of your writings. Oh and incidentally, the music for this piece is rather striking and fits perfectly. I rarely listen to music while reading a piece unless it is something I was already listening to but this, I had to listen...!

Thank you again so so much... :) for all your words. I come back for your art... running out of time, and obligations, you know how it goes... really glad that you enjoyed it!

[realmwriter]

As am I and You are very welcome...!

:)

[realmwriter]

:) you keep sending me little smiles like that and I will be blowing you kisses...! :) LOL

Aww *redface* I've received them LOL thank you friend... ((Hugs))) x

[realmwriter]

:* I really wish WritersCafe had emoticons...!

That would be fun, indeed... but I guess they don't do it, maybe cause it can distract so much from all writing on serious base...

[realmwriter]

Could very well be...!

[B-poet]

Lots of powerful imagery and emphatic lines within this well written poem. Love the picture as well it adds a aura of suspense for the title to set up a backdrop for an intriguing theme for all eyes to see. Great write Elisa, I enjoyed everyline. :)

Dear Bpoet thank you greatly for this touch to it............ x

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Some of these lines are amazing, my friend! You've broken through the barrier with this one for sure. Time...the exploration of there not being enough or sometimes being too much; it's something I often wonder about myself. I love the metaphorical nature of this piece, as it can be anything the reader chooses for it to be.

I like it when you say: " The barrier " that was exactly I wanted to provoke, I have a weird mind, and weak for fireman's.... don't ask me why, lol maybe visions, from antoher lifetime.... who knows, Time is my worst enemy, you felt it here somehow... I can love time, but I can loathe it too. Thank you dear for your wonderings, and brilliant mind jumps into this piece. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I completely felt the barrier, and I felt it being broken. These words resonated, my friend.

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"Was she the smoke in his lungs The spell of his death?"

This poem, this poem is truly amazing! Very well done. :)

Thank you so very much, for feeling it.... :) be back for you Saima x

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You're welcome. :)

[Don Shaw]

very powerful!!

Thanks Don :)

[Birdman313]

a nice word of expression in this poem

Thank you Birdman :)

[Birdman313]

your welcome

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I really apprecate the lucid nature of your writing, definaitely one to recite out loud, well done

Glad my friend you liked it :) thank you !

[SHEEMA HUQ]

you are very welcome Elisa, I certainly did, I do so enjoy reading your work :)

That encouraged me to always keep writing my dear :) after my flu (which I hope is soon), I will be back for your stunning works... xx

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Dramatic and powerful words play, great write.

Thank you dear friend :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome my friend it is great piece, I felt the intense feelings in story progression, every words expressed here is amazing.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

The music is also amazing match the nature of the poem. great picture also love it!

So so grateful by your visit, and words, I shall come back a lil later ;) x

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I enjoy your works dear.

And I do yours.... :) one of the most fragile pen you have.... ;) and that's beautiful.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Dear :)

[Jack...]

Desire often lends to the flames of the heart, to what we seek and perhaps even feel that we need, but alas, where there is fire, you find the smoke, congesting our thoughts, clouding our dreams, tempting us to reach in and hopefully not get burned. This was dark, dear Elisa, deep and filled with temtptaion and longing and so very beuatifully written, It encased me within my own dreams and reminded me to wake at one point or the other and breathe.

That's a pretty clear translation of what I also wanted to convey with this write, you word things always so beautiful Jack, happy to have you by my friend. :) I can't wait to come back for your art... have a lovely afternoon! :)

[s y e]

Wow, you dragged me in from the very beginning, took me on a captivating journey! I loved it, it was amazing. The way you play with words is just amazing! I loved it, well done sweetie!xox

Thank you hun xoxo :) so happy when you come by always :)

[s y e]

I am sorry I havent been by more often, had alot on my plate lately, I'm reading now :-) xoxox

Awww, no worries lovely, really, I am sorry to hear you had alot on your plate, and I hope things go a bit better for you right now, I'm off also alot, for the same reason now and then ;) plus, I have right now a bad flu in my body :( not hitting me yet how it should, but out of concentration for reviewing, it started yesterday, so I'm on to read, absorb all the beautiful artists on here, read them, and keep their work in mind for when I feel better... :) and wanted to tell you, do not ever rush on me love, I'm here forever ;) xoxoxoxo sweet girl

[s y e]

I'm getting there, slowly, ha, it'll be all be fine soon :-) Awwww, I am sorry to hear that hun, I hate the flu, it drags you down :-( Get well soon my darling, yes we do have some very talented writers here! Reading them is great and very inspirational for sure! :-)

You are so sweet and kind, I will always find time to read your works, how could I not?! They are breath taking ;-) xoxoxoxo

I was reading you too, :) all your poems are so good, good English, and I learn much from your wording, I will review you soon, can't wait, the messages you bring have always something important to say, that's what I so like about you. :) you're amazing my friend, thank you for all what you do and are xoxoxo :))) with your embrace, I will get better soon ♥

[s y e]

Awwww, thank you so much, that means alot to me :-) You are so sweet, take your time, get better first, thats what is most important, then come back and read/ review until your heart is content :-D Thank you again, means the world! xoxox

I will love, thank YOU dear, xoxox you're the best !!! all my good wishes to you ... in my thoughts xo

[s y e]

Thank you, so are you! Amazing as ever!! xoxo