~ The Voice of Silence

~ The Voice of Silence, E.L. Elisa Laura, Freestyle Poetry, Near Death Experiences, River, Illness, Sad Poem, Fantasy, Streams, Water, Love, Life, Heartbeats, Spiritual, Nature

~ The Voice of Silence

 

 

 

When you stood there upon the stream

Your eyes, so pointed at me,

I tried, but couldn’t reach you

Just too much water in between

 

Then you tried to scream at me

Lips moving like a slow motions act

Your hands around your mouth,

The only thing I heard were just whispers

You were there, silently loud

 

The only thing that I could do, 

Was waving with my hands 

To make you move along your way,

To let you run away from me,

With me you couldn’t stay

 

But on the end of the river

I found your body there, and all alone

Not knowing, I moved myself with you

I must have jumped into the river,

But alas, I was too late, you were gone…

 

So I cried in silence,

And moved along my road,

Still hearing those whispers

Those silent whispers, 

And near me a heartbeat of yours

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

The silent whispers of death do come to us well before our time is up. They remind us to cherish every day and to live each day as if it was the last. After hearing those whispers, a person is changed forever. This explains why your poetry is so deeply moving, sweet friend. May you be able to write it for many years. Knuffels, Lydi**

Lieverd, bedankt voor je mooie mail, Ik zal snel reageren :) you understand this one so well.... exactly... there is so much more, and it changes you forever... your words touch me deep.

Eli xx and knuffels :)

[Traci]

Eli, this is such a brilliant poem of silence, well penned tale that took me along a dark journey. This vision is so heartfelt, truly heartbreaking.

"So I cried in silence,
And moved along my road,
Still hearing those whispers
Those silent whispers,
And near me a heartbeat of yours"

Very powerful words.

The courage and strength it took to share such a personal piece is very admirable. So much more than just words….you captured the true essence of life, death…and love.

Traci hun, I just love you for who you are, as honest, and pure .... I wished more were like you in this harsh world, you're such a goodie. My love to you, for you feel me always, mail soon xo

[Kenneth The Poet]

Rushing River = running away I think. It can't go backward unless some traumatic force happens.

Thank you my friend

[Dr. Wood ?]

well this evoked a few tears......brilliantly told tale of love lost....terrific stuff

Thank you dear, it was real..... :) nice to have you around here.

[Dr. Wood ?]

I will return..as soon as I get this damn hanky dry

[Rosalind Gale]

Hey you! Well, I have been away from here, not written so much, and then the first thing I see (almost) is your poem. Thank you for the words, the feelings, the devil inside you, and the wonderful way in which you have taken me on this dark and frightening journey. I will be back to read more of you, I am sure. Please take care -
Rosalind
-xx-

Thanks love, for your beautiful words.... hugs, and kisses!!! I will be back for you too, glad to see you back again xxx

[Rosalind Gale]

-xxxxxxxxxxx-

xxxxxxx sweetie, I never forget your stunning quill :D

[Rosalind Gale]

:D Ha!!

[1 Deep]

Great story told here, it's like you're an expert at taking possible real life situations, and describing them poetically. I enjoyed the ride

Thank you so much dear, you will find out the real reason reading beneath... your words are little treasures, and I won't forget to come back for you.

[1 Deep]

Sorry to hear you were so sick, but it is interesting that you had this 'vision' while passed out, and also interesting that you were able to write so elegantly about what you had seen. Thanks for sharing with us.

Most welcome lovely friend... :) I'm all ok now almost... so a lot of smiles, and livingly happiness your way :)

[lesbeat]

I am a songwriter so I couldn't help singing your poem to the tune of Paul Simon's song Sounds of Silence. It fits really well to in that tune!

Oooh thank you so much for this, yes, I'm a great fan of him too.... he is amazing, yes, it fits so well. ♫♥ great absolute ears, and keen insight you have :) makes me smile......

[Tierra Starr]

This is a wonderful and heartbreaking poem. This is amazingly written :) Good job! I couldn't imagine losing the one I love forever. Never being able to speak any more words, never able to kiss again...with a gust of wind, the fire disappears.

Ah thank you dear Tierra, yes, I had the same, with my lover... I was afraid maybe to lose him, not turning back to earth, again... beautiful review. xx

[Tierra Starr]

I'm truly sorry if you have felt this loss with a love. I would honestly be lost. He has saved me. Death is such a sudden divorce.

Well, I had a near death experience last year, june, I'm now all ok :D fortunately, but this was the vison I saw before I passed out, I saw my man standing acros the river, and I felt, a chance I wouldn't return anymore, but now, after all I did... ;) so I 'm so gratefull, happy livingly amazed, it can be all good after all.... and there is nothing more I would give up for such a sweet man as my man is.... such an experience make you live even more... so thank you for your beautiful words, and so good you're around! xxxx

[Tierra Starr]

I am happy to hear that you are doing well now. I can imagine that would be terrifying. I feel that in the final moments of life and death is when one can learn the most about themselves and the life they live. Thank you for sharing your work, it is incredibly inspiring.

♥ You're the best....

[Pax]

heartbreaking ending.... i felt the sad longing aura... the stillness of the waters barrier... a surreal dream of the loud silence... silently watching the person drifts out leaving.... you keep on thinking, thinking but nothing on which is best to do until its too late... a very vivid neardeath experienced..

dearest friend the hunting vibe sends chills.. still, beautifully written...

Thank you dear Paxie, this was the archytypal imagery of my cortex I had before I passed out twice June last year... the time I was phisically so ill, didn't dare to share this poem until I felt stronger... (was emotional). But I'm so glad I'm back and grateful to be here still for a longer time.... thank you for this most sweet and wonderful review. xxx means a lot!

[Pax]

oh no! really... I'm glad you got through with it... and now stronger... like i always said to you... please do take care of your health....your most welcome!

Muwah! x

[KAREN]

Sad, longing for a love that can be reached. Felt this poem, heart felt words.

Thank you dearly :) good to see you back :) x

[KAREN]

You're welcome! Good to be back!

I've missed you, and your writings, I shall be back soon.... :D can't wait! xo