~ Bubble Waves

~ Bubble Waves, E.L. Elisa Laura, Echo's, Fun Writing, Fun Rhyming, Fiction, Other Dimensions, Poetry

~ Bubble Waves

 

 

There were once two bubbles in the occult sky

And they had one direction,  upon storms high

 

Slowly closer to a parallel world they sang their song

She danced in her thoughts, and bubbled along

 

He was  dreaming words in waves, with no escape

While he was swirling echo's in  his red super cape

 

She needed to wake up, but the time was not right

He in her mind knew, and not fought the fight,

 

They waved thousand frequencies through the misty air

That was the beauty in bubble waves for them to share

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Kristallo]

Ah, this is lovely. Two separate entities, lost within their dreams, loftily roving the wide expanse of sky in a bubble world that's all their own. I wonder if they are aware of one another- or perhaps he and she are totally immersed in their seclusion. Maybe it's a bit of both, as you described how she needed to wake up, but the timing was not right. There's a soft note of romance to your vision. I loved the third couplet, especially, and the line, "He was dreaming words in waves, with no escape" was brilliant. This flows with mystic grace. Well done. :)

Thank you so much sweet Kris, for this most insightful review, you gave me a huge smile on my face...your words are always so close to what I am trying to say with this poem... I love reading you. Thanks for being here xx

[Belle]

It is perhaps my strong attachment to reality that I was not able to grasp the intent of the poem, but thank you for this review, I have the meaning now. Surrealism is really yours, my Dear Eli.

Thank you Belle, for your words, hon. x

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

So imaginative and creative! I'm impressed...this reminds me of a Bjork song for some reason. The imagery was spectacular. A few little things with flow could be tightened up, and I'm a bit confused by the second line in the fourth stanza--right and albeit don't rhyme as your other couplets do. Overall, though, i truly enjoyed the read :)

Thank you so much, great you give me constructive critisism, I like that, just help me out, as a Dutch native speaker it's so hard sometimes... :) give me suggestions, and I will think about it, thank you for your help, and support. :)

[Frieda P]

Oh my, bubbles...you hit the right note here. How special Eli, this one floats away with the imagination. Perfect music for this one. Brava my friend.

Haha, thankies love, it's a bit spacey though, I feel spacey lately ;) Muah! X

[Frieda P]

Ha I was ask you what you were on but I thought better of it, now that you brought it up! ;-) squishy hug coming your way! xo

LOL, aw, thanks so much, I needed that one ;) I can't wait to feel a bit more talkative and give some spice on here ;) lol xxxx

[Frieda P]

Take your time, sometimes spacey is a good thing! Lol xxx

Haha! yes it is *__~ lol xx

[kublakhan27]

I love water and any kind of water-related imagery, especially when it's presented with this kind of beauty :) I love this one, it's one of your best :) xoxo

I'm so grateful to you dear Canadian :) thank you for your beautiful take on this piece... xo

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure El :) xox

Thank you so much again... even when I'm not so talkative these days, ;) you always are with me! my friend xo

[kublakhan27]

You know I am...take care my friend ;) xo

You too ;) xo

[Stacey Watts]

Oh to be lost in a dream like this. I love the way this flows. This was very beautifully written and you did a wonderful job with the imagery. I love escaping with your work.

Thank you so much, a bigger compliment I can't get.... hence to your last words, dear, thank you for reading, I will come back for you xx

[Distant horizons]

Beautiful images, bubbles floating and just being. Oh, I wish I was a bubble :-)

Bubbly huggers to my friend :-) thank you so much!

[icelandicblue]

This is so...pretty. I could imagine flying in a bubble just by reading your stellar words. A wonderful story. I love it.

Thank you very much dear fellow writer and poetess :)