~ The Voice of Silence

~ The Voice of Silence, E.L. Elisa Laura, Freestyle Poetry, Near Death Experiences, River, Illness, Sad Poem, Fantasy, Streams, Water, Love, Life, Heartbeats, Spiritual, Nature

~ The Voice of Silence

 

 

 

When you stood there upon the stream

Your eyes, so pointed at me,

I tried, but couldn’t reach you

Just too much water in between

 

Then you tried to scream at me

Lips moving like a slow motions act

Your hands around your mouth,

The only thing I heard were just whispers

You were there, silently loud

 

The only thing that I could do, 

Was waving with my hands 

To make you move along your way,

To let you run away from me,

With me you couldn’t stay

 

But on the end of the river

I found your body there, and all alone

Not knowing, I moved myself with you

I must have jumped into the river,

But alas, I was too late, you were gone…

 

So I cried in silence,

And moved along my road,

Still hearing those whispers

Those silent whispers, 

And near me a heartbeat of yours

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

The silent whispers of death do come to us well before our time is up. They remind us to cherish every day and to live each day as if it was the last. After hearing those whispers, a person is changed forever. This explains why your poetry is so deeply moving, sweet friend. May you be able to write it for many years. Knuffels, Lydi**

Lieverd, bedankt voor je mooie mail, Ik zal snel reageren :) you understand this one so well.... exactly... there is so much more, and it changes you forever... your words touch me deep.

Eli xx and knuffels :)

[Nick.B]

A very sad and dark poem with a beautiful imaginary a love that is lost and will never return is one of the worst things that could happen...anyway great job, love your style

Nick , thank you so much for your words, review, I"m happy to have you here, I run out of time, but I will be back for your work ;)

[Joe]

Ahhhh Heartbreaking Pen!

Fav Lines:

"So I cried in silence,
And moved along my road,
Still hearing those whispers
Those silent whispers,
And near me a heartbeat of yours" / Ahhhhhh Lovely Expression!

Enjoyed Eli :) xo

Thank you Gabe, always! xo :)

[Ken Simm.]

Coming across the river, perhaps death, to greet the one she would be with.
A beautiful write full of archytypal imagery that resounds across lives. A remarkable set of wishes that seem to come from the soul of the writer. I am very impressed and moved.

Ken, it touched me deeply this touched you too. It was a real vision, when I was very ill, before I passed out, last June, now all is ok though... :) Maybe I was afraid to lose my man, and never come back... thank you.

[Inda]

Silence never said so much; you've captured mannerisms and the significance of actions
as well as the reactions and have told a story that is about more than life and death,
but about love and trust and the effect of silence; how it can equal a lie- at least that's what i got.
this is Great!

Thank you dear friend, for your beautiful words xx

[char]

Another beautiful piece you have here, dear friend. The fact that you share that deep connection is awe-inducing. Love, love, and love this! :)

So grateful to you Anna... this was a very special personal piece of me. It had to do with me being out of the world... and I saw this vision before.... much love dear x

[Constance L. Hartwell]

Love may appear to be painful at times but it's just an illusion. Love is all there is. It's beautiful and blissful, always. When I read this piece it brought back memories of the many relationships I have been in. Excellent job.

Hello dear, thank you so much for your words... they always mean very much to me, hug!!

[emmajoy]

Love has a way of being its own master or mistress, can warm - can chill, can drown -, can thrill ..and seems through your quite beautiful poem to drift into disappearance and a little of one's heart goes along .. tis a sad piece of writing. I so want to wrap a hug around its emotions.. and you.

Yes dear, it is the most sad one, this one was from last year, I will when I'm back from the hospital, explain you all... And also the exact meaning of this one... Love to you thankies for being here today xxx

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Your imagery is spot on! This was a sad write that I could feel and taste the pain within! Awesome writing!

Thank you so much dear xx

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Welcome!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is haunting...I have chills reading this...(my heart is broken)...
The ending takes me to a place of silence in which pain is a whisper that keeps talking to your heart. Heartache pours in this beautiful piece. Amazingly expressed Sis. ~xo~

"But on the end of the river

I found your body there, and all alone

Not knowing, I moved myself with you

I must have jumped into the river,

But alas, I was too late, you were gone…"~ This leaves me awestruck.

Thank you dear sis... this was a true vision I had... before I passed out (in June 2012) that time when I was so ill. I couldn't share it for a long time... didn't had the courage. Your words mean so much to me/us love... thank you for reading, and for your beautiful review... xx

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

WOW! What a great poem of silence when silence shouldn't be there at all. I can really see the river in my mind, you and your lover on each side of it, screaming in silence. Haunting, unforgettable.

Thank you my sweet friend, I've missed you and your writings, I hope tonight, to have some time... :)