~ To Wait a Lifetime

~ To Wait a Lifetime, E.L. Elisa Laura, Life, Questions, Fictional, Fictive, Lyrics, Music, Road Spirit, Poetry in free style, Trains

 

~ To Wait a Lifetime

There in neat thought patterns

Driven by society

Not listening

To your true heart

Feelings ignored from the start,

Where you are caught up in?

A web of self lies?

Knowing what you really want,

But  enforced priorities howl

As hungry wolves, in the center

Of your soul to growl…

Your emotional sensitive side

Just being run over by

The metal of the drive

Then, to wait a lifetime

For that train to come

Makes us terribly mortal

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Reeti]

There is a sense of viciousness over excessive social obligations thrown on our shoulders. No wonder we are disoriented. How ludicrous it is that we may have had or still have prodigal experiences! We become interminable slaves to what others want. Your verse helps me to realize this pitiable fact. Personally, when i am to listen to someone else's pressing advice over what i should do with my life, there do seem to be 'howling of hungry wolves in the center of my soul to growl'. I become restless and perturbed as what the verse depicts. I'd also like to point out that the alliterative effect on reading it is pleasing to the ears.

Aaah Reeti, dear, thank you so much for this utterly beautiful review, so shooting, to the core!!!!! :)

[Deuces]

You have an incredibly deep mind and an old spirit and soul. Writes like these show how life is both equally short and long and how our inner demons inevitable take control of our day to day, even if our heart feels otherwise.

And we do keep waiting for that train, don't we?

Adding to favorites - stellar.

Hi dear, yes, I'm an old soul, and I become younger each living day :D great you catched that dear!!!!! not many do.... Exactly, it's a MMA fight during days, and a defense, through personal struggles. WE do wait for that train, he!!! finally someone who does understand me profoundly.... lovely one! xo

[Tree]

The machinations, ––––the structure, of society has no heart. It is a beast that has the power to crush those who stray too far. And yes we can become trapped. In your piece you make reference to the "wolves" inside. That hunger for freedom, to break free of society's norm and just Run. It can be suffocating when we are cornered, and no where to turn. I particularly respected the way you ended the piece: ''For that train to come/ Makes us terribly mortal.'' Here you are making the case that the futility of it all, might just be justified. These are some of the things I will take with me. Thank you for sharing, Elli.

Hey Bro, thank you for such a marvelous review here. You perfectly felt it... as always! You're welcome, more to come soon, and I'll be soon back for your artworks, the Dutch poem is here right now, I typ it over for you ;) it can take a while... but i never forget. :) translation will be with it. - Elisa

[Pax]

I feel the society’s forceful sad truth… margins and realities tight hold for gold… “Feelings ignored from the start” ~ I felt that too many times before… and I don’t mind at all now… because I learned… its better just a distance away than to be around in a circle of all the “web of lies”… “Knowing what you really want, But enforced priorities howl As hungry wolves, in the center Of your soul to growl…”~ oh how this speak to me in so many levels I can’t even utter… better left in silent perhaps… “to wait a lifetime” ~ is just eternity in the vastness of our soul… awesome one dearest friend..

Hey Paxie, I thought you could connect with this one dear, I hope all will be good soonffor the both of us, thank you for your nice philosophy... Always, x E.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

This is really wanderul, many atimes we are carried by self lies, but behind it lies the real imaginaton of thought. this is good. well done.

I wonder what "wanderul" means... no kidding ;) we are, when a human being is fully honest? I wonder why... I am. Always. Thank you so much friendly friend! x

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chukwuebuka Benson]

just a typing error. I appreciate the poem. Thanks

Ah, no worries at all, I really thought you meant something with that words, my bad.... take care, will be back for your writes dear friend :) so many thank yous!!!

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chukwuebuka Benson]

Thank you so much.

You're so welcome, I can't wait to have more time for all of you on here, I lack of time, and I feel so bad about it.... :((( till soon!

[emmajoy]

Guess we have to find that time when we don't ask if we may, if we can .. we just do it carefully but, without guilt. There's no way I'd deliberately hurt anyone, but we have do what we feel is right, especially when it comes to ethics. Happiness surely cant be found on paths we're dragged along because someone or society is making us submit - Big Brother like. We know, you know for sure - your sensitive writing proves that.. that there's a right and a wrong way to be and more than one. Your writing always, always triggers thought .. takes a friend and reviewer into think.time .. and as it's late, will now lie in bed and find it. Hugs for yet more wonderful writing

Thankies luv, I went out, needed air.... tonight, just back a while, and felt asleep... your words are always lovely to wake up with, and fall right after asleep with, dear... thank you so much for this awesome review, full of what the "search" of life maybe is? (((Dutch-Hugs))) to England... x

[Belle]

The first four lines caught my attention more.
The pattern set by society is a deaf order, it is true.
I think following this un-natural order is living for others and not just for oneself to attain balance.

Thought provoking piece, Dear Sis.

Thanks sis, xx

[Baby Ricochet]

Beautiful piece EL. I even know who dead can dance are and I'm kind of a red neck.

That's awesome Baby :D:D thanks!

[Souladareatease]

Beautiful Haunting truth within Writ!!!
Lovely Work!!!
Nice choice of musical Artistry as well...

Thank you dear odysseus :)

[J. J. Nightingale]

Sometimes social morays, and morals get in the way ..

When we are aged, and confident .. we become strong

It takes time to know what we truly need and want to be ..

You, my little dove .. are a artist, who paints her own paths to travel upon ..
And I love you, for writing and singing freedom's song ...

Jasmine xo

Thank you so much Jasmine, for your words right to my heart... xxx

[Alexander Rodgers]

Ah yes, such a true concept. You have a nice talent in the free verse style :). Good flow and imagery, like a good poem should have.

Thank you dear Alexander :)

[Alexander Rodgers]

You're welcome!