~ Bubble Waves

~ Bubble Waves, E.L. Elisa Laura, Echo's, Fun Writing, Fun Rhyming, Fiction, Other Dimensions, Poetry

~ Bubble Waves

 

 

There were once two bubbles in the occult sky

And they had one direction,  upon storms high

 

Slowly closer to a parallel world they sang their song

She danced in her thoughts, and bubbled along

 

He was  dreaming words in waves, with no escape

While he was swirling echo's in  his red super cape

 

She needed to wake up, but the time was not right

He in her mind knew, and not fought the fight,

 

They waved thousand frequencies through the misty air

That was the beauty in bubble waves for them to share

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Kristallo]

Ah, this is lovely. Two separate entities, lost within their dreams, loftily roving the wide expanse of sky in a bubble world that's all their own. I wonder if they are aware of one another- or perhaps he and she are totally immersed in their seclusion. Maybe it's a bit of both, as you described how she needed to wake up, but the timing was not right. There's a soft note of romance to your vision. I loved the third couplet, especially, and the line, "He was dreaming words in waves, with no escape" was brilliant. This flows with mystic grace. Well done. :)

Thank you so much sweet Kris, for this most insightful review, you gave me a huge smile on my face...your words are always so close to what I am trying to say with this poem... I love reading you. Thanks for being here xx

[Belle]

It is perhaps my strong attachment to reality that I was not able to grasp the intent of the poem, but thank you for this review, I have the meaning now. Surrealism is really yours, my Dear Eli.

Thank you Belle, for your words, hon. x

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I know some of this love story....I've never heard the ending though:) wondering if the world keeps them apart or is it just their natures. Either way, love the way you cast the characters and brought them full scale. The music lets me know that this vision is time sensitive. Thank you for always casting light on those bubbles.HUGS

Thank you so so much my lovely friend. Maybe I will work on a second part.... :) you inspire me to do so. :) many hugs love! xx

[Carl Drake Barnard]

The struggle love of lovers. Its a strong effect that controls both groups in a relationship. Strong write, love the message I personally got from it. For telling me that in love you must always be aware of the people around you,and everyone has their own feelings. Really inspiring write Eli :) Hehe and still your heading got the most out of it hehe :) Truly mind Controlling Heading hehe Loved it! It's own little randomness I must admit hehe. And love the picture that you got for it :) All and all Great write, and superb wording and the form also plays it's well earned role. Really inspiring Eli Hehe*

Thank you so much sweet friend, :) your words are highly appreciated !!

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Any time Poetess :)

........... :) thanks poet!

[ron]

How beautiful thoughts intertwining can be. This is beautiful with a scent of sensuality.

Hi Ron, thank you for the lovely comment on this one, I'm sorry I'm so slow on here, but I come back for you, as soon as I give my full review round :)

[ron]

Thank you Elisa. Take your time, I am of little importance here, there are others to read.

No, don't say that, you are def. not! but I do love to take real "time" and effort for someone's work, like the writer put also into it, so that can take me as a Dutch a while, do not feel neglected...

[ron]

Thank you. I don't feel neglected, I feel blessed to know and share with every one here.

Good you don't feel so, have a great day Ron. Until you see me by!

[ron]

Have a great day dear sweet poet xoxo

You too Ron xo!

[Lover Of Words]

You truely are one of the most talented person i know and that is a high praise my love this is so amazing every line as such power and emotion to it such grace and truth unbelievable this write is such a beautiful peice kind one that just lets you see only the words and not hear anything or see anything else it has that much depth

Oh sweetie, thank you so much for all you do lately. I reposted two older ones, as kind of a rebirth of late.... thank you for diggin' into this one, can't wait to be back for you ! xo

[Lover Of Words]

This one is a very special piece

Thanks a lot again.............. :)) sleep well love, I hope you're feeling a bit better xx

[Lover Of Words]

Feeling sickly to the tummy tonight so i am just poping in and out for your beautiful uplifting words

Ohhh sissy, please feel well soon, I had a flue over last weeks, but it's all better now, I know how you feel, take a good rest, drink lot's and make some Jasmine rice, and boullion... poetry can heal, but you need to get better Sis. Time is golden, relax, and let it all come over you. Don't stress.. it will be ok. xxxxx strong strong ((YOU))

P.s. I know where it comes from, but try to keep on smiling, you are stronger than you think girly!!! :) and soon there is a sollution. I promise.

[Lover Of Words]

i have been sleeping alot lately headache chills and and tummy that just feels woozy but in time i will be okay thanks love

You're in my thoughts, darling heart... I wish you so well.... you deserve it sweetie. xxx

[Lover Of Words]

Thank you sweets

It's that we such have one of the most far time differences, but if I was near, I would carry for you... take good care, sweetie, I'm off to bed... think of yourself, and get some rest too ok? xx I will be back soon :)

[Author Unknown]

Splendid couplets with rhythm. The picture is perfect to compliment your piece

Thank you dear Author Unknown, but so known by me.... :D

[Michelle N. H.]

