~ The Silent Rose

~ The Silent Rose, Elisa Laura, E.L. Romance, "The Man on Fire" Poetry

~ The Silent Rose

 

 

Words spoken out loud,

In a dream of silence

Days, run away like trains

On rusty railways

Doors open, for new passengers

But I'm holding on my rose,

Petals with each a story

To climb in my daily mind

To tell me; as they keep me moving

With the color of deep red

Fragrance and mortality,

Are born in little treasures...

I Watch them fall down

Piece by piece slowly on my knee

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Inspired by a favorite Movie of me... :)
Thank you xx

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Splendid imagery in this one, Elisa. I could almost see the petals falling slowly and tickling her knee. The music is hauntingly beautiful! "Days, run away like trains on rusty railways" heart touching emotion here, my friend. Excellent work. Knuffels, Lydi**

Thank you so much Lydi... so glad you enjoyed this. Heel veel knuffels... good to see you back!!! :)

[joshua deathdealer]

Times is rushing by and here I am still waiting with this dying rose for you. I love this!!
Beautifully done. xx

What movie if I may ask?

Thank you very much joshua.... so glad you felt this one too... the movie: "The Man on Fire" in that movie, lays simply everything where we can learn from.... :) the little girl, reminded me of someone ;-) you have to see it....xoxoxo

[joshua deathdealer]

I should have known by the song! I have seen it. It is an awesome movie and the lil girl always reminds me of Anya of course. What a sad ending huh?

He he... yes, :) Pita & Anya, lovely ;) such a sad sad ending, but done out of full love, so it's beautiful... (to die for).

[Ken Simm.]

I was originally going to say this was sad. But now I'm going to say this is full of pathos. Which is another thing altogether.

Thank you so much for feeling the pathos Ken, till soon..

[Jack...]

There is something very special about your poems, they all seem so dream-like but so very real. Reagrdless of the picture you paint, I can see it clearly in my mind. It is a very real experience Dear Elisa whan I read one of you poems. I feel as if I am outside of my own being immersed in another life. This was absolutely beautiful and like an invitation into your world. I truly loved this poem. I hear this read in whispers upon a cool breeze.

Thank you dearly Jack, your words always highlight my day, I'm on a little hiatus right now, but I promise to come back hopefully soon... because I need to read your work! Very grateful to you my friend.

[Christoph Poe]

The video in your notes began playing on my computer automatically, and I'm really happy it did. The mood went beautifully with your words. This is an amazing piece written by a writer with--likewise--amazing potential. Keep doing this, and you'll go somewhere one day.

--Christoph Poe

Thank you dearly Christoph, for your encouriging words, and the time to review, appreciated,

- Elisa

[Sugar Plum ♥]

This poetic piece is one of my favorite too! It contain so much pain and so much truth, it`s so vivid and colored in red, it has all symbols of life and of going time", we are looking our life going slowly like petals of rose, all is inside our memories for the past and future too.
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02.04.13

Yes! so true, exactly... it's a moment catcher of all to be, and to leave or have lost... x thank you immensely.

[S]

Sometimes in life we dont want to move on...
we just want to stay there still with each piece of memory we have
I felt the petals were like memories, each with their own fragrance..
Slowly when the realization of time creeps into our minds, we feel the memories dying..Like watching them fall on your knees ...
How amazing are first two lines...I keep on reading it again and again...
It just gets better and better...After reading this poem, I realized that great poems have nothing to do with great lengths, rhymes and "never ever heard of" words!!!!
This is something really connecting with the readers...Good job :)

So true, great review my friend, yes... those little petals have each a story, and as life is mortal, and transience, it is also with nature... the more you go write poetry the more you will see it needs shortness. To captivate a moment, of truth, in a few lines, is the difficulty, Thank you so very much for your time, and great words, and within the time, you will see me on your page. - Elisa :)

[Horizon K.]

A fragrant moment, a moment within contemplative moment. It gives me peace to read this. As time passes by may we appreciate these petals, before the wind catches them and blows them away with our memories...
How I feel when I read this. Beautiful dear Elisa.
xx Horizon

Thank you so much dear sister for your lovely words, and interpretations, so appreciated to see you by! :D xx

[PurpleQuartz]

I'm applauding you right now. This was such a strong captivating piece that you deserve all of WritersCafe to stop and give a review.

'Words spoken out loud,
In a dream of silence'
I love how this starts!

Thank you so much my fellow writer, feel so honored by your words xx

[David Scott]

I could smell the rose in the line "Fragrance and mortality," as you breath in the delicate rose held like a prayer. I felt the petals shake the earth as the fell beside knees that were planted in dark soil. This poem takes me to one of life's pleading moments. Yet this pleading was more silent than the sound of those same fragrant rose red pieces of life floating to kiss the soil they came from.
A lovely picture.

Ah David, such a wonderful review, your words, make me see new things... and they are precious. I'm grateful to you.