Your writing is interesting, always. It really makes me think :) There are so many ways one could go with this.. A bubble is transparent. You see right through it as if it isn't there at all. It's a safeguard, a shelter and a filter. It keeps the outside world at a distance, yet things can enter the bubble without bursting it. It resembles an aura too, colorful, when the light shines upon it. It has many shades, different sides to it, like all individuals. In this reality, we live in our own unique little space of existence, that's what most of us identify it. The bubble holds information, all that we are, and it is shared within the atmosphere, through thoughts, energy, frequencies.. We pick up on it, without knowing what it is, sometimes, as with the man and the woman mentioned.. That's my own understanding. There is so much this piece of writing holds. It is like a bubble all on its own! Wow.

Thank you so much dear friend for this great and splendid insight, towards this write... Oh you think so likewise as I do when I wrote it.... Tis a blessing to read your words, sorry just am recently out of internet, so I'm on my phone, so I can be slow, but wow, can't thank you enough luv xxx

[Michelle N. H.]

That's alright. You're very welcome though :) Loved it.

Thank you dearly :) it was an older one, but it seems it has a pattern of it's own, (it's coming back) every time, when there is a universal silence ....

[Michelle N. H.]

I'm glad you put it up front, made it more apparent again! It's a great piece and speaks of much truth, that comes from taking that pause :)

Yes, the last two ones, do... there is always a kind of rebirth, in my writing... and it shows it's the time now, for a change... so the past helps the future in the circle again... I'm grateful to you Shell, you are awesome for seeing deeper than the most. xx

[Michelle N. H.]

I'm grateful for your writing. It's amazing, it does good ^^ Thank you, Eli x

And I am for yours, truly! you bring a special flavor to the cafe, that's honestly unique, serene, and full of pathos. Pen on! I will be reviewing your whole library soon :D xx

[Michelle N. H.]

Haha, thank you so much for that! wow, what a compliment! I can cast the same onto you, so I will :)) You really do have a special pen.

No worries, about my library lol, there are simply way too much to review ha ha, and even a tons, unpublished and in the re-make lol. I love being around friends silently, like my brother Vince ;-) just when we feel right, we need to review xxx no rush ever on me! hugs to you, sweetheart.

[Michelle N. H.]

Yeah, I've noticed you hold much poetry here, haha :) and I see the similarity between you and Vince, in how you think, through your writing. I'll be back to review when I feel that urge to read more then ^^ I don't doubt it'll be soon.

Perfect!! :) I see why he loves you too! :D it's awesome... (he's very selective). I hope to be back tomorrow, on our normal day time lol, and go through your writings. They all have much to tell me. Tak søster søvn godt, og se dig snart .... xxx :) take care.

[Michelle N. H.]

Haha, he is a great personality :) Tak! I lige måde (you too). No rush with me either, tot later ^^ Tabee :p

Haha oh Tabee, love it, it's Indonesian you know? ha ha..... my blood too!!! you're awesome! xxx :P

[Michelle N. H.]

Haha, so are you! I seem to be mixing those languages pretty bad, but you always now what I'm saying, that's kind of fantastic :D

Yeah!! I do, we just are so multi-cultural, and lingual both I think... two mongrels lol.... :)

[Michelle N. H.]

Definitely mongrels, haha, and I do love languages ^^

Oh we have so much in common... lol ^^

[Michelle N. H.]

Sure seems like it ^^

[Scott Metro]

Inter-dimensional taste to this....
Pretty thoughts....gave me the feel of a cosmic love in this plain.

Excellent.
Scotty

Oh thank you so much again. :) *smiling* to you Scotty Wolf :)

[Scott Metro]

My pleasure always.
S.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

OMG!! This has new meaning for me tonight!! Refreshing!!!
I read this over and over... before, and now... it all makes a huge difference, Sis!

Especially since we last chatted... WOW!

How lovely this bubble is... It is to be cherished!~xoxoxo~:)

I love you, thank you Sis. :) Yep.... I do cherish my sweet bubble gum.... chew on it, it never get wasted.... ;-) as do not any soap bubbles, or future bubbles ;-) he he... xxxxxx thank you so much, for all the courage you gave me tonight... xxxxxx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Sis, you crack me up!... :D
and you are my courage too... (((hugs)))...
Thank you! Love you more!~xoxoxo~ :)

Love you most!!! truly, without you, I didn't had such a good night here..... ♥♥♥ See you tomo! sweet Sis. (((HUGS))) xoxoxo

[>.]

Hi Elisa Laura, this was so cute and filled with a playful joy. I could feel the rhythmic beat of their journey entwined with our world and one unknown. Bubbles never seemed so cool until just now. Thank you for sharing.

Thank you so much dear new friend, I totally love your review, this was a write, an older one, but yet, a vision I had, for the future ;-) there is only love in my world.... thank you so much.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Bubbles are great symbol, which could tell so many stories...It`s lonely and dreamful and also not so easy to broken in its own world, as it exist without norms outside, it`s just free and soaring in the space..so I feel we need this bubble to let our mind be high and free from all chains. great poem!
{nia}
02.04.13

Exactly we need them so much.... you and me know why ;) thank you dearest x